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Lightosphere


just a starter brony working to create a few out-lines and maybe move on to bigger projects, either way this should get intersting.

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Boulder Bruce, Flamella Frays, Wind Writer, and Nadia Mesi are fairly average ponies when they meet for a small concert, but when they leave they are told they were almost glowing in four different colors; green, red, blue, and white. Later the ponies begin experiencing strange happenings and cannot control themselves. These event lead to their investigation by Twilight Sparkle and Celestia. Once together again their magic is so powerful that Canterlot nearly crumbled from the exertion of the planets forces. Knowing now the power they have they expand and reach out to help and save as many people as they can, the new question is what would happen if something went wrong? Though their powers are impressive will they be enough to defeat discord again, if not it could mean distruction for Equestria, and possibly, the world, for he has a plan to turn at least this universe into chaos let alone other ones along side Chrysalis, Tarik, the returning Nightmare Moon, and also a new villain that could take the world and crumble it under hand. The four must stay together to defeat this armada of evil and save not only ponyville, not only Equestria, not only the world, but the universe

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 22 )

Hello there I just want to say thank you for reading my story, I will be adding more to it and I shall try to document the time of completion of each chapter.:ajbemused: I know real boring but still, it will help you know when the next part of the story should come out. If I'm out for whatever reason :pinkiesick:I will tell you guys.

ch1: 4/5/14 5:17 PM

Comment posted by Lightosphere deleted Apr 22nd, 2014

Hey guys the chapter 2 was finished 4/10/14 10:57

and a special thanks to my father and friends who helped and are going to help me with this: MrBiohazard92, moongoddess, and David

Oh and I know that these pictures on here are a bit off bit they were the closest things I could find.:twilightblush:

You coulda told me you mentioned me for all to see

Oh and the color for air is yellow

Sorry but this image was the best, and closest thing I could get. Your welcome by the way, I'll change your name immediately.:twilightsheepish:

PS: chapter three!!! finally... 2/24/14 9:49

>>moongoddess
Hey you wanna help me make parts of this story or others?:pinkiehappy:

Not that I wish to sound criticizing, but exactly what was the point of this chapter?

It's a fair story with a good concept, but the one thing I think it could use is more insight on the quirks of the ponies involved. Just a thought. :twilightsmile:

As I read this further, it seems rushed and thrown together, for want of better phrasing. It is a good concept, but the structure could stand a bit of work.
There were also a few errors I noticed as well: The second 'their' should be 'they're.' Also it should be "...her house burned..." (One of the hazards of doing your own proofreading. :twilightblush:)

4540530 To show the begining of how they all meet. to kinda pull the charectors a little closer together

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