Changeling Magic

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Chrysanthemum is a researcher pony, and she has been following a lead on the forms of magic in equestria for the longest time, and now she is presenting it to a group of her peers as a topic of further investigation. But the one question everyone there has on their mind right now is...why is she hiding her face?

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BellChime

BellChime #1 · Apr 14th, 2017 · 1 · ·

Neat!

TheEveryDaySparkle

TheEveryDaySparkle #2 · Apr 14th, 2017 · · ·

8094711 Thanks!

Cadiefly

Cadiefly #3 · Apr 14th, 2017 · · ·

Here is a thing or two to improve upon in this story.

Time, being a predetermined form of eternal magic outside of the realm of any and everything save a few select individuals

I would remove 'any and'.

At least, not in the sense as it can sensed normally. For there exists a nature inside of us all as well.

At least, not in the normal sense, for there exists a nature inside of us all.

No matter what we do, who we know, or how we do things, it is and will always be the case, it is a form of silent instinct that not one notices until they question their own lives.

I think this flows a little bit better like this.

...it is and always will be a form of silent instinct that no one notices until they question their own lives.

"Earth pony magic is directly tied to nature magic? given their station on the ground and predisposition to the care-taking of the land.

Needs a comma.

The absorb the natural magic from the ground and, without knowing, use it to aid in the many feats of strength they perform daily. The magic of earth ponies often goes unoticed even by themselves.

I believe you meant to put they. And unnoticed is misspelled in the last sentence here.

However, unicorns have the blessing of a horn, and therefore posses a means to aid in the expelling of their magic outwards and toward a specific target.

possess.

It is the magic born from the feelings one has for one's friend or friends.

I would just put friends. No need to add a redundancy in there.

and is made even more lpowerful if those feelings are even stronger.

powerful.

However, in my drive to study their magic, I did something to incur the wrath of the ruler their.

there.

I was subsequently blasted away with a beam of the most pure magic i'd ever felt.

Capitalize the I.

Listen closely, and pay attention to my every word from this point forward, for what I am about to tell you is very very important.

I don't believe you need the first comma here, but you definitely need a comma separating very and very.

"That being said, due to all the changes the magic has to make, there is a slight pain in the process? which is why they catch fire when the magic takes place.

Needs a comma there.

I liked this piece. It was pretty neat, as BellChime said.

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