A tragedy in Ponyville leads to the death of Princess Celestia. What takes her place, is a being of almost infinite power.
In Equestria's darkest hour, Twilight Sparkle stumbles upon new information about the Elements of Harmony, forgotten, for generations. But can she discover their true power and activate it before it's too late?
Please note: The story takes a while to pick up, especially in the early chapters.
Great story.hopefully gets a sequel. Nothing wrong with it. Also fun to read.
6043725 If you mean a continuation of this, then oh yes. There is a whole lot more to come. Already quite far into the second chapter.
Thanks for sharing your opinion! I'm glad you liked it.
6043760 more to come.
this is pretty good, all in all, I would think you deserve a moustache for this
6045759 Thanks!
I notice there are a few down votes.
If you don't like the story, please take the time to tell me why, and I can improve it.
Thanks
"The greatest weakness of most humans is their hesitancy to tell others they love them while they're alive."
I wonder where that quote is from....
6046230 Trust me, you might not want people to 'tell you why'. Someone around here is just going up to people's stories and swearing at them.
6086863 Well, yeah, you're right. But I haven't been getting much response at all lately, so at least that's something.
6087180 True.
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6125786 Not sure what that means, but it seems positive, so thanks!
Glad to see someone made it that far into the story
6054344 i dont know, but i have another quote on humanities base instincts:
the thing that defines us as human is our ability to be inhumane to each other
again, probably not so much a quote as a proverb, but still philosophically interesting
aren't crystal berries canon?
6143282 I like it.
If you want to know where my quote is from, you'll have to look closely at it. The answer is great.
I'm horrible at riddles :P
6143296 ...Maybe....
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I'll have to do something about that. Thanks for pointing it out.
is there also a garden of shadows?
6143314 Spoilers!
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I'm So Meta Even This Acronym
6143326 ???
I'll give you a hint. The answer is in the quote.
6143363 does everything you post have to be a riddle of some kind?
I mean, it's only happened twice, but that's enough for me to start making assumptions
and so i will
6143377 Nah, it's just that I love to put them in places, and you're the only one that looks at them.
I'll tell you. There's a hyperlink hidden in the quote.
6143448 you seem familiar... are you Galen?
6143461 Who's that lol?
6143575 the way you write seems a lot like my cousins, but it's probably nothing... i was wrong
Review of The Matrix of Friendship by MrSp33dy123.
Right off the bat:
The title reminds of The Matrix of Leadership from Transformers, just pointing that out. Now to the story. Short description: very nice, yet also another Transformers element I believe, or perhaps just me.
Should be knocked, not nocked. And that comma is unneeded. Just remember they are used for pauses in a sequence of thoughts. The Trojan Horse reference was one I thought could be a good concept for shape-shifting: some of the more iconic things we've made could very well be deadly brought to life. Now the death scene with Fluttershy could have been fleshed out a tad more, showing us how her eyelids slowly closed, breathing came to a standstill in time or even the lifeless slump to the ground. With Discord's...choice of actions following that was very justified in my opinion as he knew of a way ponies could be brought back to life.
Love the cover art.
A few words such as hands, people, and perhaps one other would not really apply to ponies, but those like Spike and Discord may be more adequate to use in that fashion. The story in itself is very good, look forward to more as I am reading the 5th chapter and most likely will be finishing by the time you read this. Besides a few minor grammar errors, like spacing and a misspelled word or two, I like it. Like I have mentioned in a previous review, I rarely do scores as they limit you on a set number that could be interpreted as so many things, but as I have to completely finish the fic, you get a 8/10, a 9.5 now as the T.H. reference and allowing me to review this. If you need help with anything, be it with your fic, talk about personal issues in private or want to pitch new ideas, you know my schedule and my PM is always open. I expect more good things such as this from you, when you have the drive of course.
-Celestial Nyx Nova
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I think I'd me more suprised if It didn't. This story is (at a lot of times) heavily influenced by Transformers lore. A lot of it will become clearer in the end, but a quote that I'm sticking to for this story is: "The matrix of leadership is not found, it is earned."
Ah yes, a nice catch on your part. I tend to use way more commas than normal though, as a lot of my text is intended to be read slowly. At least, that's how it does down in my head. Especially in the later chapters, you'll notice very short paragraphs. I often try to add way more expression and emphasis to text that most stories normally would.
Well, that's true, but the Trojan Horse was extremely deadly.
Hmmm, you're right. I always thought not enough time was put into that, and so I guess I put a lot of chapters in making up for that. I think my story actually gets worse at it goes along. Maybe.
Well, ponies have used the term 'hand' on multiple occasions, but the term 'people' and 'everyone' are things that, yes, I shouldn't use. It was only last chapter that I started using Ctrl+F to search for things like that.
I'm really glad you liked it, and thanks again so much for taking the time to read and review it for me.
I never thought my story had problems with grammar and spelling, but now you have brought that to my attention, so I shall make sure to put an extra run-through on spellchecker.
I always thought this story was a bit... aimless. I never planned this story out much. I knew what I wanted to do in the end, and I found a way to get there. But I didn't detail any of it out, It just sort of flowed.
Thanks again, and I shall take your advice into account.
Will there EVER be resurrections?
6338059 Good question....
6338710 I wrote 3 new responses to your PM.
I was sure evil celestia was solar flare. Bu this sounds cooler though.
6388314 Ah yes, I've heard of Solar Flare. Isn't she from the comics? If not I think I've heard of her from some fanfics and fan art.
I think Solar Flare may have been a slightly better choice, but at the time of writing this (which I started a couple of months ago) I hadn't heard of her. I think Solar Eclipse is good in the sense that's it unique, though.
I'm glad you liked it
6390794 well your character has a different backstory but solar flare is nightmare celestia
6390902 A nightmare celestia? I thought she was more on the light side. Hence the 'Flare' part. I don't know, I wanted to have a Celestia alter-ego that was dark.
I wonder if Chapter 10 will come to be.
6399611 Did you read the author's notes?
To put it simply, it's not something I plan to do anytime soon.
6399674 I hope it doesn't get cancelled. Besides, I'm smart enough to realize you forgot about Spike.
6399679 That has to be one of my biggest mistakes I've ever made in my entire writing career. Wow. I'm usually the one trying to get Spike more attention.
My plan was for him and Twilight to go on a journey to find the Matrix together, so he certainly wasn't going to be underutilized.
6400041 However, if this story DOES go on hiatus, will the hiatus end?
6400051 I thought I explained this, but I'll say it in case I haven't already.
It depends on how much attention this story has. It certainly sounds like you like it, so I might get to continuing it at some point. But, to answer your question, not until I have completed the fanfics that I have planned out ATM.
I can give you a sneak-peek at what they are, if you really want.
6400383 I might get to reading your other fictions, and yet, I'm still trying to get support for my speakeasy post, and my lost elements post, as well as my GDoc.
Why did you cancel this?
it was a good idea.