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Havokwithak


A simple writer with a love for ponies and romance. If there's anything you want to know ask.

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Twilight can't sleep. She's not slept a full night in two months and it's all because of this feeling she has. All she can do is lay awake and think. She's been falling asleep hanging out with her friends and she's constantly drowsy. This is just one night of the many that she's laid awake and thought of her feelings.

A short one-shot story.

Sex tag is for just a couple brief mentions of sex.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 15 )

A fine addition to the legion of TwiLuna stories.

I especially liked the focus on Twilight's fear of Luna reciprocating her feelings. Two ponies each saying 'yes' is not the end of relationship challenges, it is the beginning. Twilight is smart enough to realize that and has enough self esteem issues to worry about it.

Annoying spellcheck fox, ho! :pinkiehappy:

"But what if ^ I want is... somepony...?" Twilight asked.

A 'what' kind of snuck away from this sentence, I think. :twilightsmile:

Twilight smiled as she me Luna's steadfast gaze.

'Met'. :twilightsmile:

It had been there idea

'Their.' :twilightsheepish:

This was a lovely little tale! The abject terror of the new-to-love. :rainbowlaugh:

7476346 Fixed and thank you very much.

I like and I I say 100 bits Luna cuddles twilight in her sleep

7478181 so instead of plural (ponies) you think he should've used pony's (pony is/ thing belongs to pony)?

7479804 I guess I can see that being used.

7478780 That seems like a very safe bet. :twilightsmile:

7478181 Yeah, didn't notice that until you said something, but I'm very glad you liked the story regardless. :twilightsmile:

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: That betting pool. Guess they mite be able to tell depending on hw sore Twilight is in the morning :twilightblush:
Although cuddles are excellent and its a shame no one (Fluttershy?) didn't bet on finding them still cuddling tomorrw with nothing further having happened. But i guess that would be beyond the scope of a short story like this and the way you did the betting was funny.

I like how you covered the emotions thoughout the chapter. Although Twilights inner monologue was the best part. Kinda funny that Luna walked in knowing Twilights problem and was kind enough to lead her along as she did.


Its very rare for me to read MLP fan fiction these days. But this sure stands out to me as a top tier TwiLuna one shot.

Yesss, very well written!
And of course it's TwiLuna OTP <3

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