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YetAnotherDiscord


My OC is a burning icecream-cone with wings and a bow-tie. That says it all.

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At the edge of Ponyville, neighboring Sweet Apple Acres, lies an old, abandoned funpark, slowly falling into disarray.
When Applebloom sees Discord sneaking across the orchards, she follows him and finds him vanished at the edge of the park.
The next day, she tells her friends, and together they follow the Spirit of Chaos into the funpark.
Well, they are in for a surprise.

Not canon with the comics.
Set some time after the last episode.

One of my first stories in English, which isn´t my native language.
So if you find any grammatical mistakes and such, please tell me.

Also, thanks to Architect, who preread this story and gave me some tips wich really helped.
Thanks!

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 5 )

I have to say, this is a massive improvement over the draft you sent me earlier. Keep it up.

I will admit that this is indeed better than I had expected it to be. Asides from a few minor spelling errors, this is turning into an interesting story and I can't wait to read more from this and to find out the fate of the CMC.

Keep it up!

-Frost:pinkiesmile:

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Aw, thank you! What exactly are those spelling errors? I´m not really experienced in the finer thingies of English grammar...

Alright, I'm intrigued!

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