Fireflies

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Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy have a dispute after watching the fireflies with their friends, and it causes them to realize some things about themselves and each other.
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MisterTTG

MisterTTG #1 · Oct 12th, 2016 · · ·

It's "gorgeous", not goregeous. ^^; Other than that, this was cute.

Gypsy Heart

Gypsy Heart #2 · Oct 12th, 2016 · · ·

It was really sweet. Great job!

MilkTeaFD

MilkTeaFD #3 · Oct 12th, 2016 · · ·

7636368 Thank you for letting me know! I fixed it.

MilkTeaFD

MilkTeaFD #4 · Oct 12th, 2016 · 1 · ·

7636900 Thank you so much : D

MixMassBasher

MixMassBasher #5 · Oct 22nd, 2016 · · ·

Well if you need come constructive critism...

It's a simple one shot. Not grand or anything bit I did like Rainbow's attempt to help the firefly. Sentimental but funny all the same.

But the biggest problem I have is that I never get the vib of romance in this story. Granted there was interactions between Rainbow and Fluttershy but no hint of romance just interaction.

I mean theres a hint of possible romace at the end but thats very slim

MilkTeaFD

MilkTeaFD #6 · Oct 28th, 2016 · · ·

7661028 Yeah, I also felt like it was more friendshipping than anything. But there is no friendship genre so I just put Romance :/
Thank you for your comment!

MixMassBasher

MixMassBasher #7 · Oct 28th, 2016 · · ·

7677516 Perhaps this story was more suited for the slice of life tag only.

Wahtiff

Wahtiff #8 · Jan 21st, 2017 · · ·

You probably didn't intend for this, but throughout this whole story I couldn't help but think about what I had learned about Jainism in religious history class- mainly about how they believe in not harming even insects.

Even if you didnt, I gotta say, this was a nice fic.

MilkTeaFD