Twilight Sparkle, scholar and adventurer extraordinaire, has journeyed to the ends of the earth in search of the single most significant find in the history of academia. What she discovers is something else entirely...
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Poor twilight, it seem that your in problems little filly
so far good but you need show more to really see if this story will be "something"
Ooo... Most interesting.
"Who are you and what are you doing with my diary?"
Most certainly not contemplating taking it home and showing it to my friends and colleagues.
Faved to follow purely because of the brilliant title!
Alrighty.
You have my interest.
Sold on this like a fat man with butter.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Ugh... you got me.
Probably could have combined this and the beginning chapter, to be honest.
~Skeeter The Lurker
while the punctuation is bugging me, i'm still enjoying this story.
Twilestia? Yes please!
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That's a fair point, to be honest the whole story probably could have probably been posted as a 5K one shot. This isn't going to be an epic-length adventure (I already have one of those in the works) it's more like a basis for a world of Twilight/Celestia short adventuring stories. While I feel that both chapters end on nice stopping points once it's complete I'll probably end up decided you were right all along.
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Ah, my old nemesis! *shakes fist at punctuation* My English teachers are rolling in their graves. I'll probably go over both chapters again before posting the next one but I am in need of a beta reader. Do you know how one goes about acquiring such a creature?
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...Maybe. I make no promises, I'm not the best with romance type stuff.
Not bad. Severely lacking in commas, but not bad.
also,
I think you meant are
I am not much of a fan of romance in general, however IF you do go down the romance path, I suggest that you try to minimize, minor or put on a side-story the romance. I find that in most adventure-like story where romance is NOT part of the main attribute of a story, I find it distracting and sideline the main plot line.
If its adventure, put emphasis on the adventure. Same with horror, romance or learning. Very rarely I find authors that can manage more than one main attribute of a story and make it enjoyable to read instead of being a mess.
I find the cliffhanger to be a bit annoying, however if the the story continue to be interesting enough, I'll manage. Just don't make it for every chapter. There's a difference between baiting and trolling.
I also find the story a bit frustratingly short, but if you manage to continue with the same quality writing, I'll overlook it. Although for some reason, something inside me says the story contain a lack of details, the back story is exist yes, but something about the lack of something bother me.
hi hi
This incarnation of Twilight Sparkle is a mare after my own heart.
I have a rule, to never start reading stories that aren't complete. And once again, I find myself breaking that rule...
4700312 i remember there being a group dedicated to editors; but i never joined it, so i don't remember what it's called. sorry.
This just gets better.
4700312
Hey there! If you need beta readers or other similar help, check out:
The Proofreader Group
or
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This looks interesting.
I came here for a story. I got Twilestia... I am pleased. I've read every bit of Twilestia on the site, I'm afraid... this is going to be good.
This was an enjoyable read, can't wait to see more.
This is wonderful. Please keep going.
This story is very good so far. There is only one thing that could make me enjoy it more.
MOAR TWILESTIA!!!!
*cough-cough* ... ahem, by that I mean a romance aspect between purple horse and giant, white horse would, in my opinion, greatly improve the story.
Well, I don't mind Twilestia romances, but I don't desperately require them to enjoy a story, so either outcome is acceptable.
That aside, this story has caught my interest. I'll be keeping an eye on it. Not sure if I want to upvote just yet, but it's looking good so far.
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5K?
Oh, as setup for other stories
I admit I am fond of Twilestia but the stories where they have no previous contact with each other draw me like bears to honey.
I am really looking forward to seeing where this story goes.
This story be interesting...methinks i could stick around for the ride
Twilestia please
This doesn't need to be bold.
"stopped"
You have my attention, though I feel like this could be added on to, much like another story I have read with Luna.
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Thank you for the excellent suggestions!
I was able to find a beta reader on the proofreader group and I've just posted the two edited chapters.
*cough cough*
Please sir, can I have some more?
I Really like this story I really hope to read more soon
Consider me interested!
just wish ther was an update already. saw it in popular and I hoped it had updates, sigh.
while the chapters are brutally short, I find myself agreeing with this story thus far. I...look forward to several more chapters.
"Allrhaurn"
'All are one', hah- I like that.
Also I'm loving this story so far, the premise holds itself to so many possibilities. Twilight trying to reintroduce Celestia to the modern world, Celestia showing Twilight where the wonders of a bygone age and imparting her wisdom from a long life, and a long the way dealing with their respective feelings for the qualities of the other.
I will certainly be keeping an eye on this one.
Ship it, I say. Ship that like a ship shipping a ship full of ships! Seriously though, I'm enjoying this immensely.
i know i commented on this chapter before and i am sorry to bug you i was just wondering if by any chance you know when you might post next chapter
i understand that life can get in the way and i don't want to rash you or anything i just asking if you don't know that is okay and take your time on making a grate chapter
also happy holidays
Glad to see to see an update, but did you mean to switch to all bold/italics?
All this wait and you use THE FREAKING PARASITE ROUTE!? I'm very disappointed. You just lost me.
this seems like it will be interesting
5608231 The idea as I understand it is to mark different tones of the speech or different types of a story (present time/past time). And, I believe it worked.
On a side note though, if Celestia, despite (quite) a long isolation, instantly starts to tease Twilight, this is ingraned in her psyche right there besides survival instinct. Now THAT is really interesting.
5608517 Well yes that is what I took from it as well. at one point it shifts back to the present, but the bold and italics stayed... at the time of my comment the entire second half was bold and italics, but it's fixed now :D
I loved it! And I cannot wait for the next chapter!.................but I will.
I like how you portal celestia and twilight ^^
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I'm sorry you're disappointed by this chapter but I will point out that we've only seen that night from Celestia’s POV and she really had no opportunity afterward to confirm her suspicions on just what happened with Luna. As for the parasite angle, making a deal for more power isn't the same as giving yourself over and not being in control or responsible for your actions.
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You are very quick, I noticed the formatting errors almost as soon as I posted the chapters. I think I've caught them all now.
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Well Celestia strikes me as a playful pony and she has to be craving interaction. Besides Twilight is pretty damn entertaining so it follows.
5608925 If you can guarrentee that Luna was not taken over by a parasite then you have me back. Parasite is a story killer for me.
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Luna made her own decisions leading up to and during the fight. Sane decisions, wise decisions? No, probably not, but no one forced her hoof. However this does not preclude ponies or other entities from adding fuel to the fire and goading her on. If you're still interested by all means keep reading but Luna won't appear in this story so it's likely a moot point for now.
5609003 Okay you got me back.
Huuum, a long lost Celestia back in the world. With Twilight as her only companion? Sounds like it could be interesting!
I really enjoyed this chapter and i hope to read more soon but do take your time to make a grate chapter