Twilight is a passionate and studious alicorn with a desire to learn. Flash is a loyal and determined pegasus that will do anything for his former captain. How will the two get along?
8151972 Well, I won't hold it against them either way.
I don't write for the people that don't like the story anyway, I write for the people who appreciate and like my work. Or at the very least, give me a reason as to why it's bad.
Stay strong, Jack. Biased as I am for having edited this story, ponies need to give it a chance, rather than suffer from the down vote Flash Sentry on sight syndrome
Message me in you need me, also you forgot about the bar, eheh.
Not bad, not bad at all. You have good prose, your style is simple but effective, and you paint the characters well. I like the backstory you gave for Flash, and the relationship between him and Shining. I am wondering how this story is going to pan out if it's all going to be from Shining's POV, though.
Also, I'm a shameless Flashlight shipper, so how could I not enjoy that?
I'll be keeping an eye on this one. I doubt that you will disappoint me.
8152309 Nah man, its too late. People will forever hate and downvote stories with his character. Its just something any writer who uses him will have to accept.
this story is unfortunately going to get a lot of dislikes no matter what just because flash is in it Now I for one like this story and will add to my favorites keep on keeping on man and don't let the hate get to ya
8190246 In reply to question about Flash in an effort to answer it.
To my understanding when the first Equestria Girl's movie came out, several of Twilight Waifu Bronies we're angry at the idea of Twilight having a love interest. Made slightly worse at the fact that the Human Flash we saw in Canterlot High (Or as Silver Quill called him "Brad") had little personality and thus the romance appeared forced. And since the dialogue Pony Flash Sentry (What little there was) matched with Human Flash Sentry these enraged "Waifu Wailers" thought the two versions would be exactly the same.
And thus Flash Sentry, at first, became the Scrappy Doo of MLP: FIM.
I'm not sure if I'm correct, this is based off what Toon Kritic said in his online interview with Vincent Tong (Flash's voice actor.)
Now that you've made me read it, I'm hooked. I wanted to get some sleep tonight, but that's probably not happening. Thanks a lot, Jack.
Having this chapter in Shining's POV made everything fit in and flow quite nicely. The pacing was great. I was entertained the whole time I was reading it. Everything was introduced well. Very enjoyable.
And Flash's new backstory is great. Interesting, different, and it makes him a completely different pony than the show Flash. It's such a shame so many people disliked it without reading it, just because he's in it. Seriously.
Also, I'd like to hear some more about Cadence and Shining's "special suite."
I'm totally down for this, though I am a FlashLight fan. I'll upvote ya and track for now.
8151735
Thank you!
8151736 I just hope this doesn't end horribly though. I am worried about the Sad tag, but I'll wait and see. Oh, and you're welcome.
Not sure about it being in the first person, but this is a start. Looking forward to the banter between Twilight and Flash to come, following this.
8151740
The "tragedy" tag is reserved for bad endings, if that's any consolation.
8151743
Thank you!
8151748 Okay. I'm down for that. Sounds good to me!
Why is this getting downvoted? There's nothing bad here!
8151948
You're sweet.
He's an unpopular character that very few people like, so it's not surprising that many people will dislike it.
8151953 That's stupid. That means they didn't even try to read it.
8151972
Well, I won't hold it against them either way.
I don't write for the people that don't like the story anyway, I write for the people who appreciate and like my work. Or at the very least, give me a reason as to why it's bad.
8151977 That's good. Sorry for acting like that.
8151980
Not at all, I appreciate that you care.
More to come within the next week or two.
8151983 Sounds good to me.
I like the twist in Flash's personality
8152273
Thank you.
I thought altering his personality would make him more appealing to the public, shows what I know I guess.
Stay strong, Jack. Biased as I am for having edited this story, ponies need to give it a chance, rather than suffer from the down vote Flash Sentry on sight syndrome
Message me in you need me, also you forgot about the bar, eheh.
8152309
I included the line, the bar scene is later.
I appreciate the sentiment. I'm turning it in for the night though, sleeping on it so I don't make any rash decisions.
A good start so far, this seems to have good potential. Have a like, and I'll be following this story to read more. Can't wait for more goodness
8153149
Thank you, I was typing out the next chapter right now as a matter of fact.
8153151 Oooooo, excitement intensifies
Not bad, not bad at all. You have good prose, your style is simple but effective, and you paint the characters well. I like the backstory you gave for Flash, and the relationship between him and Shining. I am wondering how this story is going to pan out if it's all going to be from Shining's POV, though.
Also, I'm a shameless Flashlight shipper, so how could I not enjoy that?
I'll be keeping an eye on this one. I doubt that you will disappoint me.
8153675
My editor may disagree with you on that one.
It switches between first and third person perspectives from multiple pony's POVs.
Given the amount of heat generated from this story already, you seem to be in the minority.
Thanks you for tracking, next chapter is in the works already!
8152309 Nah man, its too late. People will forever hate and downvote stories with his character. Its just something any writer who uses him will have to accept.
this story is unfortunately going to get a lot of dislikes no matter what just because flash is in it
Now I for one like this story and will add to my favorites
keep on keeping on man and don't let the hate get to ya
8155279
Working on it right now, thank you.
I'm already excited for the next chapter. Keep up the good work Jack. U deserve a like.
8174233
I appreciate it, the next chapter is in the making.
I don't understand why the majority of people hates (pony) Flash Sentry it's like the Muffins incident all over again.
8190246
In reply to question about Flash in an effort to answer it.
To my understanding when the first Equestria Girl's movie came out, several of Twilight Waifu Bronies we're angry at the idea of Twilight having a love interest. Made slightly worse at the fact that the Human Flash we saw in Canterlot High (Or as Silver Quill called him "Brad") had little personality and thus the romance appeared forced. And since the dialogue Pony Flash Sentry (What little there was) matched with Human Flash Sentry these enraged "Waifu Wailers" thought the two versions would be exactly the same.
And thus Flash Sentry, at first, became the Scrappy Doo of MLP: FIM.
I'm not sure if I'm correct, this is based off what Toon Kritic said in his online interview with Vincent Tong (Flash's voice actor.)
Now that you've made me read it, I'm hooked. I wanted to get some sleep tonight, but that's probably not happening. Thanks a lot, Jack.
Having this chapter in Shining's POV made everything fit in and flow quite nicely. The pacing was great. I was entertained the whole time I was reading it. Everything was introduced well. Very enjoyable.
And Flash's new backstory is great. Interesting, different, and it makes him a completely different pony than the show Flash. It's such a shame so many people disliked it without reading it, just because he's in it. Seriously.
Also, I'd like to hear some more about Cadence and Shining's "special suite."