What does one do when their loved ones are taken away from them, much too early?
A visit to Zecora's hut by Spike and Twilight takes an unexpected, tragic turn.
As grief and guilt eat away at her, what can Twilight do to cope? Can her friends and family help as she descends into a storm of suffering?
Artwork is by SierraEx. He gets all the win for the cover. Nice guy, too.
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Oh my...
Great Story mate!
I wonder...
Poor Spike, can't help but hope he survives but seeing the story's description I doubt it.
Very well written, to me at least. English isn't my main language. Favorited.
Trackin'
This sound like something that will make me cry. Tracking.
Your constant use of the comma got a bit annoying. Structuring your sentences "And so, this happened, then this, that happened" made it really hard to read. It was distracting to say the least.
Besides that gripe the story was alright- there was a bunch of tangents you went off on that I didn't really care about. The idea for the story was good though.
You have my thumb sir.
I hope next chapter will be soon
Why did I read this
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Thanks for the constructive criticism, mate! I'll be sure to try and tidy that up. Thanks for the thumb!
To the rest of you: Thanks for the reading, favoriting, and reviewing! I'll try to get the next chapter up ASAP! You're all wonderful.
Holy...Titties, man that's intense
that was amasing.
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Ha, thanks a bunch! But it isn't over yet. There's more to come.
Favorited. Very curious to see what happens next.
491790
Yeah... expect the worst.
One of the best fanfics? Heh, this hardly qualifies, but thanks a bunch for you enthusiasm.
Stay tuned for more!
495965 ummmm youve gotta give yourself a bit more credit than that!
Though this story makes me wanna cry XD
its sad but not to sad (i determin that by how close i come to crying nowhere near is the good ones anything after that is overkill(its hard to make me cry for fictional charaters(unless thier a dog) if possible) or to much kill who knows)
I DECLARE THIS STORY GOOD!!! THAT IS ALL cats drool
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FINALLY ANOTHER GOOD STORY...I needed a break from my usual genres >.>
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Why, thanks!
Yes it updated!
Also it was written very well and I could see all the characters acting like that if this actually happened.
A thumbs up isn't enough so I'll give you 5 out of 5 mustaches...
well that wouldn't be appropriate but still I can't wait to read more of this.
Quick, listen to this!
First, awwwwwwwww sad chapter....NOOOOOOOOO
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I'm flattered.
And more will come. Get ready though. Shit's about to hit the fan.
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whoa man, thats intense
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You haven't seen anything yet.
554861 oh, now im REALLY excited
It was pretty well written. I enjoyed how you had the Mane 6 react, seemed very show like. One complaint on that side was how Dr. Stable ran off after the news, with all the guilt he felt, I feel he would've stayed a bit longer.
I wasn't looking for any grammar problems, but I noticed one
after she winded up in the hospital ------ should be wound up, not winded.
All in all a great chapter, can't wait to see the next one.
Spike.....
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Got it. Thanks for the input mate.
Hmmmmmm. Zombie-Spike. THAT would be interesting.
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1. My Lord! I have sent his soul to the Void!
2. Unfortunately, no. However, stick around, still. Some stuff's going to go down.
I am so sad... this makes me almost weep just thinking about it now...
Why did he have to be the one?! I know he wasn't an element, and that in the end he would ultimately find this fate... but he was a KID! a kid with a future and so much to live for!
I cannot even fathom how Twilight will bear this... honestly, I wish I could be there to hug them now. Call me sappy if you want... but this story is so heavy on my heart now...
555443
That's a compliment to me, friend. Yeah, she's going to be... rather out of it.
Get a box of tissues mate.
555440 What kind of stuff? Is Twilight going to become the new Queen of Worms?
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Ah, yes. She'd make Mannimarco proud.
Well, let's just say that she's not going to be the same, yes. And her magic is going to play a role.
Though, this is just planned. It could change.
i think this could go three ways and still be good well good in a bad way i guess
1 twilight goes crazy(3 things i can think of branch from that)
2 twilight gets mega deppresed and worse may happen
3 twilight goes on a mission to kill the pack of temberwolves that got away and finds out it was all a conspiracy by princess Celestia to insight a rebellion because her immortality is fed off the need for leadership hence if everything was perfect without any anarchy she would no longer be needed but she needed a big rebellion so she gets her personnel student to start it but did not expect twilight to find this out and use it to her advantage
you know Ive discovered funerals are more sad than actual death weird huh
Now this gem here is a tear-jerker done right. Keep up the excellent work. It's safe to say that if you follow through correctly, you'll have yourself something that'd extend far more than just being a story; it could be something that we can all learn lessons from.
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Hmm... You MAY be on to something.
555847
You're too kind sir.
Hopefully, I won't disappoint everypony. Stick around!
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I'm sorry.
This is the second saddest thing I have ever read, the first being My Little Dashie. Wow.
One million out of five.
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Heh, you're WAY too kind, but thanks!
I had forgotten about tis story, I wish they posted summaries of stories in the emails that go out. Because i sometimes dont look at the emails for days. And I was bored when I was looking through and decided to look at the story.
But besides my rambling there, excellent chapter, I cant wait for more of this story..I might sound cruel or something, but I find some of the best storys tend to be with at least 1 character death happening. Spike death stories rarely happen though. So Im interested in reading what youve got planned. SO UPDATE SOON!
You son of a biiiiiiitch!!! Makin' me cry.
Well done, that's not usually all that easy to do. Although the fact that Spike is my favorite character probably helped.
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I'm sorry about that.
Things are only going to get darker from here on though...
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I'LL TRY! But I'm a busy student, so expect the worst.
I thank you for your enthusiasm, however.
575184
That's perfectly okay, and I look forward to it.
F U!
I demand some random bull shit that brings Spike back!
Rage aside very touching. Really loved the hat tip to how Spike's feelings for Rarity cut into her with his passing.
Twilight and Rarity are two most likely to be affected considering how little the others actually spend 1 on 1 with him and you showed that well.
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Sorry, but I'm afraid that... well.... Spike's gone for good...
It's the pain that Twilight and her friends have to cope with that the story is about next.
592553 Well of course I just wanted to rage a bit about what I wanted to happen