The four princesses are gone. No one knows who, why and where they went, but whatever happened it has had cataclysmic repercussions on the land and all that dwell on her. The planet has slowly stopped spinning with day and night last half a year each the world has been torn asunder.
Prince Spike has had enough. Wishing to save his ponies he has set off in search of something, anything that could lead him to find a cure for this calamity, but will he like who or what he will find?
Spike doesn't know how long it will take, but he does know when he returns he will bring tomorrow with him.
I hope you enjoy and any criticism is much appreciated.
Thanks
Tags: Spike and Discord
Chapters (9)
Lots of potential in this story. Add some cool characters, long chapters and find an editor and you can a feature fic here. And welcome to the fic family.
4725160 I glad you liked it, I will take in mind what you have said, thanks for the like.
Well, that was fast paced, wasn't expecting to get a sneak peek at the apocalypse so soon.
I still want to see this through though, hope it's not all dark and gloomy.
4729412 Thanks for the Fav :) all will be revealed in due course.
i really like hope to read more soon
You should italicize any thoughts or words on a letter or screen. Gives it a better feel. Still enjoying your work though dude.
??Cool, try putting commas where they are needed more, but other wise great job! Keep going!
Interesting, though it's very vague. What is this Cataclysm? What's he trying to find? Why does it sound like Spike is the one ruling? Shining Armor has expertise? Okay that last one was a joke, but hey. Not a problem though, stories can begin in almost any way.
Nice cover pic, I'm assuming Spike has gotten older and has grown his wings in.
What did Discord do this time?
Equestria is way too reliant on magic if this is what happens when it fades.
5127680 For once it would appear it wasn't him
You got that last line from Skyrim didn't you?
5291293 words from another wise old dragon might sway Spikes mind, no?
pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaase update :(((
Pondering.
Only reveal if you have braved my bad writing as far as chapter Eight
A new character has been added, what do you guys/girls think of Heppi the diamond dog?
Hooded
Better learn some punctuation and phrase-spacing first. I see run-on sentences everywhere - hell, the first phrase in the description is one.
5830199 Thanks for the feedback. I will look into that
5830406 Sweet. Do that, and you'll likely have a good thing going here.
Because of several problems I have with this story, I'm removing it from Goodfic Bin Submissions.
Details are here.
6244409 Thank you very much for your review it means a lot! I have taken your comments on board and have decided (when I find the time) to rewrite the first few chapters, see how it goes and go from there.
6260049 Sweet. Let me know if you think you've made sufficient improvement and I'll take a second look.
Nice story man
I like Heppi, personally. Also can't wait for more of this story! :D
Might be a bit late, but thy is used incorrectly. Thy should be used like your. When referring to herself, luna should use "we" in place of "I" and "our" in place of "my"