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Colonel-Majora


Just a brony lookin' for some grade-A, farm-fresh appl-, I MEAN... stories. :P

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Audio readings available on my YouTube channel: https://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PLQ0CN7aQkErvt1OQMLeM4BjTaeW_MgtVu

Some minds are better than others, to say the least. Starswirl the Bearded, Princess Twilight Sparkle, and many other great minds will be noted in history as those who took science, history, magic and many other subjects to great heights with their wondrous theories and achievements. But there is one name that was never to be spoken of outside of Canterlot Castle’s walls. Factory Sense was truly Equestria’s greatest opportunity at advanced technology making a change all across the kingdom. But when terrible news hits the bronze pony where it hurts, that brilliant mind she wished for so long to better the world with, pulls back, and begins to crumble.

To put it into perspective, next to Princess Luna, Factory Sense is the greatest of Princess Celestia’s guilty regrets. Celestia wanted the best for this genius young mare, but it was a lost cause.

This is that mare’s story. It needs to be told, as she could show her true colors at any moment.
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Character inspired by many characters from other media: Gray Mann of TF2, GLaDOS of Portal, William Bell of Fringe, and Bane of Dark Knight Rises.

Some ideas for plot devices, and inspiration to even write the fanfiction itself, taken from The End of Ponies, by shortskirtsandexplosions.

(Credit to creators of TF2. The theme music of the Spy instantly set to atmosphere and character style for this fanfic in my mind.)

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 14 )

It piqued my interest. I rather liked it. Can't waitfor more! :pinkiehappy:

not bad not bad. Has a lot of potental

Viva la revolucion?

5271742 Oui, oui! Allons-y, mon ami! :moustache:

5271753 I no speak french and I don't trust google translate.

5271756 XD You shouldn't trust 'em. THEY GOT EYES EVERYWHERE :twilightoops: :P

The 19 year old pic isn't working. Might be my browser.

5293172 it appears for me, so I think you are right. It may be your browser. Here's the image on another site: http://colonel-majora-777.deviantart.com/art/MLP-OC-Factory-Sense-YOUNGER-w-Inkscape-File-489501227

If you read the whole story, hope you enjoyed it! :)

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ah. That works. Must've been my browser. Thanks!

And to your other message, I did and I did. :twilightsmile: good job, wish there were more.

What a story! That was a short but good read! :pinkiehappy: *golf clap*
Shame there isn't any more, I'd love to see you continue it!

7457660 Thanks, friend. :) I never really plan to finish it. it is sort of just a way to give Factory a backstory. Still, glad you liked it :D

I've been stumped as to how this story could continued in a nice way and I found it
have you listened to "I Expect You To Die 3: Cog In The Machine"? yeah the feel you get from Dr Prism(the inventor lady) singing feels like what Factory Sense would be like if she went for a Calculated Seizure of Power Instead of lying in wait for vengeance

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