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Principal Abacus Cinch is a cruel woman for whom life's only passion is the reputation of her school, Crystal Prep Academy and has an unknown deep hatred for Christmas. However, on the night of December 24, Cinch is confronted by the Spirits of Past, Present, and Future of Christmas who review her past and fortell her future. Will Cinch redeem her selfish ways or is she too late to repair the damage she may have caused?
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A Charles Dickens story retold with ponies? Bah! Humbug!
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Umm, dude this is Equestria Girls.
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Eh, close enough for me. (I was looking for an excuse to use "Bah! Humbug!" anyway; sorry!)
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It's alright.
Pretty good, though I feel like you're trying to emulate Charles Dickens' original dialogue WAY too much, to the point where I'm thinking aloud "There's no way this character would talk like this in today's era, given their personality or way of talking". Not that that makes the story bad, far from it, I love A Christmas Carol. Just try to write this dialogue how you think these characters would say it in their own way.
I'm so excited for the next chapter!
This is a good concept, but the dialogue makes it feel more like Dickens with pony characters rather than a Pony Christmas Carol. I'd suggest making the dialogue more modern but keeping the rest of the concept as it is.
Fluttershy is the ghost of Christmas Past? I'd expect it to be someone who she knew, not the element of kindness.
Skyla... Save Skyla!
Well, finally sat down and read this about a week after Christmas, and I have to say...this isn't bad.
It needs editing, yeah, but it isn't bad.
I think it's funny how Fluttershy is the ghost of Christmas past.
Nooooo not Skyla
I never really read the Christmas Carol but I do love this version
That was beautiful
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Well, she is kindness after all.
The story looks good, but you should maybe make the dialogue sound more modern.
Beautiful!
I would probably change a few things from this, just to make it a bit more original, but overall it's pretty good.
YES!!!!! DO IT MIDNIGHT!!!!! GIVE HER THE KARMA SHE DESERVES! Great chapter.
I like this part, but I'm wondering how and if Sunny Flare's father/Cinch's ex-husband or boyfriend plays a role in her reason for hating Christmas.
OMG SO cool... I think I screamed too at one point
Woah this is a whole nother side to scary lady cinch... I can't wait to see what'll happen next!
damn......... 😐
the buck?! This is crazy!!!
indeed, just like the Disney version of the Christmas carol, very well done.
Too much like the original story. ☹
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Huh, wasn't expecting to see cinch having a daughter in this story or it being sunny flare for that matter. But eh. It's still good enough. 😊
That is just rude!
It sure was.
I I can't believe she said that, especially to her own daughter! 😨😱
Damn, that's just sad. 😢
Huh, ngl I think fluttershy was a good choice/pick as the ghost of Christmas past.
That is just so sad.
He sure would.
Indeed you did. 😠
She fits the picture perfectly if you ask me.
I'm guessing that girl is sonata probably.
That's precisely another way to call Cinch's attitude if you ask me. 😏
That's family for ya.
And I'm sure she did after cinch lost her role as principal in the eqg series following the friendship games.
https://m.Glad to know she is know a changed woman.
Had a feeling those two would forgive her.
Huh, didn't expect her to give cadance a hug. 😯
Thank you!
Clever use of the original language of the novella.
There is a moment at the end of the first stave that not many people know about. When Scrooge looks outside his window after Marley departs, he sees all sorts of ghosts, all wrapped in chains, and one particular spirit wailing at a beggar woman and her infant on the streets that he could have helped them.
I only saw this in the 2009 adaptation, but that is an image that never left me. There's an illustration in the novella of it too.