Baltimare is visited by Evening Rose, a prominent civil rights activist, and the rest of the Equestrian Equality Envoy. The locals aren't thrilled, to say the least.
Viewing the outsiders as nothing short of a threat to their very way of life, some in the city think a mere protest is far too soft an option, and a young questioning colt by the name of Sunspot is caught right in the middle.
When Sunspot is thrust into a battle he never expected, will he come out on top and strike a blow for gender equality, or be lost in the ensuing chaos?
Based on the Dysphoria Series. (Chapter 1 tied to Baltimare, Arc 5)
Chapters (1)
Interesting.
Will give it an upvote for now, because I like thedarkprep's original series.
A bit of a clumsy start, but it could become something. Can I suggest finding an editor to help with the technical points? There are a number of groups on the site dedicated to editors, and helping authors and editors find each other.
I think it's quite fitting that I read this sitting right next to thedarkprep in her basement. XD
I really enjoyed this so far. As somebadauthor mentioned, there were parts that felt a bit clumsy, but I really enjoyed it, and the problems that there were are nothing that an editor can't hammer out easily. I look forward to reading more of this!
Well, you are a better writer than me, so I can't really say much on that aspect.
I enjoyed this chapter and have high hopes for where this story is going.
Your story had just been added to the comprehensive list of transpony stories I keep on my userpage (CyborgPony) as well as on the mirror thread List of Transpony Stories On And Off Fimfiction I just started on the Transgender Bronies group. It includes stories both on fimfiction, and off; for those who are interested. There are only a couple that I know of that I still need to add to the list (been very busy), but I believe I have all the SFW ones out there. Obviously, if anyone finds one not on the list, let me know.
And I helped!
I want to see if this is going anywhere...
4897249 It definitely will, soonish-y. It's not a oneshot. Just.. life, you know? Soon! (tm)