Canterlot Castle, two days after Princess Twilight's anger burst
"It is good to be out of the bed", Chrysalis said, looking to the purple alicorn besides her, "a-and thank you for helping in my recovery" the Queen wispered, looking away, trying to hide her blush.
After all the castle was notified that an ammbassador from a foreign nation and its delegation had arrived, all capable hooves were busy helping set up acomodations for all the remaining changelings; in the meanwhile the insectoid ponies were helping to their "hosts and saviors" however they could as they began to call the princesses, anyhow, the remaining changelings proved to be a capable workforce, aiding whenever they were needed without a complaint.
On the medical wing of the castle, Princesses Celestia, Luna and Twilight have been helping out on the recovery of the changeling queen, healing magic applied with an alicorn boost having a miraculous effect on the queen, almost all the scars on her caparace had faded by now and the broken leg was now but a memory. Chrysalis had noticed that the youngest princess had put all her will to the task, also have been spending as much time as she could with the former enemy of equestria.
"It was nothing, I would have done the same for any of my... friends" Twilight Sparkle answers in a monotone, "Anyways!, we with Princess Celestia and Princess Luna were thinking..."
"What?" the changeling queen asked, raising one eyebrow.
"What do you think about a peace and land offer to you and your remaining brood?" the purple princess asked, craning her neck to lock back, a mischievous glint on her eyes, "we were thinking that you should get some land for your people within Equestria, because as you told us, you cannot go back to your place of birth right?" The second these words left the purple princess's lips, she was tackled by a very enthusiastic hug from the queen.
"Y-you really mean all of that?" Chrysalis asked, looking directly into the ex-librarian purple eyes, "I-I and my children are allowed to stay in Equestria?"
"I... Need... Air!!!" the purple librarian says between gasps.
"Sorry, sorry" Chrysalis promptly released the flustered alicorn, after that she bowed low to her, "I and and our changelings accepts both your offers, Queen-Princess Twilight Sparkle"
"Oh, that's great, I now can... wait a second, 'our' changelings, 'Queen-princess'?" the purple alicorn said, looking confused for a second, then widening her eyes "oh no, nonononono..."
"Actually, when you offered your help and now with the lands and the peace offer I, Queen Chrysalis of the wastelands and of the Emerald Hive Remains, officially declare that the union between Equestria and The Emerald Hive Remains is settled, that is, if the pony who offered this peace and land offer, Princess Twilight Sparkle, accepts joining efforts between ponies and changelings as a co-ruler."
*thud*
"Twilight Sparkle, are you well?" Chrysalis asked, nosing a unconcious alicorn.
Throne Room, Canterlot Castle, 45 minutes later
'Ughhh my head, what did I do before raising up today', thought Twilight Sparkle, trying to rise from a bed, a splitting headache and a dull beeping sound in her ears, 'It appears to be like that day with Moonshine and friends, next thing we knew, all of us were sprawled on the floor of her house, none remembering what the buck we did beforehoof'
"...light"
"...ake up"
"Twi... kle, wake..."
"You are late for a test" a male voice finally gets into the muddle thoughts of the ex librarian.
"AIEEE, I am lateeee!" Twilight Sparkle cries, rising up suddenly and tossing away a smug looking Spike, "Spike, please bring me..." she interrupted herself when she found the little drake getting away, snorting with laughter. she turned around slowly, noticing that all her friends, Queen Chrysallis and Princess Luna where on the same room, some of them snorting trying to contain their laughs at the studious alicorn's sudden wake up.
"My, if I knew that a test will get you up from the dead, I would have tried that the time that we all went to camping" Rainbow Dash says, a smug smile plastered on her face, "what do you have to say to that, egghead?"
"Uhm, maybe that if you try that, I can turn you into a Earth Pony, and without magic" the purple pony replies in a monotone, looking to all of them with bloodshot eyes, "the last thing that I remember is the talk that I had with Chrysalis about the Land and Peace offer." Twilight adds, looking pensively to the tallest mare in the room, "then she says that... oh, ponyfeathers."
"Yes, Queen-Princess Twilight" Princess Luna interrupts the now panicking alicorn, "Queen Chrysallis has signed the offer, and we with Celestia had agreed on her terms, anyhow..."
"HOLD YOUR HORSES!!!" a shout was heard from the other side of the door, before the aforementioned door were obliterated by a mad Shining Armor, "PRINCESS LUNA, WITH ALL DUE RESPECT, THAT IS A LOAD OF MANURE, THAT TREATY WAS SIGNED WITH ONE OF THE PARTIES UNCONCIOUS, FOR CELESTIA'S SAKE."
"Actually, Captain-Emperor Shinning Armor, the law says that if in case of one of the rulers of Equestria being incapable of taking vote in a new law, agreement or treaty, that being the case, all the other rulers could outvote the decision, if there were more than one ruler, also because Empress Mi Amore Cadenza now is a Noble on the Crystal Empire, her vote doesnt count." Princess Luna deadpanned
"YOU HAVE TO BE KIDDING ME!!" Now an enraged Twilight shouts, "ARE YOU SAYING THAT BECAUSE I WAS UNCONCIOUS AND CADENCE IS A FOREIGN DIGNATARY NOW, THE LAW WAS PASSED WITHOUT MY CONSENT!"
"Apparently so, Queen-Princess..."
"DON'T YOU DARE TO FINISH THAT SENTENCE, WHAT CLASS OF MANURE LAW WAS THAT??!!"
In another part of the castle, Princess Celestia sneezed hard.
"Sorry about that, ambassador whitefeather, as I was saying..."
It lives! Nice one, but I would suggest explain why Chrysalis made Twilight a queen. It seems a bit arbitrary at this point. And you do have a problem with rushing things.
6283111 dont worry, next chapter will be a little heavy but it will explain why Chryssy decided to give Twilight the status of Queen, also ill be posting a little more frequently
Took you long enough! Arrg
But happy you updated it.
6284001 sorry about the long time on the updates, ill try to update faster, if RL doesnt bitchslap me as always
6284162 I was kidding, don't worry about it.
The errors ...
two (no caps)
Twilight's
bed," (comma)
said (the narration vascillates between present tense and past tense throughout the chapter. This is WRONG. Pick one and stick with it, and past tense is the one you should pick more than 90% of the time.
whispered
"for" seems awkward to me. In fact, what's wrong with ending the sentence with just "trying to hide her blush"?
an ambassador
??? I don't even know what this is supposed to mean, but unless the ambassador is throwing a party it's not correct. Perhaps "entourage"?
helping set up accomodations
either
changeling; in the meanwhile, the
or
changelings, while the
either
were helping their "hosts..." however they could
or
were giving help however they could to their "hosts...
complaint.
Princesses (it's not only Celestia who is a princess)
miraculous effect; (semicolon)
had (past tense of have)
ew run on sentence (period)
noticed (or "had noticed")
I am not familiar with this idiom ... perhaps "to the task"? (instead of "on")
craning
While technically accurate, I would definitely go with "place of birth"
The (caps)
left
princess's
tackled by a ... from the queen
or
tackled in a ... given by the queen
directly in, or
directly into
ex-librarian's
in
she bowed low to her
Either "I and our changelings" or "Our changelings and I" (The second is the correct one but the former is a common error, and it doesn't seem weird to me if Chrysalis does it. I don't think Chrysalis would make the "me/I" mistake.)
She was an ex-librarian five seconds ago. Did she get reinstated?
I am not sure I get what sense exactly "remains" is carrying, but I think that since it's being used as a name or title, it should be "the Emerald Hive Remains" (or "the remains of the Emerald Hive", or "the Emerald Hive's remains", if that is a correct interpretation of your meaning).
comma or question mark, and no caps on "thought"
in
knew
did beforehoof.'
alicorn's
knew
Shining
there
In
(Unless Celestia was standing on top of the castle, stop using "on" for everything!)
Ambassador Whitefeather
6284733 All corrected, thank you for your time correcting those mistakes, as I told some of you guys before I don't have any editor or proofreader, your effort is trully appreciated
I really hate it if they do that, to force Twilight to do things, mean i like the Queen - Princess thing, but that she was forced, and again they think it isn´t important what Twilight wants, that is dumb.
If their system works like that, they could probably cause many problems if they don´t like each other.
Yay! and update *reads* OK that happened seemed a little fast having Twilight become the co-ruler of the changelings Though I don't you could of picked a beter partner for Twi, being Chrysalis could be both a male or female for her Still I didn't like the way she kind of got forced into the relationship but I shall see where this goes IWANT MOAR SOON! If that is aright with you.
6286790 actually as i told dualkitsune, the next chapter will be a little heavy, in part explaining why chryssi wants twilight as a co-ruler, also explaining why Celestia and Luna took that desition, but in the end Twilight will be the one wich decide if going with it or no, so dont worry about that
sorry calling bull on the whole forced into Queen-Princess thing. THERE IS NO WAY EITHER OF THE SISTERS WOULD DO THAT!
6295617 Actually it is usual for Trollestia to delegate missions or give the burden to somepony else
6296675 yeah but this. NOPE
6296712 lets see how this will play out, as i already have said a couple of times, next chapter will be explaining the reasoning of all of this
That was funny
That was on of the most funniest stories I have read. Going to fav this
6490447 thanks for the fav, working on more chapters
Dammit, Trollestia.