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I..... I have no words.
Looking forward to he next one!
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Awww, thanks! I'll be sure to do my best work to keep you interested!
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I'm already interested.
Pfff, what? Sunset Shimmer as chief of police, Twilight Sparkle as detective, and Trixie as obnoxious rookie?
How is this not tagged as Comedy?
...the milkmare of Trottingham?
Oh! It's Coco Pommel. Aheh. Coco's mane is more cyan, though
Oh, I've seen Rainbow Dash appear unscathed from crashing through worse.
...Rainbow Dash commited the murder!
Rainbow Dash totally could have!
Burnt flesh, and blood? Odd combination...
One tiny remark (besides the cyan thing... cyan isn't really blue):
> and do it for you!”.
No need for that period behind the quote.
I just wanted to point out that titles like miss and captain are always capitalized when they are followed by a name. So, miss Coco Pommel is actually spelled Miss Coco Pommel, and captain Shimmer (last chapter) is Captain Shimmer.
By the way, the single-number chapter titles are really tiny. I had to click a couple of times before it opened the link. Maybe you should use written numbers instead?
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All very helpful, thank you. I'll fix it up straight away!
You know... normally the detectives leave that kind of observations to the coroner, so they can draw the conclusions without getting their thinking obstructed by nausea
Ow. Shit, meet fan
Rarity did this!
Nah, okay, that was an obvious red herring, there
ALL the facehoof
Um. Ew.
I'm fairly sure police procedures dictate someone should've stayed with her there
(Coco Pommel killed her boss and then committed suicide! Using her Earth Pony fire magic! It all makes sense! )
Remarks and corrections:
> notice the dried blood on the victim’s mane, this happened a while ago
Comma splice. If you connect two sentences to indicate that the second elaborates on the first, you need to use a semicolon between them, not a comma.
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Who told you?!? Now you've gone and ruined it. That's it, story's canceled, pack it up.
/s
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Well, shit.