Rarity and Applejack are on their first casual date, but Rarity has hesitations about swimming in the pond with Applejack. Will she abandon her marefriend or set aside her fears and dive on in? (pun intended) Just short, sweet fluff.
Cover art credit to BronyFang
I liked it!
Kissing, that much, on a first date? Call me old-fashioned, but that sorta works against suspension of disbelief.
Great fic! Love RariJack and enjoyed this fic a lot! First fic I read in months actually, I love romantic fluff.
Don't see any particular flaws with it, except things like this:
It seems like it should be:
There were a couple others like this, and I could be wrong, I'm no genius at writing.
cuteeeeee
Is that a "How to Train Your Dragon reference" at the end there!?
Amazing for a first-time fanfic! Keep writing! You're gonna be an amazing writer, even better than you are now! (Which is hard to see since you're already soooo good!)
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Thank you, and thanks so much for the input! Grammar is not my strongest suit.
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Yes, yes it is.
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Thank you so much! I'm working on a couple more fluff stories, but I also have a few bigger projects in the works.
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It's no problem, quite a good fic.
So fluffy that I could use it for a pillow
Hello! Have a review. Low-key (in the dictionary sense, not the "kinda" sense) fluffshipping, and there's nothing wrong with that. Not exactly action-packed, but then it's not trying to be. It's a shame you never published anything else, especially given you asked for help to improve in the Author's Notes. Because while this does show clear signs of inexperience, it also shows potential. I think a bit of practice and experience could have had you writing at a higher level than this. A pity we never got to see it.