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5626331 Figured, that's why I need an editor to help with this story, including my other two.
So far I like it just need more to form a better opinion of this but it is off to a good start.
This isn't that great. If I were you I would try to get an editor to help you with the grammar and other aspects of the story. There are groups on here where you can find such people. And also I don't like the anthro aspect of this, but it's just a personal thing :P
5626813 I'm trying to find an editor myself
it has... potential. but you need an editor.
5633100 I know
This is great have fun but keep going and your story will be great.
7840786 I would if I have an editor to help with my stories. I put all three of my stories on hiatus until I find one.
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Damn, you're on a roll. I suggest you slow down a bit and make the chapters longer. There is also grammatical errors like wrong usage of the apostrophe. You dont need to put an apostrophe for plural, eg.: weapons, not weapon's, eyes, not eye's and so on. And finally 'your' for possession, 'you're' is like 'you are'. I suggest getting an editor or try to pay attention to those little things. While grammar may not be your strong suit, the story is. I like the way it is developing, tough you can slow it on down and it would be a bit better, what with word counts or getting the desired effect from the story. Among and despite those critiques, you have a nice story to tell there. Congratulations, keep up the good work, slow down, rest up a bit, brush that grammar up and have a nice day.
I don't have an editor to help me with the story like you said. It will help me a lot if I did have one. And I am only one person. I do have a basic idea of where the story will go, but like I said, without an editor and/or someone to bounce ideas off of, I can't really do much other then what you are saying.