Quickbolt has always acted nice. But that was acting. He is truly darker than Pinkamena. You will be surprised. Or not. He would do this for a Klondike bar. He really would. You can ask him. But will his actions get caught and turned around by Twilight? Or will Pinkamena stay with him forever? Read this and find out!
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2nd fic. Can all you awesome bronies/pegasisters/whatever you are give me constructive criticism? Teen rating for a ton of blood. You guys can say whatever you want in the comments here. This wasn't GOOD in my opinion but it was better than my first fic. Check out my life and opinions on Tumblr. My blog thing-a-ma-jigger is Quickblog Daily. If not its Quickvlog Daily. Its 1 of the 2. Thanks for reading and more fics coming soon!
Why was this fic so bloody? CUZ I WANTED IT 2 BE THAT BLOODY! It was really just a random idea with a happy ending!
Alright, Lets see here. where to begin
First off, I'd like to say that I thought this was one of my friends fics he just posted up. Got excited so I read it. Starting to regret that. I showed him the fic. we hated it
A lot
Not to sound like a dick, but...
"Does this mean I'm, like, the King of Death?" probably the most Mary sue/ gary stu line in Ponyfic History. Your character was about as developed as a brick wall. Scenes were so rushed that I had to read them slower, And the grammar was pretty bad, Work on it.Chapters were so small that it seemed you wanted it to be rushed. And it seemed that your character was able to get away with brutal murder in broad daylight. Sorry to sound like a dick, But you asked for constructive criticism, And I ain't entirely nice
Also, That whole plan B thing really came out of left field. Not very good. Your character only seemed to snap out of his little Killing spree only because Twilight kissed him.It seemed so shallow
By the god I know doesn't exist. You really need to improve this fic. Put a LOT more details in it. Describe what the fuck's going on.
sorry to say, But Thumbs down.
HeavyMetalCommunist is out
Ahem.
Would you kindly combine all of the chapters into one?
I don't know what I'm honestly doing with these. Plus I have to really rush with these chapters to write them in two minutes. I promise I will do MUCH better on the next fic. I will be doing ALOT more detail and MUCH longer stories. This is meant to be the worst, weirdest, and just plain stupid story. I needed something to do while I was looking for the most stupid. Please understand it was MEANT to be as bad as it is. Scootachicken, out!
949038 Oh Sweet Raptor Jesus, thank Adivantimos for your statement of bullshittery. I thought for sure this was your best.
Sorry for under estimating you good sir.
I'm still not liking this story though
990489
Understandable.
I'm working on a longer, better story.