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Masterweaver


Just an average insane brony, doing average insane things. Professional Fanfiction Writer and Purveyor, relevant links are on my profile page.

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Twilight Sparkle, a young professor from New Canterlot, has come to Pony Island. Her research suggests that one of the families living there is unwittingly holding an artifact from before the flood; such an ancient relic could not only shed some light on how ponies lived back then, but might also reveal some of the lost magics of the old realm. Even if it's just another dead end, the subject might help her to earn her doctorate, and that's always a good thing.

So it is that she finds one of the fabled Elements of Harmony. It is promptly stolen by a pirate.

And the adventure that follows sets her on the path to a destiny greater than she ever suspected...

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Comments ( 20 )

Well, this one is different.

*inst-Faved, Followed and Up-voted*

TGM

The legend lives on through you, Weaver.

Do us proud. :ajsleepy:

Well, I'm certainly intrigued. I look forward to seeing where you're going with this.

Also, until further notice, I'm imagining this in Wind Waker style. It seems appropriate.

(Pardon the double notification; I misclicked.)

instant tracking. love you for this, weaver!

Awesome new story! The dialogue in this is quite amazing. Can't wait for chapter two!

And only one thing camero my mind upon seeing this.

What?!

So... you're doing the Sound of Thunder on your own?

Zeg

That description sure caught my eye. Who doesn't like a story with pirates in it?

I'll be keeping an eye on this one.

Well, isn't this interesing?
I'm loving this already!

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All it needs are ninjas, zombies, and a robot or two. :pinkiecrazy:

This setting's interesting. I'd like to see more of the changelings who apparently mingle freely with ponies. (The critical point for me will be if I can get through the demonstration of the Elements; I've never gotten past two tests in these AUs.)
Minor copy-edits follow.

Pinkie's use of "Aye" to mean "I" is a little confusing, since it means "yes." But I might be persuaded this is a stylistic choice.
The double hyphens ought to be consistently replaced with either an em dash :rainbowderp:, or an en dash with spaces around it :rainbowhuh:. Pick one from http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dash
"Miss" as a title should be capitalized.
"The rickety creaked of wooden cart wheels" is a little off.
Is it really "Carousal Antiques," to rhyme with "arousal" and meaning "a drunken revel," or did you mean "Carousel" like the Boutique?
I'm not finding "chique" as an alternate spelling for "chic."
"Mateies" seems like a weird spelling. I think it's "mateys" because "maties" also looks funny.
"Asiles" should be "aisles."
"I' like to talk to you about..." should say "I'd."
"Down the wrong tube"? I've only heard it as the wrong pipe, not tube.
"Some of the old stories I've read implies..." ought to say "imply." Stories imply.
"An old family,not..." is missing a space.
"Twilight rose an eyebrow" should say "raised."
An irregular dodecahedron? That's twelve faces, and a rupee cut (which is accurate) has fourteen: two hexagons and twelve trapezoids. I'm not sure Twilight would be comfortable giving that inaccurate description.
"...after miss FLuttershy left?" should be "...after Miss Fluttershy left?"
"Irregardless" is... technically a word because people know what it means. But it raises a lot of hackles, so "regardless" would be much better.
"I don't need to to know that not even you can...." Actually, this is OK, but it reads like it's not. Put a comma between the two to's, as in "to, to" to avoid confusion. :rainbowwild:

Oy. With that last stunt, this Pinkie is clearly a psycho.

BTW, "she slammed through a window hoofs fisrt" should probably be spelled "hooves-first."

Damn did the Element really have to choose her??
Pinkie Pie is Pinkie Pie, but damn she be a crazy wild card.
Also pretty sure she wouldn't like having the world revert back to its non-flood existence. She be a pirate after all and they thrive on open waters.

Um, just remembered a confusing point.

"Well me and Cadance, my old foalsitter." She giggled. "I'm pretty sure they're dating 'behind my back', it's so obvious it's hilarious."

OK, so Shining and (non-princess) Cadance are dating?

Spike added casually. "That's the pegasus that Shining was dating... they actually got married earlier this year, it was a big thing."

Wait, so they're married? I mean, that doesn't stop them from dating, but "behind Twilight's back"? I think your mental timeline shifted as you were writing this conversation.

"She once robbed Canterlot of all its booze in one night! She's the reason the rum is always gone!"

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I love this story!
It's a damn shame that it's not as popular as it should be.

Fluttershy blinked, turning to look at him as though just noticing he was there. "Ah. Um. Mister Spike, would you mind terribly holding down the fort while I go after that rot-hoofed flood-cursed daughter of sea slime?" she asked sweetly.
And now I know I'll be favoriting this.

"Don't worry, Pinkie, I would never even bother." Octavia rolled her eyes. "She wouldn't believe the skeletons in our closet. No offense, Rattler," she added, nodding to the pegasus skeleton standing on Pinkie's left.

This story continues to be great.

But how is Shining dating Cadance behind Twilight's back and officially engaged to her in a way that Spike knows about?

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