Being against evil doesn't make you good.
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Rarity is dying from a rare medical condition. Twilight's other friends are getting older. Princesses Celestia and Luna will no longer speak to her. Yet, the Princess of Friendship refuses to make new friends.
Twilight Sparkle has an unconventional solution for dealing with loss. Come take a walk backwards through time, and see the truth through Twilight's eyes.
This story was rated Most Controversial in the finalist round of The Writeoff Association's "Out of Time" contest.
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Dayum son, dis sum gud shit u got here. In all seriousness, good story and I look forward to more of your work ^^
OH wow. Yeah talk all ou like about Spike needing Rarity and then you off yourself instead. Yes that's totally fair Twilight.
Props for writing a time travel story, those are always tricky, one way or the other.
But I'm sorry, I honestly can't imagine Twilight acting this selfish, greedily and horrible, not without years if not outright centuries of beating her head against the problem near any other way.
Let alone murdering a pony she knows have done nothing wrong in cold blood like that. Not even for her friends.
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Didn't see that ending coming ,
This was surprising, admittedly quite so.
Whether or not she can ever break the cycle in time however is unknown to me
Seems interesting
I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENED
I'm going to keep reading
Ow RarityxDoctor
Love it
Oh no she didn't
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she killed her younger self
OMG Twilight that's so wrong and sad
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Spoooooooiler!
6662968
Great story
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Thanks!
(I just meant put a spoiler tag over part of your post if you can.)
6665131 I totally don't know how to do that. I'll try though
I don't know what happen at the ending but i still like this story.
OMG, this has cleaned-up so well since the version in the Writeoff! It was always well-written and interesting, but it just didn't add-up for me at the time. This version fixes that. And I know some of that may come from the fact that I know where it's going this time, but you really do a lot more to explain Twilight's thought process in this version. There's also more payoff for the hints at the beginning that her friends drop about needing to move on.
So: Fav'd. This is one of the more unique and memorable pieces that I've read on here. And yeah, it's bound to draw some hate for portraying Twilight negatively; but there are plenty of other stories with happy endings and personal growth. It's neat to see a (non-exploitative) story showing the extreme opposite.
Well, that left rather more questions than it answered. Well done.
I did not expect that ending. I can see why you got the most controversial tag.
Uh... is that a good thing or a bad thing?
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It means you're likely to either love it or hate it, and I expected a high proportion of downvotes (which has turned out to be true).
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You did continue on to the final chapter, right?
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The ending revealed that Twilight has been repeatedly travelling into the past and murdering/replacing her younger self in order to keep reliving the same period in her life over and over, so she can remain with her friends.
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I did, and I still stand by my statement.
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That's okay! I just wanted to check to make sure, since you posted that on the penultimate chapter (where pretty much everything was left unexplained).
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Yep! (Please spoiler though!)
6750585 Sorry.
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Not a problem! For future reference, though, you can use that little Sp button in the compose frame to spoiler your text; you didn't need to delete the post.
6751661 So THAT'S how you get that black bar up?
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That, or manually enclose your words (spoiler)like this(/spoiler), except use square brackets instead of parentheses.
6751900 I was wondering how to do that.
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1038 A.S. .... 1011 A.S. ..... oh shit, we're going backwards! Neat. Can't wait to see what Twilie's up to.
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Had to stop rite here. "dreadful hospital for a few hours." Bad year for me. Will read it later.
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I'm sorry about your distress.
Some of my works are a little on the Sad/Dark side, and just to warn you, this particular one is a lot of both. Don't take it on until you're sure you're ready.
My fiance can't read most of the things I write because he's very sensitive to anything Sad (even when it has a happy ending, like The Element of Surprise).
So what happens when *ahem* her friends wake up in 1043 AS the day after Twilight goes back to off herself? Is Twilight gone forever as she's going back to relive time with her friends forever?
Anyways, dark as usual, but a well-written and intriguing story. Good work!
7004329 So this is my interpretation of what happened regarding the cycle of Twilight replacing her younger selves.
Twilight has a mantle because in one of the times she went back and killed herself, her older self had gained the mantle while the younger self that she killed had yet to gain it. Therefore, the next day, it appeared to Celestia and Luna that Twilight had used other means to obtain a mantle, while Twilight had gotten it normally through her many years of cycling through life.
This would also explain her prophetic abilities, as she would always know of Rarity's disease and the Princesses' ultimatum through her experience after going back many times.
Furthermore, each time Twilight goes back, she knows a little more about Rarity's disease, allowing her to become better at delaying its effects every time. So perhaps the first time she went back in time, Rarity's symptoms appeared immediately, but by the current iteration, Twilight has appeared to been able to find a delaying strategy instantaneously and delay its effects by 20 years.
Lastly, theoretically speaking, if Twilight finds the solution to immortality after several hundred times of going back to replace herself, would she finally just use it on her friends and stop the cycle?
I'm just highly curious about how my interpretation compares with those of the author's or other readers.
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That's roughly the right idea. I don't think Twilight believes she can ever make her friends immortal, however.
Hmm... longest chapter by far and I haven't gotten my jimmies rustled about anything. Certainly curious about where this will go (has already been?
).
Well, the silly imagery helps counteract Luna being a bitch.
If this precognition is future Twilight sending herself backwards through her own body, and that's what caused the rift between the Princesses and perpetuated a time loop...
Also, what about Cadance?
Ah darn it, she is- Twilight's suffering fromDr. Manhattan syndrome.
7007048 Ah, multiple cycles, so the Twilight who appears at the end had not just vanished from the beginning? I was thinking of correcting my last diagnosis- Dios syndrome instead.
In any case, mindscrewy, but I wouldn't have thought controversial. A pleasant surprise after all that buildup.
This is just.... brilliant. I'd say something more profound, but I'm at a loss for words.
why is twilight fighting with the others?
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You will have to read on to discover why.
Sucker punch man, sucker punch...
Nice liked the ending good twist I thought she was going back in time but I like this idea more
The only question is why is she fighting with the sisters do they know what she is doing also why is this so contriversel? I've read story in wich twilight is astronomicly difrent then show Twi so this isn't even that wird any way Reilly like the story.