Apple Bloom loved it when Babs Seed visited.
She was her favorite cousin, and that's saying a lot because Apple Bloom has a lot of cousins.
So what they loved each other? So what if they liked to hug each other a lot and try to be in constant physical contact with each other? So what if they don't leave each others side when Babs visits? So what if they like to sleep in the same bed?
The other ponies see it, especially her family. Everypony sees it except for Babs Seed and Apple Bloom. They just look at it as cousinly affection. But what if it was something more?
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What does P.F.F. stand for?
5588950 *shrugs*
5588950 pony friends forever. like BFF, but pony
Short yet sweet. Keep up the good work.
Oh yeah, baby, I give her my seed everytime. BOOYAHZ!
Now, we just sit and wait until Bad_Seed_72 shows up.
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I have arrived.
And I have yet to read this, but y'all know I will.
Hmm...
Alrighty, this is pretty cute. However, it's very short and the pacing is nearly lightning-quick already. Take your time and add a bit more description—to the scenes, the characters' reactions, etc. This chapter could have easily been twice as long and it would have flowed a bit better.
Additionally, you would benefit from an editor to catch mistakes with grammar, spelling, and style. Watch your adverbs, for example; only use them if they contribute something to the narrative/dialogue that isn't obvious from the text itself. "Asked curiously" is one of those examples of redundant adverb use, for example.
Here are some errors within the last few paragraphs (there are more):
*Well, of course I did, Babsy!
*said, as if the answer
*over. They just laughed and enjoyed each other's presence.
*"Thank you so much, Apple Bloom. I love your gift," she said
*each other's forehooves.
Also, referring to Apple Bloom as just "Apple" in the narrative for a shorter version of her name is an odd choice... I would recommend "Bloom" instead if you don't want to type out "Apple Bloom". Some ponies have names that are not easily shortened.
As a final thought, how old are they in this story? The last paragraph implies that they are not fillies anymore, but the rest doesn't jive with that.
I'll give this a fave for now to see how it goes. I hope this helped you!