Alas, I am a very peculiar pansexual strawberry with a particularly practical skill for painting purple stuff.
Sweetie Belle and Princess Luna. They love each other, but no one knows... until Rarity finds out. Will she accept their relationship, or will she hate her sister from keeping it from her?
just a little one-shot I thought up, mostly to deal with writer's block a while back.
Please note, Sweetie Belle is aged up to nineteen, this is not a foalcon ship. also, please don't hate me for the ending. Teen only for mild language and some sexual talk.
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Well that was definitely something. You're actually very good at writing, sure there's a slip up in spelling or a missing word here and there but those are easy fixes. I love the beginning of the story and I think you're exceptional at keeping Luna in character, though the fifty seven year jump from the carriage to the cemetery seemed somewhat abrupt. It wasn't bad, there just wasn't enough of an emotional tie for me between Luna and Sweetie Belle, for there to be a 'fast forward till one of them dies' sorta thing. But that's a personal complaint, I really like your style, and the story, keep up the good work!
5687270 Well, like I said, this is something I thought up a while back to deal with writers block. Honestly, all of the errors were because iI didn't have time to double check everything before publishing. Most of them should be fixed now. And thank you very much for the kind words, it's very nice to know someone appreciates it!
Nice use of Roxette's Sleeping In My Car, it was obvious that the title of the story came from the song.
5687572 it's always been one of my favorites, after listen to your heart and dangerous.
There's a difference between the words "except" and "accept"; look them up and learn it.
5688587 oops. i'll fix that in a bit. you don't have to be snarky, it was just a mistake. it happens to every one.
Know this may be from the pot but, iam in tears man, this is amazing pure gold!
5693859 Aw shucks... I'm glad you liked it!
What the bloody hell.
Where does everyone get this inane abominable idea that death is "natural order of things" and it`s good? Shall we abscond from cities then? Forget the notion of medicine and technology? Stick with "natural order of things" where living to thirty is a marvel?
Immortality is awesome. An endless future is worth any price.