What if your whole life was a lie? You found something you were good at, and it made people proud of you, so you made a fake cutie mark and kept on doing it. You were successful, and were growing in fame, but you were never happy. That happened to me... so I ran away. I've tried many things, and I've been good at them, but none of it made me happy. What is my purpose? Why can't I find my place? I've made it to adulthood without finding my special talent, but I don't care any more! *sobs* I... I just want to be happy.
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If this receives any reception whatsoever it will help me to finish the second chapter faster. If anypony likes it enough to comment then it will help me. Basically I feel that everything I write is utter drivel, and deserves nothing more than to be buried under piles of shame and degradation, but if a single being other than myself and my friends enjoys it enough to tell me so... then I'll start working harder.
Interesting, I'll track this and see what happens. I'm always intrigued by an adult without a cutie-mark but they always seem to be bad at everything whilst your Salieri Star actually seems to have some talent. The only warning I should probably give to you is make sure your pony has some faults to his personality, no one likes an OP OC. Anyway, nice chapter.
nice and interesting first chapter.. i'll kepp track of this and see how your OC evolves in future chapter because like arandompenguin said.. OP OC's arent normally very well accepted.. but i dont see why an adult blank shouldnt be good at several things but at the same time socially awkward (like with the monologue he has) and when i read the last line i had to think of dr who.. thats something he would do (and has done)
therefore.. lets see what that next chapter brings
I, for one, am intrigued by the idea of an adult OC with a blank flank. (And I keep wondering if Sweetie Belle will ask him for the fake-Cutie Mark spell.)
Besides, were I in need of utter drivel, I could write plenty of it myself.
This story seems (in my opinion) to have a pretty good start on it. I'm watching it, so that I may see how it turns out.
Yay!
Comments! I have the second (and most likely longest) chapter mostly done. The reason it is going to be so long is because of the time frame... it encapsulates 21 hours. I'm having fun with it. I might end up splitting it into smaller parts to make it easier to read.
If the second chapter is too long I'll cut it into smaller pieces to make it easier to digest. Being almost 10 times as long as the first chapter is... a bit big.
That was a good chapter, I'm looking forward to more. Also, I reckon you probably should split it up into at least two separate chapters, I think most people would be put off by such a large chuck of text. Other than that though it was great.
hmm.. thought there was something new.. saw the chapter length.. was disappointed..
it wasnt really neccessary to split the chapter in my opinion.. but thats propably because i like to read lengthy stories more than short ones and long chapters are great because i dont have to load the page that often (i know.. no real issue because fast internet and such but whatever)..
BUT i have questions for the story as is.. rarity ship denied at all?
(i will read the story regardless of your answer.. just asking because you stated it explicitly in alt1 but never said anything about it, not even hinting with "she's a friend" or some such)
and how are you going to handle the alternative versions in future chapters or are you going to put 2 chapter up everytime with variations (saw that with other stories)? because frankly i was confused at first..
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I'm not shipping my character with anypony. I don't really feel my creation deserving to be seen as the one dating any of the main characters. In one of the three endings that I plan on making he ends up with one of them, but it's not Rarity. Personally I like the sad ending I have in mind the best, but that's just me.
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I don't know if that'll happen, but it will be fun after Friday is written. The secretive dynamic going away will change a lot of stuff.
If all goes as planned then this next chapter will be out in only a few days. If not... then oh well. I'll probably get to it eventually.
Up quark -- 3 colors -- particle physics joke.
And good fic by the way. I faved and +ed.
(and of course you have good dreams -- you support luna and she almost certainly knows)[to the oc]
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It is that, but the scent name is actually a scent you can buy. http://www.zomgsmellsshop.com/up-quark/ So it is more a reference to that.