Twilight checked to make sure that the toaster over remained on before clutching Cody's iPod. She pressed down upon the clicker, having no luck. She bounced from menu to menu as she tried to get her hooves over the finger-sized buttons. "Oh, hold on, I can get it." Frustration flashed over her features. "Wait-- maybe--" She leaned over and bit against the side of the iPod. She wiggled her head around as the teenagers stared at her, and she blushed. Spitting it out, she politely asked, "Cody, please, can you start playing the 'shuffle songs' feature?"
He nodded and clicked the small center button. Twilight watched with sheer envy burning in her eyes at how Cody's human fingers just took less then two seconds what her hooves would take hours to manage. Cody scratched his cheek before taking a nervous breath. "You want me to turn on the new speaker, the built-in-thingy?" Twilight nodded. He brushed against some sliders at the bottom of the iPod. A slow electronic tap-tap-tap of a synthesizer started to flow through the room.
"You're not actually going to cook his thing, are you?" Robin asked.
"Oh, nothing like that," Twilight said, brushing her mane to get rid of her ragged expression. "But you're still in for an interesting surprise at a moment." She slid the still playing iPod into the toaster oven and shut the door. The music seemed to somehow get even louder, the whole oven used as some kind of amplifier and speaker combo. The teenagers looked on as the electronic dial keypad on the oven flashed rainbow colors, a fluffy of white sparks popping up underneath the whole thing.
"What the hell is going on here..." Graham muttered, stepping a little back.
"Well, in short terms," Twilight said, moving over behind the toaster oven. The white sparks turned bright purple, and stripes of magic-filled electricity shot up and down the sides of the oven. "You're seeing how the electro-magnetic field created by technology from your world functions in a rather interesting way. Your bodies sort of repel magic from your bio-electric fields. But your technology that you make-- your iPods, laptops, Android phones, and so on-- all work sort of the opposite way more like catalysts for collecting and then redirecting magitrons." The teenagers paid her words about half attention, otherwise focusing on the flashing purple aura bubbling underneath the oven. It looked like somepony had a rave right inside the machine.
"Wicked," Cody remarked, feeling totally transfixed.
"Oh, you haven't seen nothing yet," Twilight said, watching as the iPod turned around in the middle of the toaster oven. "Notice, oddly enough, that I haven't even turned the oven to 'start'. I merely left it on. It's magically charged already, meaning that any close or nearly close contact creates interactions between our magitrons and the subatomic residues spouting off from your iPod-- something spontaneously erupting."
"Look, put it in English please Miss Nye the Science Girl?" Robin asked with a bit of playful sarcasm.
Twilight began, "When I--"
"The song's ending," Cody interjected as the instrumental piece wound down. He waited with baited breath right in front of the toaster oven, the purple sparks bubbling around the sides gathering more faint in tune with the music, and his compatriots gathered around his back. Their faces mashed together.
"As soon as this baby starts playing something louder, faster, and more upbeat," Twilight remarked as she wiggled her mane over her shoulders and grinned, "you're gonna see some serious--"
"Jitterbug!" screamed out a familiar-sounding British voice from inside the oven.
"Oh, dear God, no! Not the 'jitterbug' song!" Graham called out, recoling from the group in horror as sweat poured into his thick glasses. "It's like water-boarding torture in song form!"
"Yes!" Cody yelled back, popping from side to side with the finger-snaps that he knew so well.
Robin slid backwards a few inches as the toaster device seemed to light up like a Christmas tree. Waves of sheer energy mixed with an alien-like low hum coursed around the kitchen counter. Cody, for his part, closed his eyes and simply shifted to the beat. He waved his arms in the air as he skidded to the right.
"You put the boom-boom into my heart! You send my soul sky high when your lovin' starts!" sang the voice from inside the toaster oven. Cody kept on dancing with his eyes closed for a moment before spinning around and gazing at the oven. The energy seemed to coalesce into a thick purple coat of sparks around the oven, going all around its surface like a blanket and levitating it several inches into the air.
"Jitterbug into my brain," the song went on. The oven bounced up in down in the air, twirling up on the right side. Cody seemed to have flash after flash of pure joy burst over his face. Robin simply froze with his mouth wide open. Twilight clopped her front hooves in excitement, fluttering her eyes. "Goes a bang-bang-bang 'til my feet do the same!"
"Sweet merciful Jesus the oven is dancing!" Robin finally called out, folding his hands in each other and almost shivering.
"I told you!" Twilight hollered, moving in between Cody's legts as he danced along with the oven. The device hopped rightwards, and Cody leaped to the left. It shimmied in place, and Cody smacked the sides of his uniform. "Human technology catalyzes magical energy."
"Left me sleepin'," the voice in the oven sang on as it spun in the air, the oven's door slapping open and shut. "In my bed, ooh!" Twilight felt Cody gripping her left hoof, and she suddenly looked up. "I was dreaming, but I should have been with you instead!" A few small moves from left to right made things clear, and Twilight slid along the kitchen tiles, feeling more than happy to dance with Cody.
"Oh, God, it's spreading! It's freaking spreading!" Graham shrieked as he saw the same kind of purple aura around the toaster oven bubbling beneath the refrigerator. He fell down to the ground and kicked himself to the door. His eyes grew wide as dinner plates as he saw the refigerator's door bouncing open and shut to the bubbly synthpop tune as well. He shot his glance straight up, and the clock seemed to respond as well-- tapping against the wall behind it. "I'm getting the hell out of here!"
"The more emotionally involved the humans are with their technologies, the more they can seem to control it and amplify it's power," Twilight remarked, giggling, as Cody held her with both his hands on both her hooves. She looked around at the various items from the dishwasher to the refrigerator to the blender to the food processes and more skidding about in place. It all seemed like something out of a dream-- her purple magical aura drained from her own body and rocketed out to the whole room around her.
"Wake me up before you go-go!" sang Cody, spinning Twilight over.
"Don't leave me hanging on like a yo-yo!" sang Twilight back, pulling Cody across the floor.
"Wake me up before you go-go!" Cody sang again, this time watching as the the toaster oven flopped like a fish and rained bright white sparks out the top like a firework.
"I don't want to miss it-- when you hit that high," they both sang together, standing up straight with their hooves and hands both out in victory poses. "Yeah! Yeah! Yeah!"
Cody broke from Twilight and kept on dancing in place. He got really into it, eyes shut tight as he slapped his hands rhythmically upon the counter. "Oooh, gosh, I'm surprised that Pinkie hasn't burst in here yet," Twilight remarked, panting hard. "This is like her favorite song ever. It single hoofedly made her fans of humans for life-- her greatest goal to make it to your place to meet 'the Jitterbug guys', her personal heroes." Cody seemed to melt into another zone, moving faster and faster with some kind of robotic-like energy.
Robin locked eyes with Twilight. "Something seems... wrong..."
"Ah, I think there's a bit too much emotion and a bit too much technological charging," Twilight softly muttered, walking over to Cody. Her happy face faded as she saw Cody jiggling around in place as if he had had a seizure. "Cody?" She shot a hoof into his spinning body. "Cody?"
"Oh, dear," Robin said, drawing Twilight's attention to the toaster oven. "It looks like it's ready for orbit." The toaster oven span around in place like a top with some kind of a purple vortex rippling over it.
"Oh, wow, there seems to be some kind of an audio feedback of some kind," Twilight said, stretching her hoof over to the oven's plug. Cody seemed to half collapse onto her back as she turned around and saw Robin ducking out into the door as well. She gently placed Cody down upon the floor and brushed his sweat-filled hair, the teenager panting loudly, as she saw the refrigerator seem to walk over from its spot on the wall and head towards them. "Feedback... this... is something new..."
"Feedback, doesn't that mean that-- ah--" Cody muttered as the bubbly synthpop song reached its ending climax. The refrigerator poised itself over besides the two of them, door opened wide open. Twilight kicked the toaster oven's plug away, but the device kept on spinning and hovered in the air several feet upwards. "Feedback usually ends in a 'pop'?"
*Boom!*
For a full minute, neither of them had any idea what had just happened. Finally, both Cody and Twilight sucked in huge gasps of air. They threw themselves over the piles of upturned cabinet drawers, cracked jars, bent silverware, and everything else while brushing their eyes frantically. Twilight scurried her body to the side, standing up atop the kitchen island. She slid her hooves from side to side in the thick coating of white flour and powered sugar all where she stood
"What... the... hay..." Twilight whispered. The walls of her kitchen seemed to have held up, but literally every appliance, cabinet, box of foodstuffs, and anything the least bit fragile had exploded into gooey and powdery brown mush. She drank in the damage, hoping that she'd get things repaired as soon as possible. She thanked goodness that Cody, standing behind her and breathing calmly, had made it out okay.
"Oh, God!" Cody screamed. Twilight facehoofed. She took a little breath.
Twilight spun around, and she skidded forwards to Cody's lap. Cody tried his best to wipe off his eyes, but ketchup dripped off from every last inch of his hands. The rest of the former contents of the refrigerator oozed along his body. Twilight stared at the pickles around his eyes and the layers of cold linguini coating his hair. Her eyes traveled down the slabs of sauce-covered hay fries stuck around his neck to the mustard caking his chest and belly to the lettuce sticking all around his legs. And she spotted yet another piece of food on him every other second.
"You need a... a bath..." Twilight sheepishly muttered, blushing. She looked across her clean-looking purple fur, realizing that Cody had shielded her from the confectionery explosions. She blushed even more.
"I need a day long shower and five goddamn weeks of therapy." Cody sniffed. "I can hardly feel my legs anyways. I think I had a concussion."
Twilight suddenly realized the full implications of the situation, her ears drooping down. "I'll get Nurse Redheart here right away!" Twilight called out.
"Oh, Christ," Cody moaned, his fingers going down his belt. "I have pickles down my underpants."
"No worries. I'm on it," Twilight remarked, hopping over the rubble over to the front door and picturing her set of scrolls at the end of the hallway in her minds eye. She knew she'd have Nurse Redheart there in a flash.
Cody then glared at Robin and Graham, both of them hunched besides the front door in the hallway right outside of the kitchen. The two teenagers ran their eyes up and down Cody's food-soaked body. Twilight rattled through an emergency scroll at the other end of the hallway yards away.
"Well, at least you can say 'hi' to Jack for us," Robin said finally, trying his best not to laugh.
Twilight, for her part, teleported herself right to Redheart's clinic herself rather than waste any more time. She felt bad enough losing one human. She only had two left for the rest of the assimilation process, and she didn't think she'd have any more luck moving forwards with these silly teenagers.
"I. Have. Pickles. In. My. Underpants," Cody yelled over to Graham and Robin, ketchup dripping from his teeth like blood.
"I think they have pills for that," Graham whispered, speaking so quietly that he couldn't even hear himself.
To Be Continued...
Gah!
ITs so silly, I can't handle it!
No seriously, stuff like this is out of me league. Call me either when one of them wants to commit suicide or genocide.
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hahahahaha
Well then....
905414
Is that a 'good' "well then"?
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That, and a confused one.
I'm not sure where this is gonna go, but I like.
Baahaha! Oh boy, I know I'm looking forward to more of this
I am one who enjoys poking fun, and you sir have the capability of doing so.
So, more please?
it's here! And totally random, as expected...
Still continuing this, huh? Yeah, I stopped caring when you had that guy forcefully fixed (practically brainwashed), and had that retarded plot line of Twilight rutting all the humans so they would behave. That was seriously dumb, and you made everybody (and every pony) seriously idiotic to a degree that makes this whole thing OOC.
Nice try with the Scamper explanation. It still doesn't work. Everything points to him being forced with an overly bitchy Twilight that sent him to be fixed against his will, have him drink something, then suddenly acting completely different and accepting his new name. All he was to the ponies was a little pet, that's all.
At least this is an AU, and thank God this isn't clop.
I guess I don't like the humans being retarded for no real reason, the ponies being so impatient with them, treating the humans as second class citizens (like pets even), and so on. That may not be what you wanted it to be, but that's how it comes across. For crying out loud, it says "assimilated" right in the description.
WAKE ME UP BEFORE YOU GO GO
908035 yes lest treat all minority species like equals
dogs
cats
elephants
cows
pigs
now they all have rights
that means no more meat
908140 Sapient creatures treating other sapient creatures that come clothed and can talk as they were pets. They treat the actual animals better than the humans. What they're doing is racism to a certain degree. It's like treating a tourist like they were a monkey and they come up with the most convoluted bullshit plan possible that doesn't make an inkling of sense, even giving them new names and everything. It's terrible.
908158 Almost every creature in EQ is just as or near the intelligence of a human if we apply that to our world then the same thing would happen humans would dominate at all other species would be second class. Also Gilda is the only character thus far with a semi human name. My friend Anthony is a foreign exchange student from china when he came over he changed is name to Anthony. The same thing could be applied to the story series that swiper is producing.
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Oh, for Pete's sake, giving tough criticism is one thing but creating a fantasy based on what's not in the story and bashing that straw man is something entirely else. Why are you just antagonistic for no reason other than being antagonistic?
First of all= it says "assimilated" right in the description.
Yes.
Exactly.
"Assimilation".
This story is a silly, satirical take at 'assimilation'. Rather than having three boorish, lazy, and overly typical American teenagers getting stuck in France and having to learn French society as immigrants getting their citizenship-- I made them get stuck in Equestria and learn Equestrian ways. There we are. This is a fish-out-of-water, incredibly silly by design, take at those fish-out-of-water situations. The students are in an assimilation class.
Again, an assimilation class-- they are immigrants. They are not treated as dogs. They are not treated as cattle. They are not pets. For Gods sake, if the ponies just were going to treat humans as second-class beings, then they wouldn't go to great lengths to show them how to use their emigrant country's bathrooms, their kitchens, and so on.
Secondly, as for the plotline of previous fics where having sex was viewed as a cure for human depression and humans were 'fixed' to cure those issues... those were also laced with satire and were silly. They were meant to be silly. Goodness. The idea of sex as a cure for depression is something that I sure as hell didn't come up with myself. And that had nothing particularly to do with being 'second class citizens' or anything like that. Watch any sitcom where characters use sex as a mood boost.
Noone was forcibly 'fixed'. Every human wanted it and enjoyed it. Of course, it was something OOC-ish, but that's just it... I'm shipping humans with ponies in the context of satire. Things will get OOC-ish at times.
Look: criticism is one thing, but it's not fair or nice for you to just make things up out of the air. Again, why are you just antagonistic for no reason other than being antagonistic? I see you posting comments all the time, and it's all flaming of some kind.
908176 Not really, since there are actual critters that can't talk (the pets) versus sapient creatures (like the Minator, Dragons, Griffins, Donkey's, Mules) and they're treated like an actual person, whereas these humans need to be converted (even though they leave) and need to be talked to like little kids, and given new names. This entire thing Swiper is doing is really really stupid, not to mention that these stories of his basically thrives on OOC-ness, especially Twilight.
908193 I guess you can believe it all you want, even if what you write and what you say come across as two different things. What happens in these stories and what you say don't match.
You keep using the word satirical.
--(of a person or their behavior) Sarcastic, critical, and mocking another's weaknesses.--
--In satire, vices, follies, abuses, and shortcomings are held up to ridicule, ideally with the intent of shaming individuals, and society itself, into improvement.--
I don't think you know what that means, and if you do, you're doing a poor job at it.
Oh, and having a sex toy in a bathroom just for the sake of having it as a gag is lame, and it's not fun to read giant dialog boxes.
908198 You live in a calm peaceful world all of the sudden humans show up
they then proceed to viking it up
1 Kill everything which cannot be either pillaged or raped
2 pillage everything which cannot be raped
3 rape all that is left
4 set fire to shit and leave
because honestly the largely defenselessness ponies arnt going to put up a fight
so conversion
making them docile and and less likely to rape / pillage / kill / set fire to shit and leave
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908198
If I had wanted to do a story with explicit human abuse and people being treated as like slaves, then I would have done a story with explicit human abuse and people being treated as like slaves. I wanted to do silly and sometimes sexual things.
To be honest, it seems like the only person viewing the whole series as something nefarious and evil is you. Everyone else seems to view it as a set of silly comedies mixed with silly-ish clopfics about human immigrants and their problems with assimilation.
Just look at it step by step: humans need to be converted (even though they leave) and need to be talked to like little kids, and given new names.
1) humans need to be converted (even though they leave) -- Thus making them like immigrants.
2) talked to like little kids -- Again, thus making them like immigrants.
3) given new names -- Exactly. Like. Immigrants. To. Another. Country.
908217
It's not a sex toy. Of course, most of the fun of this was making the thing ambiguous, but the whole point was that the toilet would clean a mare's parts in ways that would be ideal for her, ah, parts the way in which they are physically oriented-- but it would not feel so nice for a male. Cleaning. It's a toilet, not a sex toy.
And there are occasional big dialog boxes. The story is not built like that. Just-- occasionally.
If you don't think that things aren't that funny, then that's fine-- obviously taste will differ from person to person and it's certainty not like there aren't funnier fanfics on this site. If you don't like the inherent concept, then that's fine, again, people are different. But please stop pretending that the stories say something that they do not.
I just wish that you'd make some kind of actually helpful criticism in the sense of, say, that Twilight would have had X prepared probably or that she'd never call someone by Y or that she'd probably show the humans to learn ABC through another method... and so on. Just going "You are terrible" is not helpful.
Of course, it's your right to say what you want.
The rate of Humans in Equestria is Too Damn High!
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908251 What? These ponies could tear apart humans. Fluttershy got rammed through a tree, and wasn't fazed. I think you're hating on the human race.
908253
The giant portion of the clopfic directory's comments say otherwise (at least, that's what they tell me). This is a site where a transgender Spike story could get the feature, and people who aren't interested in your stories just don't even bother. I had faith in your writing before, but this whole humans needed to be converted whether they want or need to is asinine.
It's all forced, and not very funny. Reading your fics are like a slap in the face, and it has serious dark undertones that apparently you weren't intending to have. Having the characters act so completely OOC leaves a bad taste in my mouth, and you seemed to go off the deep end with that.
Immigrant: A person who leaves one country to settle permanently in another. You don't really know how actual immigration works, huh? They don't need to change their names at all unless it's suppose to be a secret or they want to.
Why would Twilight do that to other sapient creatures? What kind of ambassador would treat newcomers like that willingly? It just seems you have no real idea what you're doing.
Against their choice, whether they want one or not. I guess having a choice is for stupid people. They're not sneaking into a country during war times, they're being sent there and just need to adapt, not changed.
908329 well humans do suck for the most part but have you ever fought a dog (using as example because of size) one time i was in an ally and a street dog attached me. I kicked it in the head and then i held it down till animal control could get there. Ponies of same size couldn't do shit to a fully armed human. also it was RD that got slammed into a tree.
also you take what he writes serious
excuse me while i laugh even harder and get more people to laugh at you
Hilarious. I laughed in rl.
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Pretty much everything you made Twilight do goes against what Twilight would actually do, that's all. She's not prepared, she has no real idea how to talk to other people from other cultures, she's treats the humans like they're complete idiots, she did no real research, isn't very tactful at all, has no real understanding and very little empathy towards them, she forces them to do things against their will sometimes, doesn't explain herself very well (or not at all sometimes), mostly talks like Data from Star Trek, made her and her friends kinda like little whores with a very stupid reasoning, and is kind of an idiot in parts where she would've known better, even in the show.
Like that? That's basically how your Twilight acts in a nutshell.
Sure, she's a little bit socially awkward, but it was by choice, and we really don't see her awkwardness at all. If anything, Fluttershy is the more socially awkward one, since she exhibits all of the traits, while Twilight only has a few, and only because she wanted to be alone in the beginning, she knows how to give speeches, knows how to talk to people, and she never actually knows how to help people without trying to make them feel stupid, even if sometimes that's what happens on accident. She actually has very big patience levels with people not getting what she means, but in your stories, you seem to forget all of those, and only play to her easily angry side (which is more akin to Rainbow) for the sake of "comedy."
Why didn't Twilight just say what that blue thing was, then? "It cleans mare parts, don't use it." "Okay." Of course, then it wouldn't have been funny.
908356
What ever you need to do to make yourself feel better. Usually, those kinds of comments need a gif to accompany them.
Look up Hurricane Fluttershy if you don't believe me about her being slammed.
908399 you mean this picimages2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20120326013416/mlp/images/9/91/Tree_eyes_II_S2E22.png your rite that is totally fluttershy
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Even if it wasn't, my point would still stand.
technically were both correct
908420
908425 Yep.
908429 *shake hand* good day to you sir
908434 *shakes hand back* Thanks, you too.
908329
908399
As for the clopfic directory, it's funny-- because on your userpage you claim that you don't use that site. And it's an anonymous-based site, so I suppose it's certainty possible for you to bash me or others anonymously over there and now cite those comments as a user. You can find it not funny. That's fine. Opinions of that stuff will just differ. That's okay. But I don't see those undertones at all.
Your specific comments... were not specific and are not helpful at all. Again, I feel like you're reading something completely else than what I've written. Twilight is prepared, she's rehearsed things, but she just get flustered at dealing with a particularly less intelligent bunch. Twilight isn't a good communicator and is nerdy/socially-awkward to begin with, and these situations make things worse. I seriously don't get, or I suppose I just don't disagree, at all.
The only thing that I've read out of this whole conversation from you that makes sense is the thing about the toliet. Yes, Twilight should have said explicitly what the chain does. It would have made things less funny. I had her forget about saying exactly what it does. That's a fair point by you but, seriously... that's 'explaining the joke'. That's something that isn't a flaw, it's just... a choice made if you want to do comedy.
Once again, let's look at your objections one by one.
It's racist because ponies forced humans to change their names.
First of all, only some of the immigrant humans changed their names. Most of those humans that did so got their names from Pinkie Pie, who has treated humans nicely the same way that she treats everypony nicely (although she is wacky). Those names are like nicknames. But some humans-- like Cody, Graham, et al in this fic here-- have no nicknames! And the humans with nicknames have varying attitudes-- some really like it. Some don't.
Seriously, immigrants often get nicknames. Someone named 'Abdullah Jesus ___' could be called 'A.J. ___'. It's the same thing here. Again, nothing evil. Nothing nefarious.
It's racist because ponies talked slowly to humans, used short talk, or otherwise seemed to talk down to them.
I've written some ponies just talking bad to humans. Others have been very nice. Other ponies have talked to humans the same what that, say, an American would speak to someone from a farm in Romania who came to, say, Chicago. They've talked slow, they've explained things, and so on. In this fic, we have a class. A class. The humans treat Twilight vaguely akin to a teacher. Again, this is satire about immigration. It's not nefarious.
It's racist because ponies have had sex with some humans to relive their perceived depression.
Again, this was some humans. Some. Other humans have had sex with ponies because they really had an emotional connection and really seemed to like each other. Other humans-- like some in this fic-- won't be getting any from ponies. The idea of curing depression through sex is silly. I know it's silly. I know it's inane. It's meant to be that way, as a comedy thing. No human has been raped. It's all been around about what happens in your usual sitcom about "sleep with me and you'll feel better about your bad day at work" and so on.
I'm going to have to be honest here and say that I don't understand why this is so personal to you. You have this vendetta that I just can't understand. If you really and sincerely hate everything that I've done and consider me a hack writer, then why read my stuff at all? And if you want to express your opinion-- I'm telling you-- give me rational criticism about what specifically to have Twilight do or say that she hasn't done or said and I'll think about it.
If you're not going to give me that kind of rational criticism, and you're just going to insult me, then honestly I'd like to ask why you're doing this in the first place. This argument does none of us any good. I'll give you the last word on this, but I really don't think I should respond to you further.
908445 Well, at least you admit it that it's stupid, even though it really doesn't fix anything. I mean, at the very least you know it's stupid.
You seemed to forget that Twilight, when it comes to new combers (like Zecora and Luna), she's actually the opposite. She becomes understanding and shows considerable empathy and patience that stand in stark contrast to the many examples of her overreacting to a situation and often to other people around her.
>It's racist because ponies have had sex with some humans to relive their perceived depression.
When did I say that was racist? (if I did, I apologies) I said that was stupid, which you yourself admit it is.
>and you're just going to insult me
When did I ever actually call you stupid? When did I ever actually insult you? I don't know you, I just don't like some of your stories. It's not like anyone else here is giving you criticism anyway (to be fair, I was simply telling you why I didn't like your story, didn't know you would take it so personal), they're just telling you how good it is without really giving a real reason.
There was once a story about a raping plant, and the author had the tags as comedy and adventure, and that's it. The author didn't see that a plant that forces it's victims into having sex so it could drink it's cum juices, and it uses an aphrodisiac to do it, and the author doesn't see this as rape. Not at all. To everyone else, yeah, it was, but not to the author, who claims that the plant wasn't raping any pony, it was just forcing them to have sex against their will, which is the definition of rape.
My point is, is that I see the same problem here. You don't think this has dark undertones, but others and I do, and there's plenty of evidence for and against it. Sure, there are actual stories about ponies and humans coming together nicely, but it's too bad you made Twilight and some of her friends into cock socks without so much as a second thought for the most of contrive and stupid reasons, but at least you know it's stupid. Not very funny at all, but stupid nonetheless.
I do respect the fact that you brought up a lot decent arguments to support yourself, and you behave in a nice and calm manner. I like that. If you want, I could add you to my watch list, some of your other stories I kinda like, but this human thing (at least with Twilight) just seems not very funny or very sane.
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I'm going to say this as respectfully and politely as I can. Please don't message me. Please don't watch me. Please don't read my stories and/or comment on them.
I can accept the fact that you just don't like me as a person. That's fine and that's your right. I just don't want this.
908614
Oh, awesome!
I suppose I could have worked that in, but one 80s song in a non-musicial fic seems like a lot to begin with
908496
Okay, so I can't tell you not to read my stuff or anything, that's not fair, and I do see that you like some of my other stuff. I'm glad that you like that other stuff like the 'Cutie Mark Crusader Fanfiction Writers Go!' I'm just saying that I can't spend every, single, time I see you aruging with you about the 'Domesticating' story. Look, I've never claimed that story as something that I particularly view as my very best-- I know that I made Twilight look pretty nasty and went pretty far off on a limb (I do wince when I look back at how damn negative the tone in Domesticating is). Read Nightmare Date and Dash's Tears In The Rain if you want to see where my heart is.
I hope that I haven't offended you or anything.
908990 Don't worry, we're cool, this kind of thing happens. It's hard for me to write with proper inflection, so I probably came across as a shit head, and I apologize. I'll let this go.
How about I finally add you to my watch list and we'll call this good, yeah?
909012
Alright
And than there were two... It's like Willy Wonka in dis bitch :D. Which one will survive?
I still want to know what the blue pully-thingy does,
909012>>908990 I'm sorry to bother, but I want to interject myself here.
Glitch, why does it matter? If you didn't like it, give it a thumbs down, and go about your life. Simple as that. You didn't have to go about this huge crusade-ish type rant about it. It chanhges nothing. Swiper isn't going to change a story (I hope) because one person speaks up about their dislikes of a story line.
And in the end, you both agreed on some things, so you wasted you're and swiper's time.
And swiper, if you change your story or writing style because somepony doesn't like it.
Then I'm gonna hunt you down and do unspeakable things to you.
Do not let people tell you how to write. It is your story, not the viewer's.
*hug*
The chapter was entertaining, and made me laugh.
However, the comments section was a veritable battle of vicious verbiage. I enjoy seeing gladiator contests in the comments section. It pleases me. Continue!
910245
Well I won't change the story or anything, don't worry. I do want constructive input and I take criticism into consideration. I don't appreciate having my stuff referred to as "racist" et cetera.
As for this story here in the future, I have a pretty clear idea in my head of what I want to do in the next chapter. But I need to work out the contours. You've read the 'bonus chapter' thing, and the next chapter here will be somewhat similar. As I've said many times, only Pinkie Pie and Discord are able to break the 4th wall (maaaaaaaaybe the Princesses), and I also don't want to do sexual assault as comedy (even if it is pretty funny) for a teen story meant as lighthearted and cute-ish as this story.
It might be a few days, but it'll be done soon.
911147
Well, I can't go into too much details in this story. I don't want it to be a lecture.
But I'm glad that you like the details in there so far.
911163
Well... ahh...
913975 good, and I know people probably ask you this all the time, but when I get my story posted to a Gdoc, will you take a look at it for me? I want a pro to look it over for spelling, grammar, and such.
Thank you for being you, and not changing to fit the wants of other people.
914037
Sure!
As for the next chapter ' Human Three (Graham)', I have a nice idea for a funny twist.
Thing is, this story here was always meant as stupidly silly and light-hearted 'cream pie in the face humor'-- which is why all the talk about rape, racism, and so on above irritates me-- and I have to keep that ethos going through like every paragraph.
914058 I'm not sure where NG sees any of those thing in this story. Yes in one of your PAST stories humans were forced to get "fixed", but that was an entirely differed story.
Just so you know, right now you're my favorite person on FiMFic, my favorite person on the internet, and my second favorite person IRL.
914086
Well, thanks! Thanks very much!
914104 for some reason I want to kiss you
that was odd.
914114
Well, ah, we could always role play in a group if you wanted. Like the clopfic group. Just sayin'.
{This is a public story here, so I wouldn't want to get the comments too-- ah-- 'you know' }.
914127 My RP group.
914215
Joined! Just start a group comment thread and I'll post there.
And from that day forward, no longer was he known as Cody. From then on he was Pickle-Drawers the Mighty!