#2-27 was hatched like any other changeling, She was trained like any other changeling, and failed her training like some changelings do, and was put in a group like any other changeling, and was then given a mission to do like any other changeling. She was meant to die at the end of a pike in the name of the Queen, what she didn't do, was just that. She went rogue.
This is my first ever story so criticism -if useful- would be much appreciated as I'm not used to having an outlet for my creativity.
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I'm liking the story but seeing a bit of writing errors. There's a guide here if you're interested, it has a lot of great tips!
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Yea I know. The point was to 'just do it' as my friends told me to so, I did.
Not bad i hope that you have a continuation planned as i think its an intriguing base, a few errors but nothing major and all easily ignored
I really like this! I saw a few grammatical errors, but for the most part, you did pretty well.
One thing that I think you really shouldn't have put there was the sentence the officer spoke about 'why didn't you just go rogue'.
I'd really like to see this continued, I really felt like it was just a first chapter and it has lots of potential.
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Ah, thank you. I've changed what he says, hopefully it fits better now.
I'm curious about what those poison joke vials did. Also, did the distraction actually achieve anything? We never find out.
Still an interesting story. I hope it goes well for the fleeing ling in the end.