Wow I had an idea using this same basic premise, freaky. Don't know if it'll ever take off though, I have a lot of ideas and not all of them get done.

5196162 Then just try it. I for sure wont try to stop you. The only thing that matters to me is that when some story is made it should be made to the end.

5196194 Oh I agree with you. the problem is that it isn't a fully formed idea, and I suspect that mine comes from a different Diablo game, specifically Diablo three reaper of Souls. also mine is a Demon Hunter, but beyond that and some other differences the basic idea remains unchanged.

Realy guys if you dont like something then write about it to me to let me know what's wrong. Dont just leave me with nothing. How can I improve myself if I dont know what I do incorrectly? I'm just a beginer writer from diferent country.

For everyone who's still interested in reading this story. My editor had done first chapter so it's now an edited version. So if you still have any trouble with this particural chapter write it and I will answer.

The grammar, WHY!?!?! What is your first language? because I hope it's not english!

*Edit:

I'm just a beginer writer from diferent country.

Ok there's one question answered. But what country are you from? Because if the grammar looks great in your eyes you speak a Romance language, but which one? Great story, love the idea but please, get an English editor I'm sure if you asked around some sites you could get one.

5266571 Simple Poland. Small country in the middle of Europe where native Language is Polish that is a form of Slavic language.
Ps. my editor is currently working over chapter 2 + my other editor has finished editing chapter 3 + 4.

Unfortunately chap 4 is one of the worst that I ever wrote in any language but if anyone survive it later it will be better.