Chapter 1
The trees of Thorntail woods were calm, the leaves blowing slightly in the wind. The occasional squirrel or bird passing through. A trail set through the woods. On this trail, was a pegasus and an alicorn, the pegasus had green coat of fur, her mane was blonde with an assortiment of colours, same with her tail. Atop her head was a stetson with a pair of goggles above the brim. Her flank had a giant rainbow apple cutie mark on it. She was carrying a huge backpack on her back The alicorn on the other hand, had a platinum blonde coat, a light purple mane & tail, and a crystal butterfly cutie mark on her flank. She had a daisy in her mane.
"And please explain to me why we can't use our wings and fly?" The Pegasus asked. "We all have wings."
"Because." The Alicorn retorted. "The aireal threats are higher in this part of Equestria. It's safer on land."
"And?" The Pegasus said. "You and Twinkle are alicorns, plus I know how fight." The Pegasus then stood on her hind hooves and proceeded to jab her front hooves in the air really fast. "See?"
"Because, Rainbowjack." The alicorn retorted. "Magic isn't very useful, Plus you never know if you'll run into Dark Magic out here."
Rainbowjack sighed and looked up. "You're right, Shy. It's probably safer. Wait, Twinkle has been awfully quiet." The Pegasus looked around. "Oh sweet Celestia. Where is Twinkle?
Rarishy turned around. Twinkle, the other alicorn, was nowhere to be seen.
"TWINKLE!" Both mares called.
"Up here."
Both mares looked towards the location of the voice. Twinkle was standing on top of a tree. Twinkle was a purple alicorn, her mane was a fury mix of pink and purple & it was very curly, same with her tail. She had a sparkling balloon for a cutie Mark.
"Sorry girls." Twinkle spread her wings and flew to the ground. "There are so many different types of leaves out compared to ponyville and everfree. I'll have to do weeks of research and get-" she was interrupted by Rainbowjack, who put her hoof on her mouth.
"I love you sug, but you're so annoying sometimes." Rainbowjack said.
"Rainbowjack!"
"No, she's right, I went on a mode again." Twinkle said while rubbing the back of her head. "Sorry."
"No darling, we all do that." As Rarishy comforted Twinkle, RJ looked up at the sky, it should be about 3am.
"Hey." RJ shouted, both mares turned towards her. "Look, we have a good 4-5 hours before the sun goes down, I would like to make as much progress as we can. So let's get moving."
"Alright."
"Sure!"
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(Later that night)
"There!" Twinkle said as a fire erupted from the pile of logs in front of her.
"Nice, good job."
"Well done."
"Thanks girls." Twinkle blushed. "It was really easy compared to most spells I know."
"You should teach me sometime. Well...if you want to." Rarishy said.
"Sure!" Said Twinkle as she popped up right next to her.
"Eeep!" Cried Rarishy as she fell off the log, on her back.
"Rarishy, are you alright!?" Twinkle asked as she went to help her fused friend up. "I scared you again, didn't I?" Twinkle got a very guilty expression on her face.
"It's quite alright Twinkle." The white alicorn helped herself up. "I now you didn't mean it dear." Rarishy brushed herself off.
Twinkle wasn't convinced. "Are you sure you okay? Like, super duper uper okay?" Twinkles expression went from guilty to concerned.
"She's fine Twinkle." Rainbowjack shouted. "She's an alicorn now, remember? A simple fall is nothing to both of you."
"Doesn't mean I can't feel pain." Rarishy retorted. She sat back on the log. "Now Twinkle. You were about to teach me more spells?"
"Oh yeah!" Twinkle Sat down next to Rarishy.
Rainbowjack chuckled as the other two began talking all nerdy-magic. She couldn't relate, she was only a Pegasus, there was barely and magic in her, aside from the sonic rainboom & and the Element of both Honestly & Loyalty, she couldn't focus and channel it like them. She really wants to unfuse, she could easily gallop to the spot Celestia said they could find them , but then Rarishy & Twinkle wouldn't be able to unfuse, no matter what she could think of, there was no way she could make back in time. Rainbowjack looked at the sky, it was starting to get pretty dark.
"Alright girls." Rainbowjack said as she got up. "I think it's time to pack it in for the night." RJ then went through the giant backpack.
"Okay."
"Sure."
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(30 mins later)
Rainbowjack sighed as she drove the hammer down on the peg. "There! That's about it." She looked over at the other two, they were done as well with their tents.
"Night girls. Hope you sleep well." Rarishy said with a yawn as she went into her tents.
"Night."
RJ yawned and turned towards the fire and noticed Twinkle sitting on one of the logs. RJ fluttered over.
"What's keeping you up?" RJ asked as she sat down next to Twinkle.
"Huh? Oh nothing really."
"C'mon I can tell something is bugging ya."
Twinkle sighed. "Just ...........thinking about what would happen if we failed."
"We remain like this forever, it's probably gonna suck, Rarishy is gonna be a princess now and I don't know if I'll join the Wonderbolts. But we'll do it, we've conquered impossible stuff before."
"Not that, I might've changed the truth a slight bit about failure."
"What do you mean?"
"Permanent fusion means that our souls fuse, which means we stay fused, even into the afterlife."
RJ's eyes went wide. "So even in death we're stuck like this?
"Yeah. That's why it's dark magic."
"Well, that just adds a bit of urgency." RJ shrugged.
"I know one thing for sure, I'm never drinking anything alcoholic for the rest of my life."
"Same here." RJ got up and stretched. "Well, I'm going to bed, night."
"Night. I'll put out the fire." Twinkle sighed and looked into fire. "I hope we fix this.
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is this first chapter or somewhere between?
6599893 First chapter, of how many Idk, probably 5 or6
6599896 ok so how did they got fuse in the place?
6599944 Really? Really.....*sigh* Twilight & Co. Got drunk during sleepover at the castle, Twilight accidentally used a dark magic spell that fused Rarity & Fluttershy, Applejack & Rainbow Dash, and Herself & Pinkie, why fusion is Dark magic & no one uses it anymore will be explained in a later chapter
6600816 ok, maybe you shroud make a prologues for that part sound good.
6601080 Originally I did have one, but I couldn't come up with anything and eventually canned it
6601080 Originally I did have one, but I couldn't come up with anything and eventually canned it
6601105 well, you need to make one before post this story.
6601161 No. Dude, I said I couldn't come up with anything, if I forced myself to write a prologue, it's gonna end up pretty shitty, I don't even like prologues
6601209 ok so try making some flashback in this chapter to let people know what really happen.
This is cool!
6603026 Good, Glad to see you enjoyed it.
Sir/Ma'am, I believe this requires editing...
I just have point this out you have the time frames off it should 3pm not am
Also on that note
Okay,that's clearly asposed to be know
And one more time
Switch the d with a y in and. Then it makes alot more sence
6603092 it's currently 12:40 am where I am, so no.
6603091 I am a sir
6603099 Uuumm... That's your reply???
Also I don't believe Rarishy should be considered an alicorn given she can only pull upon pegasus (or flutterpony given her wings) magic and unicorn magic. A false alicorn (pegacorn or unisus) certainly but definitely not a true immortal alicorn.
6603109
1: I am very impatient, when I finish a chapter/Story, it's a miracle I get Proofreaders at all.
2: I'm on a mobile android, all my typing and writing is on an admittedly shitty phone.
Sorry if I sound mad, I'm writing to improve my writing.
6603099 seriously you do relize im trying to help you here i edit no charge and i was reading your story granted you dont care i see that but at least clear up your grammar mistakes but think about this ive been up for twenty-four hours it is four am here yet I'm trying to help you 3am was referring to a part in your story i forgot to qoute it doesn't take four hours for it to get dark at 3am it's already dark
6603124 I don't understand what impatience has to do with obtaining an editor/proof. What you need is somepony who will work on a story with you, to its completion. Kind of like the setup I have with my clients. They post; I borrow the text, edit, and throw it over to them, they update the story.
6603131 Oh, you want to help me? I'd appreciate that so much. Having, not only another proofreader, but an editor would so help.
And about the Rarishy thing, I completely forgot to mention in the description (gonna fix it) to ignore that part in the art, in the story she is a complete Alicorn
6603130 I have nothing to say to that statement
6603144 well nothing to say is the best thing to say sometimes
6603144 If I help, it would be a one-time thing, for this chapter only, due to the fact I already have a full set of edit work. I refer you to my bio "may accept quick work" If you're accepting anyway, how do you want to play this? I can PM you the results, but I prefer to work in Gdocs...
I will also be requiring a credit for my work.
6603149 it's you statement is incomprehensible.
6603154 Just PM me and I'll edit the story.
Do you happen to know where it easy to find editors on this site?
6603163 the group,called looking for editors easiest place to find an editor
This has a lot of potential and i really like spin you've given to each fused character, though the lead narative needs work. Assume this is the first fanfic your reader has come accross. At present the reader is dropped into a situation with characters only reminiscent of the pre-established cast, with little context bar the blerb, which shouldn't constitute essential reading. However, with a little expansion on the characters discription, an extra exchange or two to really ground thier combined personalities, the first part of this chapter it would serve nicely as a scene setter and a good lead into a 'how we got here' scenario. Not saying to get rid of anything as i quite like whats there, just might be an idea to expand upon this world that you've started to draw us into.
Watching this closely as i can see a damn good author developing behind the scenes.
6603174 Thanks. I'll take criticism.
6603163 Uh, wait who's editing the story, me or you? I belong to a group named "Looking for Editors" I'll link you when I have time, but otherwise just search it, or check my page.
6603184 wait, I thought you were gonna point out all mistakes, then send me a message, then I fix them.............that's not it's done at all, is it?
6603191 Uh, no. There's too many for that... I was proposing a full-on edit. As in, a potential near-rewrite.
were is the flashback?
6603144 The idiot can't even handle critcism. Hahaha!
You idiot.
6608209 What? They told me there's error and I'm fix them, I'm here to improve my writing, that's why criticism is welcome, you idiot.
Don't worry about it.
Curious as to when this is going to come off hiatus. I happened to enjoy this story and had been patiently waiting for another chapter.
Added this to my list of stories I'm tracking, last year. I mean, I know patience is a virtue and what not. But, as I previously stated,
Is this story going to come off of Hiatus any time soon?
Keep up the good work.
7204136 Thanks. I blame my writers block, and the fact I get WAY too many idea's in my head at once doesn't help either....
I do plan to continue this eventually, though.
Very interesting. Compelling story though personally I'm curious what it'd be like to see the Amalgamates talking to their fusion material
Why haven’t you added to the story? Also I feel like it deserves a proper intro to how they got into the situation. Like at least give a prequel to this