Chapter 1: It Begins
The greatest crisis to ever befall Equestria was the battle known as the Legendary War. It was a day like any other in Equestria. Birds were singing in the trees, ponies were trotting down the streets in pleasant conversation, and Derpy was eating a muffin. Suddenly, she noticed it was getting dark outside. Confused, she looked up at the sky to see several Decepticon warships overhead. Ponies fled as the ships landed and released ground forces, which began to attack those who weren’t fast enough.
In their plot to take over the entire galaxy, the Decepticon’s massive fleet went on a destructive rampage that brought all of Equestria to the depths of despair. But Equestria had warriors who stood against that immense evil! These warriors were known as the Super Pony Sentai! All 39 teams of them arrived to battle the Decepticons. With love, dreams, and peace, the 39 Super Pony Sentai had protected the smiles of ponies for generations! Every single Super Pony Sentai attacked the Decepticons all at once!
GekiRed tripped a Vehicon and jumped on his back while Jetmares attacked from the air. AkibaRed, distracted by GekiRed’s amazing fighting skills, tripped on a rock, fell on his face and several Vehicons tripped over his prone body. The Kakurangers, the Ninja Captor, and the Hurricanegers fought as a group, destroying hundreds of Decepticons. VulEagle, DenziYellow, and Red Buster were fighting along side each. The PoQgers were switching colors while AkibaBlue blindly strack out at Vehicons. The Kyoryugers were going wild on the Vehicons, AkibaYellow was dancing on Vehicons heads; knocking them out with her awesome dance moves. Big One was knocking Vehicons out by the dozens. GingaRed shot fire from his hands while TyrannoRanger used his sword to attack one of them and proceeded to punch another. The Extra Heroes, who were separated from the others, were now fighting in the Everfree Forrest. Back at the battlefield, Kirerenger pushed back 15 Vehicons. The Vehicons were confused when they saw two Battle Canterlots fighting at the same time, then suddenly one of them turned into AkaRed and attacked a large group of them. Then Akarenger looked up at the Decepticon warships right as they began to fire at all of the Super Pony Sentai, but the Decepticon’s missed and the ponies were unscathed!
Akarenger said, “Everyone! We have to give up our Super Pony Sentai powers to protect Equestria! No matter what happens to us, we must save the world!”
The rest of them replied, “Alright!”
Then, they all started to glow, brighter and brighter, until a marvelous light burst from them into the sky.
Akarenger said, “Now!”
The light shot everywhere, destroying the Decepticon fleet! And thus, Equestria’s future was protected. However, the Super Pony Sentai warriors lost their powers and faded away into legend.
The pony telling the story is revealed to be Twilight. She puts down the book then she raises a hoof to her chin in thought, while looking up at the sky.
Twilight says, “I could have sworn I’ve heard of the Decepticons somewhere before.”
She rises from her seat, picks up the book and puts it in her saddle bag. She then runs back to the Golden Oak Library to find the book with the information she needs. When she gets there, she goes straight towards the bookcases, looking for the book she knows must be somewhere. Then she calls Spike to help her search for the book.
Twilight says, “SPIKE!!”
Spike says “Yes Twilight what is it.”
Twilight says, “I need your help finding this book I’m looking for I can’t find it anywhere.”
Spike says, “Sure! What’s the book you’re looking for?”
Twilight says, “It’s called Extra-Terrestrial Species.”
Spike says, “Did you look under E by any chance?”
Twilight says, “Of course! How silly of me, here it is under E. Thank you, Spike you were a big help in finding this.”
She opens the book to the page that she beleves the information she is looking for is on.
Twilight says, “Ah, here it is, the Decepticons were a ruthless race of Cybertronians that wanted to rule the entire universe, hmm… interesting. It doesn’t said anything else…”
Suddenly, Spike burped a message from Princess Celestia, along with a package.
`Twilight reading the message: “My faithful student Twilight, I send you the greatest treasure in the universe I’m sure you’ll keep it safe for now. Sincerely, Princess Celestia”
She then opens the package, to see what the “greatest treasure in the universe” is and takes out a chest along with five cellphones.
Twilight says, “I wonder what these are for…”
She opens the chest and it’s filled with tiny figurines. She picks one up and notices they seem to have a key on the back of them.
Spike says, “Aren’t you going to be late for lunch with the girls?”
Twilight says, “Oh my goodness, I completely forgot! I’ve gotta go. See you later, Spike, look after the library wile I’m gone, ok?
Spike says, “Of course, Twilight,”
Twilight says, “Bye, Spike,”
In her rush to leave, she accidently put the five Mobilates and five of the ranger keys in her saddle bag. At Sugar Cube Corner Twilight’s friends are waiting for her.
Rainbow says, “Twilight’s late again.”
Applejack says, “Gosh darn it, Rainbow, she’s just one minute late, just give few more minutes before you say she’s late.”
Twilight says, “Sorry I’m late girls I was busy and I forgot about our get together.”
Rarity says, “It’s alright darling your only a minute late no reason go crazy about it.”
The lunch it going fine but then an explosion came from outside blowing in the front of the bakery.
Fluttershy says, “W-what w-was t-that?”
Twilight says, “I don’t know, Fluttershy, but we better check it right girls!”
Everyone, except Pinkie, says, “Right!”
Pinkie says, “Sorry girls I’ve got to make sure the Cakes ok!”
Twilight says, “Okay Pinkie, see you later!”
The rest of them run outside to see what’s going on, they look around and see 100 fifty-foot tall metal men attacking Ponyville.
Rainbow says, “What are those things?”
Twilight says, “They’re Decepticons I thought they were an old pony’s tale.”
Suddenly, Twilight’s saddle bag start to glow brightly, it opened up and the five Mobilates along with the five ranger keys flew to each pony.
Rarity says, “What are this things, darling?”
Twilight says, “They where given to me by Princess Celestia, but I think I know what their used for.”
To Be Continued!
Not bad for your first story. Keep it up.
Pretty nice, but if I may point a couple things out...
First, the grammar's a bit bad. It's not the worst I've ever seen, but you're forgetting to use some proper punctuation, and add an extra line of space when you're changing scenes.
Also, it's moving a bit fast. You might want to try to slow some of the scenes down by using a bit more detail in what's going on.
All in all, though, very good for a first story, but a few minor improvements like these will go a long way.
4613677 By any chance did you notice a ranger that was not on my list?
4613454 By any chance did you notice a ranger that wasn't on my list?
4613930 You should out the list on and I can tell that Pinkie not on. Lance has point, He been doing the same thing with me. You might want to make you long description longer, Like tell them about the team, what challenges they will face. How it going to be play out, things like that.
4613677
I agree. all it needs is a little more work on grammar and such and this could be a hit later on.
4613968 I'll do better next chapter okay and by the way I had the story proofread so how's the grammar bad?
4613983 Proofread mean that you had some else read it before putting it up. Approve means they allow it to be put up if there are minor problems. The approvers don't proofread it.
4613999 I did have someone else read it before I put it up.
4614007 Then, they must have miss somethings. Just follow what Lance said and you be ok later down the road, after all, my first story was a Pony Ranger story and I even have problems with it and I don't even have a proof reader going over it.
4614013 I noticed that you avoid my first question would you mind answering it.
4614027 I didn't avoid it, I say Pinkie that wasn't there, if it about the Super Sentai, I don't know all 39 teams.
4614056 I was talking about akared.
4614064 Again, I don't know that team. I'm more in to Power Rangers teams we have here then Japan Super Sentai teams
4614075 Can you get a hold of Lance for me he might know who I'm talking about.
4614081 I can try, even he got other things to do.
4614086 Thank you.
4614096 He offline right now.
4614086 By the way did you notice Owlowiscious on cast?
4614111 Yes, I seen Gokiaiger a bit so I know his role.
4614121 Good now I'll talk to you later I'm going back to sleep bye.
Did you make up some super sentai teams because aside from Gokaiger there are only 37 teams
wait, decepticons? i thought this was a power rangers spoof. i is confuzzled
4614064 I'm afraid I don't know that much about Super Sentai myself. I just figured Akared was just a mistake that slipped by your proofreader.
4614259 I'm with you on that, I know very little about Super Sentai myself.
4614223 No I didn't Ninja Captor, and Akibaranger are real Sentai if you don't believe me look it up yourself.
4614243 I need someone to play the bad guys in the story so I thought the Decepticons would work.
4614259 I'll be adding him to my list soon as I can.
4615118 You can watch English subtitles Super Sentai shows on YouTube the channel I use is Sentaifan096.
4615350 Oh, I just forget their existence because they aren't official
4615380 In my story they are official and because I wanted 40 Super Sentai teams.
4615378 As I said, I seen only a bit of Gokiaiger. It ok, I just don't watch japan version that much. Bu the way you can reply to more people in just one comment. To do that reply to the first person and tell them what you want, then push enter twice and hit reply on the person you want to speak to next, it save a lot of room in the comments.
4615440 I know I just forget about it is all. Also what did you think of the story?
4615457 I was the first person to comment. It wasn't bad, but I agree with Lance about the grammar, but keep trying and like Lance said, You might want to try to slow some of the scenes down by using a bit more detail in what's going on. Those are his words, I just repeated it.
4615462 What do you think of the bad guys in the story?
4615470 Since there isn't much about them, I can't say much yet.
4615356 okay, that's fair i guess. i suppose you couldn't just get a ponified Lord Zedd, right?
4619232 You do know that this is based on the Japanese Power Rangers witch are called Super Sentai?
4701540 withdrawn.
Sendai gokaiger...wait!does that mean?Its morphing time!!Dragon zord and blah blah extra crap rangers...
Sendai gokaiger...wait!does that mean?Its morphing time!!Dragon zord and blah blah extra crap rangers...