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All Spike wanted to do was read some comic books while Twilight and Starlight were away. But alas, Trixie has come to visit. And to make matters worse, a spell has backfired on her, leaving her split into several tiny little versions of herself. That are all running amok in the castle. Great...
Commission for Swashbucklist.
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At first, I thought these were technological advancements from the human world.
Oh, and you didn't name it The Trouble With Trixies? For shame! :)
Thanks to MythrilMoth I find little misadventures featuring Spike and Trixie to be very entertaining, and you definitely exceeded expectations. I guess when the princess is away the magicians shall play. Love how all the little Trixie's are basically overzealous toddlers, except with a slightly better vocabulary.
This had started off as great comic gold....it reminded me of the great Hanna Barbera cartoon, Tom and Jerry....Spike of course being Tom and Trixie is Jerry. :) Moments of pure chaos and fun as more characters are unknowingly drawn into the plot caused me to laugh more then once. :)
But where it fell flat was the ending....Jerry in the cartoons hardly ever if any seems to be punished...it is always Tom. And the ending where Spike wins and Trixie loses was well...FIM canon predictable.
Trixie once again being punished for something she wasn't in her right mind for....yet other ponies/dragons got off scot free or just a slap on the hoof....Lesson Zero, Too Many Pinkie Pies..the episode where Rarity turns the town to gold...spike destroying the town....Rainbow destroying the weather factory....need I say more?
I think the story would overall be stronger if you change it to or also add a Jerry ending...it would be a great homage parody, especially if it's an open ending.
That was actually pretty funny. Granted, I think Trixie's punishment was unjust considering that, if it had been Twilight or Starlight or any other pony in this situation, they likely would have caused just as much damage due to the spread of their intelligence in all of the miniatures. Basically, she wasn't in her right mind and didn't even explain precisely what she did-she just remembered being hit by her spell if that, and then she has three of Equestria's four princesses threatening as well as a former time traveling maniac who's now trying to be a better pony but has occasional relapses.
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The entire reason Trixie was in that situation was because she tried to cast an advanced and complicated spell on Spike without his consent. She was reckless, and the damage caused as the result of that recklessness is her fault. Just like if you drive drunk and run someone over, you're arrested for it. You might not have been in your right mind, but that was because you were reckless when you were in your right mind (assuming you intentionally drank a lot of alcohol and didn't get your drink spiked).
As for some of the examples... meh, I can't control the show, just what I right. But Rarity turning the town to gold would be on Spike, if you're talking about what I think you're talking about.
Let's take a quick trip
To Twilight Sparkle's castle
Full of friendship--
And a mighty hassle
For the place is destroyed
And Spike is annoyed
At what resulted when the latest menace deployed
In Twilight's absence
There's no one around
With that convenient magic grip
So Spike is on a mission
And with his claws he's fishing
But who d'you think is giving him the slip?
Forty-two disaggregated Trixies
Running round as wild as can be
When the spell is cast
By the well outclassed
Then the showmare's bragging
Makes for one one tired dragon
When there's forty-two disaggregated Trixies
Every instant sculpts a different lunatic frieze
Spike finds this all abhorrent
And Twilight's got a warrant
For forty-two disaggregated Trixies!
(Tune)
Not that she had all that much to begin with.
Well, that could've gone a whole lot worse.
Ahahahahaha no.
I'm actually relieved Spike wasn't blamed for all the damage, with how awful the show tends to treat Spike (at least before season 6), I was half-expecting Trixie to run off right before everyone else returned and of course Discord wouldn't help. I'm happy Spike finally got to relax after all the chaos.
The idea of dozens of mini-Trixies rampaging through the castle sounds hilarious, especially with all the different situations you came up with. Along with mocking why the castle (with at least one important powerful artifact inside) is basically left mostly empty and unguarded most of the time.
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They still could be. After all, Spike just said what they were powered by, not who invented them...
7528187 You can blame me for that. The title was my call.
7528308 Starting with that story in which Spike and Trixie get stuck in a hole? Yeah, I commissioned that one from MythrilMoth. And it's unexpectedly disturbing sequel. Sorry dude, but nobody writes about Spike and Trixie unless you pay them to...
...Oh wait, there's GiantMako.
Thanks again, Darth!
I have to admit, you did a great job on this story. The exchanges, humor, action and wrap-up were all well done in all the right places. As another reviewer said, this included some pretty good cat-and-mouse cartoon homages. Also as another reviewer said, I really like the fact that Spike DID NOT get stuck with all the blame for the damage. At any rate, I will definitely be looking forward to more of your work as soon as time and inspiration will allow.
Well, that was cute.
And as has been said, nice to see the blame get directed appropriately for once.
That was awesome. I could totally see this happening in an episode or in one of the comics. Good job.
Absolutely hilarious!. I wonder what would happen if the mini Trixies went into the mirror pool? More trouble I presume.
"Pegasi."
"True. Little need for propellers when you can hook up two horsepower to any given chariot."
In any case, delightful madness. Remember, don't expose Trixie to bright light, don't get her wet, and don't feed her after midnight.
You'll sadly never see this comment, but I reviewed this recently and rather liked it. Light-hearted silliness often gets me in a good way.