What happens when arrogant young Rainbow Dash needs braces? Naturally, she is less than thrilled with this. Luckily, she encounters a filly whose just as terrified as she is. Or perhaps even more terrified. That filly is young Fluttershy, whose having a little trouble conquering her own fear of the dentist.
Note: I made the cover art myself, using vectors and Paint.NET.
This is my first post on here, so don't hold back with the criticism.
Love this. I think you captured their personalities perfectly.
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Oh screw the subtlety, TAKE ALL MY HEARTS!!!
Ugh. I loved it. Not super complicated, no huge grammar mistakes, personalities were on point, cute plot, and all around great story. Is this truly your first fanfic? If so, you earn a follow, because I need more of this simple and picture perfect way of writing.
While many people's first story give people cancer, I think this one will give them diabetes instead because of its sweetness. Nice story.
The story itself was great, although there were a couple formatting issues at the end where it moves to a new line where it shouldn't. There's nothing wrong with the writing, just the formatting.
4356097 Not my first ever fanfic. Just the first MLP:FIM fanfic that I've actually finished, revised, and posted. Also, thank you
Try to depart that monster paragraph other then that it's was adkroble :3
A wonderful little slice of life moment, and certainly a great way for the two of them to properly meet. I hope to see more in this style; it's very well done.
Very good I love filly stories
Daww nice story.
Aww, that's cute. :) Always nice to see simple, gentle stories like this. A lot of writers neglect those in favour of huge, complex epics and I think there's always a place for them. Also, I'm a complete sucker for filly FlutterDash friendshipping!
This was a sweet story, but a little hard to read since the paragraphs weren't spaced out.