It started with the body of a music radio station's manager being found on the streets: since then, Shining is forced to navigate the dirty and dark streets of Canterlot, pursuing suspects like the musicians Octavia and Vinyl, petty criminals and the manager's marefriend, before eventually confronting somepony he never expected to.
The story of Shining Armour, before his promotion to Captain, as he solves a murder case. Contains Octavia x Scratch shipping
Cheers to BlackFireGallop for proof-reading and advice
Chapters (7)
Godamnit Yankee.
Assassin Octavia?
5343091 I hope the end was at least a little surprising.
WUT
That. Was. Twisting!
5435637 I sell twists and
accessories
Wow, a pony actually named Femme Fatale.
Maybe she defied expectations and grew up to become a monogamous, law-abiding housewife.
I think the subplot about the Chief being corrupt could have been handled a bit better. Shining, Private Eye, and Red Tape seem to jump from "This guy claims he's pals with our boss," to "Holy carp, our boss is totally corrupt," a little too quickly.
I like that big twist at the end. I sorta saw it coming, in that when the cops found the bloody knife and blackmail letter, I thought "That's a little too convenient. I wonder if someone framed Sodium?" But the identity of the real murderer still took me by surprise.
Great twist - I didn't saw it coming. (Maybe it could be tagged Thriller/Mystery?)
7938409 It probably should. It came out before those tags were available: I'll fix that right away.
7938436 Really looking forward to see more mystery stories from you (I wonder one with Derpy as a Columbo-like detective
)
7938472 There's been a mystery story I've had bouncing around my head for well over a year now, but I've never been able to make it work.
That said, if ever I do write another, I'll have had a lot of time to think about it.
Well-written, an interesting take on Shining's character, and an intriguing hook. You have my attention.
Just one thing:
I believe you mean Doctor Black.