Rainbow Dash is accepted into the Wonderbolts, but a surprise eventuality arises that puts her life-long dream on hold - on the first day of training.
I originally wrote this for Bronystate's fanfic competition, but missed the deadline. So I finished it and posted it here for your reading pleasure!
*If you think this story needs a higher rating, kindly let me know and I'll change it, because it does reference some sensitive topics.
First comment!
Edit: great work. Not sure if you should rate it teen. I can't imagine and under 10 years old-kid would go to this site and not-read it because of the orange word 'teen' below your post. The disorder looks like Hiv/Aids (except that it's genetic). Purpose?
yes, I would suggest a teen rating. Very well put. Though, as an English professor, I think you could have put more effort into ironing out. I feel that it ended too fast. Great potential though. keep up the good work.
i think it was 2 short and i think it would have beena great story if you added same more chapters
Please make this longer
I agree with everyone else this needs to be rated Teen just to be on the safe side.
Interesting
Scumbag Wonderbolts
won't let her run it into the fucking ground
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What are you talking about???
615304 wonderbolts shoulda let her fly til she couldn't
not a critique on you, im literally critiquing the characters
RAINBOW DASH CAN'T FLY NO MORE?!
Rarity and Fluttershy does not approve.
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Ahem!
This fanfic was, in my book, simply straying off the mostly-canon path that I take when writing fan-fiction. But don't worry, Rainbow Dash still flies!
Rarity and Fluttershy approves.
no wings?..why not take her cutie mark then.?
WHAT?!? RAINBOW DASH CAN'T FLY?!? That's not fair!
Great story!
Weeeell this is stupid