Discord was an ex-villain who's looking to make amends for his wrongdoings. One day, a swarm of Changelings came in and kidnapped Princess Luna. Now, Discord must team up with the new princess and a palace guard to travel through Equestria, find out why Luna was kidnapped, and learn secrets of Discord's past.
Ok this is only the first chapter but,
I think the song was one big sentance, so if your reading it aloud how the hay is Anypony going to do that without taking a breath.
Again the song could use more paragraphs.
(Hay my writing has terrible grammar, so don't feel bad)
At this point your up vote-down vote ratio is not looking good, but it's your lucky day i don't down vote!
Sorry no up vote but have some moustaches
I love discord in this story!
I gave you an upvote to improve your ratio. Your first chapter was pretty bad; it's nothing but songs. But it improved a lot in the next chapters. I'd avoid making more than half the lines in a chapter be songs; it's frustrating because songs don't have nearly as much meat to them as paragraphs do, and without knowing the tune, it's hard to even focus on them.
4858290 Okay, I'll take that note into consideration. Make no mistake, I will put in songs every now and then, but not too much.
I swear that picture always gets to me.
I have seen SO MANY stories with this one picture... And yet all of them have more down-votes then up-votes
4861556 Well, I've been told recently that I put too many songs in the first chapter and the first song is like one big sentence. Now that I think about it, it does seem cheesy. But hey, I think things will turn out better with luck.
Loved this chapter!
Whoa Twist!!!
Why would Discord want them together? In my opinion, this type of story is better off without shipping. And I think twilight is overreacting; she has much better things to do than splitting up the team while she is trying to save a princess.
4886287 I promise that the reason behind Discord the matchmaker will come soon. And it's deep too. And I resent anyone having anything against shipping. There's nothing wrong with a little romance.
4886597 No, I don't have ANYTHING against shipping. I simply think with Luna being forced into Nightmare mode again, the shipping is out of place. Twilight should be more like " No time for a song, we have a princess to save!!" But, instead, whilst someone was kidnapped, she freaks out over Discord bring Flash, broke up the team, and fell in love. It's like if in a story, someone had been being raped and tortured by a evil Fluttershy { I am talking about a story named ' Discord in Hell ( Not Literally ) } you CAN'T ship them with Fluttershy because in such a dark fic, shipping feels so wrong. I didn't mean to make you angry, sorry.
4886713 It's all right. This is my first time and I have big expectations. All in all, I thank you for your opinion.
This was hilarius.
You like your songs don't you... I'm coming here from 'Equestria Discord' and nearly all of those chapters had songs in (not that I was able to sing them... )
but I'm liking that story, and this one
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Well, when I see an opportunity to fit a song in, I take it. Thanks for liking them.
Polar Express
What about Princess Platinum then if it's ment to be the day after the founding of Equestria...?
This is going to be one of those
'The enemy of my enemy is my friend'
things isn't it?
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She's one of the founders, but she's not the absolute ruler. Otherwise, Hurricane and Puddinghead would have the same rights. They had to be lead by an alicorn.
BOOOOOOOOOM. Do not mess with Discord
I can't believe you referenced The Avengers in the epilogue!