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Sparkle Fire


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Rainbow Dash is accepted into the Wonderbolts, but a surprise eventuality arises that puts her life-long dream on hold - on the first day of training.

I originally wrote this for Bronystate's fanfic competition, but missed the deadline. So I finished it and posted it here for your reading pleasure!

*If you think this story needs a higher rating, kindly let me know and I'll change it, because it does reference some sensitive topics.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 14 )

First comment!
Edit: great work. Not sure if you should rate it teen. I can't imagine and under 10 years old-kid would go to this site and not-read it because of the orange word 'teen' below your post. The disorder looks like Hiv/Aids (except that it's genetic). Purpose?

yes, I would suggest a teen rating. Very well put. Though, as an English professor, I think you could have put more effort into ironing out. I feel that it ended too fast. Great potential though. keep up the good work.:pinkiehappy:

i think it was 2 short and i think it would have beena great story if you added same more chapters

Please make this longer

I agree with everyone else this needs to be rated Teen just to be on the safe side. :twilightsmile:

Interesting
Scumbag Wonderbolts
won't let her run it into the fucking ground

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What are you talking about???

615304 wonderbolts shoulda let her fly til she couldn't:derpytongue2:
not a critique on you, im literally critiquing the characters

RAINBOW DASH CAN'T FLY NO MORE?!

Rarity and Fluttershy does not approve. :fluttercry:

:raritycry:

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Ahem!

This fanfic was, in my book, simply straying off the mostly-canon path that I take when writing fan-fiction. But don't worry, Rainbow Dash still flies!

Rarity and Fluttershy approves. :yay: :raritywink:

no wings?..why not take her cutie mark then.?

WHAT?!? RAINBOW DASH CAN'T FLY?!? That's not fair!:flutterrage::fluttercry::raritycry::applecry:
Great story!

Weeeell this is stupid :facehoof:

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