Their Laughter and Hers

Darles Chickens

Darles Chickens #1 · Jan 16th, 2015 · · ·

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No apostrophe in your title. His and hers never need them.

Galaxina-the-Unicorn

Galaxina-the-Unicorn #2 · Jan 17th, 2015 · 1 · ·

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Thank you for pointing that out for me. It was very helpful.

Amethyst_Dawn

Amethyst_Dawn #3 · Sep 7th, 2016 · 1 · ·

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Interesting, Dark, intriguing. I like it.

Galaxina-the-Unicorn

Galaxina-the-Unicorn #4 · Sep 9th, 2016 · 1 · ·

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...Oh my gosh, YOU READ IT! Someone read my piece of crud! AND IT WAS YOU OH MY GOODNESS! What an honor! Thank you so much~!

-GTS

Amethyst_Dawn

Amethyst_Dawn #5 · Sep 9th, 2016 · 1 · ·

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Wow, certainly not the reaction I expected.
I am an odd mixture of flattered, humbled, and confused that you apparently think so highly of me.

Also, this is no "piece of crud": it's an fascinating idea, that- in my opinion -fulfills it's potential. I, personally, am a fan of Fluttercord: yet this is one of those works that shows me how to like an alternative. You executed this story remarkably well. And no, the honor is all mine.
~Amethyst Dawn.

Edit: In fact, this is one of the stories that makes me wish I was able to like them twice: it gets better with each read.

Saberking2012

Saberking2012 #6 · Oct 30th, 2016 · 1 · ·

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Well... This beats my fic(s)

Galaxina-the-Unicorn

Galaxina-the-Unicorn #7 · Dec 8th, 2016 · · ·

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Yo. Lemme just beat that outta you for a second. Please? And I'm sorry that I never got a chance to respond to this until now.

Do not ever, ever, EVER compare yourself to other authors, kay? Your writing is awesome. It's awesome because you took the time to write it and make it your own. It's awesome because your two wonderfully crafted hands took their time to type down what you thought was meant to be written. It's awesome because your mind had the audacity to THINK up the things you've written.

Is it badly written? Was it unoriginal? WHO CARES?! ITS YOUR OWN! You can only get better! You are an awesome author! Don't go telling yourself otherwise! KEEP WRITING TILL THE EARTH STOPS ITS SPIN OR WHATEVER YOU DO!

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Saberking2012

Saberking2012 #8 · Dec 8th, 2016 · · ·

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7778595 A)It's OK(?). B)Uh... Have you read my fics? They tend to be forgotten within a short time. C)I got nothing. Still thanks for that(?). Your fic still hold BTW

Violet Rose in The Rain

Violet Rose in The Rain #9 · Dec 21st, 2016 · 1 · ·

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7778595

I promised myself to get to this, even with the backlog of stories here on Fimfiction for me to review, and it turns out you're one of the lucky few to get a constructive comment from me first.

Confused of her blatant insanity.

*About.

'zapping' anything with his magic.

Try:

zapping anything he could see with his magic

or

zapping objects and living beings at random with his magic

"-Dog got you tail?!"

*Your

"You still remain to be my same old Pinkie Pie."

The phrasing here seems...awkward. Try changing the sentence to something that flows more naturally, like:

You're still the same old Pinkie Pie. My Pinkie Pie.

Or

You're still my same, old Pinkie Pie.

For the story, well, it achieved what it set out to do, though it honestly felt a bit...lacking. There are some other areas that can be fixed, like the following phrase " (though Pinkie knew better)," which breaks immersion in the story by inferior formatting.

On the whole, it was...something I expected from a first-time story from a user, though it could be better.

Galaxina-the-Unicorn

Galaxina-the-Unicorn #10 · Dec 22nd, 2016 · 1 · ·

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Thank you very much for your input! I will be sure to keep your words in mind (and to fix any errors when I have the time to do so.)

Amethyst_Dawn

Amethyst_Dawn #11 · Dec 23rd, 2016 · 1 · ·

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For what it's worth, I thought the phrasing of

"You still remain to be my same old Pinkie Pie."

Was very in-character for Discord.

Amethyst_Dawn

Amethyst_Dawn #12 · Jul 24th, 2017 · 1 · ·

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A lot of the time, I'll come back to this story just to read your freakout response to my comment.

Astelle Evening Star

Astelle Evening Star #13 · Apr 15th, 2020 · 1 · ·

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I wish there was a sequel. Set after S3 premiere or after he's turned into a statue again.

Galaxina-the-Unicorn

Galaxina-the-Unicorn #14 · Oct 31st, 2020 · · ·

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I kinda have been wanting to write a sequel to this, actually. This site needs more Dispie~.

Astelle Evening Star

Astelle Evening Star #15 · Oct 31st, 2020 · 1 · ·

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YAY!!! I'M SO HAPPY!! DISPIE FOREVER!! WOOOOHOOOOO!!!

Astelle Evening Star

Astelle Evening Star #16 · Nov 21st, 2020 · 1 · ·

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"And then there's you," he said, "You're a grump. A stick in the mud, some may even say, and yet, you manage to think...creatively. I've taken your drive, your fun, your...happiness...but you're still you, regardless. You're still the same old Pinkie Pie... My Pinkie Pie."

"It's nothing to be ashamed of, after all...Equestria is mine . I rule this domain, and everything beyond. Every pony, every animal, every hoof or paw or claw or talon that lands on the earth or sea is now in my possession. I can do whatever I want, pretty much. I can...claim whatever I want."

"What makes you think that it makes you out of the equation? I did say you were my favorite. And a king's favorite," Discord said, "Should always remain his."

With that their lips collided with one another, sending Pinkie into a wave of hysteric confusion. The anger and sadness subsided in her heart, and was replaced by pure shock and...and...the grey started to fade back to its original color as she gingerly returned the kiss. However, before Pinkie could even return to her normal state, Discord pulled away, and all became grey again. Pinkie whimpered.

These are high-key my favorite moments in this story. Mostly because it has Dissy being so cute/possessive of Pinkie. And also, no this isn't my fourth or fifth time reading this.