Roseluck was a local living in Ponyville. She was friends with a pony named Bonbon. But Roseluck happens to stumble on a secret that she never knew Bonbon kept. Now that she knew Bonbon was a secret agent, the organization sees her as a threat. But because of Bonbon, Princess Celestia decides to let Roseluck join the agency instead of killing her. But if she proves herself worthy, of course.
Brilliant! Please write more!
Some errors I stumbled upon.
In cases of numbers lower and equal to twelve, you write them as words. (At least that's how I learned it.)
*said
*knocked (?)
*now or *knob
*you're – Somehow a really common mistake nowadays.
Hmmm. I'm unsure about the use of capitalization on titles such as Princess. But I'm pretty sure that that "yes" is supposed to have big Y
*Very
*you're
*small smile
...and she's just telling her that?!
And one final thing: this is rated E for Everypony, yet they talk about death...
Okay, this was pretty neat written. Waiting for the second chapter
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Thank you for telling me! I didn't realize those mistakes.
7001210 Always happy to help
*you
*freezing
*Come on
Missing a blank between "bad" and "I".
"Okay, onto to the next situation..."
MOAR.
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... And edited! On to the next chapter!
7033646 Yay
*got
Missing a " here.
Oh man, I can't believe I found this... a month after reading a fallout x MLP that involves a bit of Espionage made me watch joker game and now I finally found this.
Hmm, Roseluck the luckiest agent to ever live... Oh sorry its just a me imaging thing again