After defeating Frieza's army, killing Frieza himself and his father, King Cold, Trunks tells the Z-fighters where Goku will land when he returns to Earth. Trunks told Goku that he's from the future and what is supposed to happen in the future. After giving the Saiyan his heart medicine, Trunks says goodbye and leaves with his time machine. Think for a second. What happens when time travel goes wrong? The answer? There's no telling what could happen. Trunks' time machine manages to fit this description, but things are currently beyond explanation for him this time around. He somehow gets sent into a strange world, full of talking, colorful, humanoid equines. But also something Trunks never thought he'd ever get to experience: Peace. Well, that’s what he thought, at first.
Pretty good, I like the idea and the placement in the timeline. Two things that I did notice though.
This thought doesn't finish, I think you meant to add wedding, but that doesn't quite fit either, so I'm not sure.
And what happened to his time machine after he got out of it? I'd think that he would pack it up, but it doesn't say anything about that, so is it still sitting there in the cave? Not a real problem in the writing, I'm just a little unsure if he put it back in the capsule.
I enjoyed this first chapter, the grammar was pretty good, no complaints there. As well as paragraph structure, I hope to see some more of this, I'm interested in seeing how this turns out.
Well we'll back with the wedding thing and I guess people didn't like how Twilight's friends didn't believe her (I would) at least the changelings are nice in the future
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Didn’t notice that. Thanks for pointing it out. Should be fixed now.
First I see
And I thought "Oh no, another story with awesome potential that won't get past the first chapter."
Then I see "Published: Yesterday" and now I'm a bit confused as to how this works.
Still, this is an excellent concept and I can't wait to read more. Love it
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I think it says that because that date is when I created the chapter... then I forgot about the story for a year... then I decided to upload it yesterday.
Cool, it went about as one sided as I expected it to. Nice. So, does this mean he's stronger than celestia? Or is it just a different kind of strength?
I wonder if he'll try to teach the ponies there about the Ki manipulation. Maybe if he gets stuck there he will.
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Trunks is far stronger, far faster, and far more powerful than Celestia. My headcanon is that Ki is way more powerful than magic is. And I think that makes sense. From what I know, Ki seems to be specifically tailored towards combat. Magic, on the other hand, can be used for a lot more things. That’s how I look at it.
We still love it, and thanks for posting.
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kinda agree on that mark, ki is more combat oriented while magic while it can be devastating is weaker but more versatile. Also dbz ki is known to produce many planet busters, meanwhile most magics from any source of media aren't capable of planet busting, planet scarring and destroying continents, but not literally able to blow up a planet
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Eventually. I’m doing this as a hobby, so I don’t work on it any more than I feel like working on it.
Not too bad, I'd like to see where that one goes especially since he didn't even go Super Saiyan.
She didn't stand a chance. Nor did Freezer. yes a TFS reference was used. bite my shiny metal ass.
Not bad man. I liked this. alot :D.
OMG she fucking dead, love the story hope to see more