Rainbow Dash tries to write a story. Twilight tries to read it.
Then Discord decides to be helpful...
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Oh dear.
Out across town, I hope the Flower Trio are already starting to scream, faint and gallop randomly around. They'll need the warmup.
I'm really looking forward to this, and god has it been a while since I've said that.
Oh my. Oh my, my, my. This looks like it's going to be a most delightful bit of metafiction. I'm definitely looking forward to more.
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Of course they are. Their training puts most track teams to shame.
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I'm sure they practice at least once a week.
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I am glad you approve! I hope to retain your approval.
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And more is here!
Brilliant
Oh, wow! This is absolutely demented so far! I'm lovin' it.
There are two things I'm hoping happen.
1) Spectrum realizes that Dash created her universe.
Spectrum : "Are you trying to tell me that you're my god?"
Dash: *Rubs neck nervously* "Uhh... yea?"
Spectrum: "Impossible! You're not awesome enough to be my god!"
2) They attempt to fix things by adding more to or rewriting the original story, seeing how that will affect Spectrum in real-time.
Oh, and Discord is great so far. It's always fun to see him flummoxed by his own (mostly) creations.
WTH XD OMG
This is amazing
XD Oh my
This is beautiful
The level of stupid Spectrum Slash emanates is so immense that I think if I listen to anymore of her. I may just stab Rainbow Dash for making such a horrid wreck of an annoying character.
I have to wonder, though I hesitate to ask, whether Rainbow Dash writes slash. (In the shipping sense, not the name sense.) That could make things awkward fast.
Oh, Twilight. For such a scientifically minded pony, she does have a nasty tendency to slip into sputtering denial when presented with something she can't fit into her worldview. Still, despite her protestations, it seems that Dash really has created that world, such as it is. It's fascinating to see the assumptions made both consciously and unconsciously in its creation. Looking forward to more.
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I am glad you approve!
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*scribbles down notes*
I do not expect this story to become significantly more sane than it currently is at any point.
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Unfortunately, this story will be more-or-less following Spectrum for quite some time still. You can expect a fair helping of further stupidity from her.
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No.
That scene with Daring Do that Twilight read out in the first chapter is about as close as it gets; lots of ponies are attracted to Spectrum Slash, but she has never yet met one that is awesome enough for her.
That sort of awkward is not a place that I intend to go. Rather, I intend to work on a completely different sort of awkward. Several completely different sorts of awkward...
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That, or Discord is faking it. Very convincingly. Anyhow, have some more!
Awesome story. I cant' stop laughing. I hope Discord screws over Spectrums world. That would be funny. Also it would be funny if Discord took Twi and the other girls that Rainbow has visited and they started to fix Spectrum's world. So when she returns, she isn't as awesome as she once was. By the way, you should include a spin off of Rainbow's crush. Put either Soarin or Thunderlane as a crush of Rainbow dash's and then have Spectrum flirt with them. And have Spectrum say, you like be because I'm awesome and then Dash has to get Spectrum away from her crush before she ruins it. Just some suggestions. Good luck with the next chapter.
GAH HA HA
Hmm. Thinking about it, the food in the Keeps may still be good. If Dash didn't bother to include flavor, then she likely didn't include putrefaction either.
Also, Pinkie only allows hooves to stop her speech out of good sportsmanship. Good to know.
This is only going to get stranger, isn't it?
I'm with 5224445: the most pernicious thing about Marey Sues is how the universe warps itself around them. To heck with logic — Spectrum Slash suggested it, so it actually works, because otherwise she would be … wrong.
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I don't think I can write a convincing crush for Rainbow.
Anyhow, I'm glad you're enjoying it!
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Hah. I was wondering if anyone would pick up on that.
Mind you, it is possible for the Keeps to be found empty, but only if the food has been stolen by some villain who Spectrum Slash then deals with, one way or another.
I think Discord, just got out Chaosed. Wow. Great chapter. I loved how Rarity is the villian in Dash's universe. As for the crush, I understand if you don't feel comfortable writing it. Good luck with the next chapter. I believe all we have left is AppleJack. Then lets see what Discord does with the Guard after him. I still say he should try and fix that world.
So, Discord can dish out nonsense like there's no tomorrow, but he can't seem to take it. Professional pride, I suppose.
And Dash should really rethink exposing Spectrum to any more of her friends. Though if she's choosing to go to Sweet Apple Acres, then I suppose Orange Horse is a relatively flattering portrayal of Applejack. We'll see...
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Of the Mane Six, she's the one by far most likely to show up in an evil role.
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Well, it's far more flattering than Fashion White was, at the very least. Not that that says much...
I'm glad to see how things are turning out. Good luck with the next chapter. I can't wait to see it.
Huh. I'm trying to imagine waving a sponge in the air to remove persistent, intangible rainbows. That's magic for you. Every time I think I have it figured out, something like this happens, and I find I can't question it.
This story, is bloody amazing. I've laughed so hard!
Oh goodness.. That... That dialogue....
Wow, this is getting better and better! Loving the Discord parts!
Ohh, yes Nightwalker, that last thing you said MUST happen!!!
2014!! Aww...
Pweeeasse continue it?
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Rest assured, I do plan to continue this story!
...I just got kind of sidetracked in the meantime. My current plan is to finish Paradox, and then come back to Spectrum Slash...
Discord, be careful...
Ooh, more of this story. Fun times. It should definitely be interesting to see Discord try to disarm a Mary-Sueniverse. I just hope he can do it without completely annihilating the place.
Would have been nice to have seen AJ chucking and grinning at Dash towards the end of her part, through, if she had realized Dash's own self-insert was talking smack about her to her face. Surprised there wasn't much reaction from Dash there, what with being called lazy and insufficiently-awesome (the slander of that!)
Yay, the story is still going!
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Discord? Careful?
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Well, he is Discord. He's no stranger to blowing things up. Nor, since the plundervine incident, is he strictly a stranger to the concept of cleaning things up, though he doesn't do windows...
I don't blame him for that, incidentally. I don't do windows, either. Linux is so much more to my liking.
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And it continues to continue!
Well, this got rather more twisted. I think Spectrum's mind just broke, and if not, it will when the problem is solved without her input.
As for Discord, he's toying with the forces that govern an entire universe. Par for the course, actually. Heck, he's even making progress. I wish him luck, especially if the scaling retribution reaches a point where even he can't ignore it.
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What's a Discord story without the fate of a universe or two at stake?
This is great! I caught a typo or two but those things are small potatoes. You've got the characters spot on and I'm loving it so far. :) Keep the funny coming!
Oh dear. Spectrum is having some unpleasant effects on her environment. Discord may be getting closer to solving the problem in one universe, but it's spreading to another. This... this could be very bad.
This makes my brain hurt
Okay this is getting very cool now.
Loved feeding Celestia poison joke.
I... What just happened? The first time what? I am so confused
Also:
Oh boy. It looks like Spectrum may become the villain. Also we need to learn what is Discord going to do with that info he is going to get from Celestia. This isn't going to be good.
This story is criminally under-appreciated.
Wow, this is so bad, it's freaking good. Hysterical!
Writing for Superman is hard. Writing a Mary Sue is impossible.
"Aaaah!" cried Daring Do, frightened. "It is Ahuizotl!"
You think RD would have too much respect for Daring to have her cower like that.
I mean, love at first sight?
Love needs to start somewhere.
"Well, yeah." said Rainbow. "The sheer awesome would be a danger to the silk of space-time. That's why, at the end, she has to leave the universe and all her friends to keep them safe."
The irony is that, is actually an interesting story idea.
The description of spectrum slash reminds me of a certain gold wolf OC who shall go unnamed.
"Well... yeah." said Rainbow. "'Cos friendship is magic, right? I mean, if it worked on Discord, then of course it'd work on some two-bit villain like Ahuizotl."
Which is ironically why I don't think Diamond Tiara is a hopeless case.
"Rainbow... there is so much wrong with that sentence that I don't even know where to start."
Start at the beginning.
just punched the Nightmare out of her...
I curse that alien parasite crap the comics brought to life out of the dark depths of the Faust's old notes.
"You can stop being evil!" said Spectrum Slash."
"You can stop being evil!" said Spectrum Slash.
HEH! And Discord inserts his own dialogue?
"Of course I am!" said Twilight.
I KNOW the girls know Discord isn't evil anymore, but for goodness' sake, you think they'd react more to one of his sudden uncalled for visits!!!!
"Toodles!" he vanished back into the page.
HE LEFT THE STORY WITH NO PROTAGONIST! Shouldn't that have caused it to implode or freeze to a halt?
RD never bothered to write was Slash's cutie mark was?
"You can't create an entire physical universe just by thinking about it!" insisted Twilight. "Physical universes are complicated things! And there's no way that mere ink on paper is enough to create a new universe! It's just not scientifically possible!"
She forgot about the power ponies comic? -_-
Rainbow shrugged. "Hey, so I'm bad with names." she said.
You bad at everything not related to rainbooms and orange chickens, and only recently with the orange chickens!
And Discord realizes how badly constructed RD's world is.
And RD gets a taste of how poor her characterization is.
RD showed Shy her story? Oy.
"The rest of the pegasuses all forgot." s
GEt YOUR OWN trIBES PLURAL RIGHT RD!
"My magic's too awesome to be stolen, anyway."
Same with the golden wolf OC.
Rainbow Dash rolled her eyes. "Yeah, yeah." she said.
Tired of your own wish fulfillment RD?
"Are you telling me," asked Rainbow Dash, "that in all the hundreds to tea parties you've had with Yellowshy, you've never once tried tea?"
You wrote it, remember RD?
Reminds me of Doctor Who from Doctor Who, a version of The Doctor from the Land of Fiction in Doctor Who. (Confused yet?)
"Because the only things that have any taste at all are poisons." said Spectrum Slash, rolling her eyes. "Everything that's not poisonous is flavourless. Everypony knows that."
You don't need to write down what stuff tastes like EVERY TIME in a story.
"What is a country?"
HOLD ON! Didn't Slash say how a villain threatening all of Equestria is how tea parties ended? THEN HOW THE HECK DOES SHE NOT KNOW WHAT A COUNTRY IS?!?!
"You're this universe's version of Pink. Only you talk more."
I see.
Technically, Good Celestia has a point, this place is running on THEIR world's rules. So of course the food won't have gone bad or been stolen.
This left Spectrum's rainbo trail in Rarity's face instead of Spectrum herself,
Sentence failed to make sense.
"This is RIDICULOUS!" he yelled. "It was one drop!"
Discord complaining about things not making sense? BWAHAHAHH!!!!
"We've got to save ponies while Spectrum deals with the flood!" insisted Celestia.
Slash can't deal with the flood and save the ponies at the same time? 0-o?
Slash wasn't so much nasty to Rarity as expoing about her worst enemy. A 1-D parody of Rarity.
Who likely laughs while cross eyed.
She wasn't sure if it would stain her coat, but she wasn't prepared to take any chances.
I thought Slash's rainbow got on Rarity's face.
Nor di Fluttershy wish to
Nor did Fluttershy wish to
Lies GROW Fluttershy.
"What is strange is that I have not yet found the other me," said Spectrum Slash.
She is truly RD's self insert.
"Maybe there isn't a Spectrum Slash in this world, then,"
And she doesn't even question RD at all.
positive action of any persuasion?"
wrong word at the end.
Question, what happened to the Slash's world Discord?
"I wouldn't do a thing to harm any ponies.
Says the guy who betrayed ponies to TIrek and turned Twilight and her friends into monsters.