Sweetie belle will join together with button mash.
This is my first story so don't bite my head off in the comment section, Thank you and enjoy!
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“that would be lovely, about 7:30 how about”
How about adding some capital letters, m8?
As Farquaad said, you need more capital letters.
Your other main problem is your dialogue seems out of character. "You are like pinkie pie in that aspect, you seem to remember everyone’s favorites!” is not something I would expect a child to say.
I agree with piman, but this story does hold potential!
lol
There's spelling problems, spacing problems, and capitalization problems. But you also put a ship I very much like in here so you've earned a fave and upvote.
I really don't have anything to add that hasn't already been said. There are few things that can ruin an otherwise good story than having this many errors in it. Spelling, punctuation, etc. errors might not be the most important thing in the world, but they are very, very glaring errors. Like others have said, sitting down and rereading before submitting it will allow you to catch a lot of the errors in it.
This has a pretty good plot so far. A few mistakes, however good in my opinion.