Family Reunion

I exit the train, no where near my home, walking though a sea of unknown ponies, lost, confused, and sad.
But I must prevail, if I'm ever to see my destiny, I must meet her.

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Bronzedragon

Bronzedragon #1 · May 23rd, 2016 · · ·

I really do not like to comment on someone's choice of editors however in this case I will make an exception.

This is an nice story, it is however riddled with a large number of misspelled words and incidents of the wrong word even if it is spelled right. You really need to take another look at it and correct them as they interrupt the immersion and flow that a story needs. Below are a few examples of what I am talking about

expecting an predador [ predator ]
I hear the pony in ( the ) ocean blue suit with a matching cap
,” I interpreted causally, [ interrupted, casually ]
did you just told me of dangerous monsters [tell ]
You’ve save me much [ saved ]
Grass flourish on the planes, [ flourishes, plains ]
the travelers to Equestria clam [ Equesteria, claim ]
The single path I had suddenly splitted in two, [ split ]
revealing the glorious shoman [shaman ]
. The mowhawk... [Mohawk ]

and so forth this is to good a start to leave it so. Good luck and keep writing.

treegrowth

treegrowth #2 · May 23rd, 2016 · · ·

Could have sworn that those words were better spelled. I double checked them my self.

Thanks, I'll get to fixing it tomorrow.
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CaioCoia

CaioCoia #3 · May 23rd, 2016 · 1 · ·

I liked, Somepony who names is Everfree is awesome, I want to read more about him.

treegrowth

treegrowth #4 · Jun 12th, 2016 · · ·

7239129 If I maybe so bold, is this better?

Bronycommander

Bronycommander #5 · Nov 6th, 2016 · · ·

Yep, writing in rhyme is very hard. Writing accents is also not easy. (At least for me)

treegrowth

treegrowth #6 · Nov 7th, 2016 · · ·

7699355 yeah, here I am trying to teach you how to write, then I'm reminded of my own.... miscalculations.
I'm such a hypocrite
Still I am trying to put out new stories, I just don't know how to fight off my own laziness.
Thanks for the fav, BTW.