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She's an aspiring Pegasus with dreams of fame and fortune. He is a dragon who wanted to change the world and bring all races together in harmony. Although they are old friends, a dangerous accident brings the two closer than they could ever imagine, and even more than they expected.
Collaboration with Sky Charmer, edited a bit by him as well but if anyone would like to help edit it completely or proofread, it would mean a lot.
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ScootaSpike? Now that’s a ship you don’t see very often.
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Right? Hope you enjoy the story
They fight crime!
Talk about a rare ship.
Well, this a quick start isn't it?
I guess I'll see where this goes, though this chapter alone did have quite a few headscratchers and inconsistencies.
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What inconsistencies did you find?
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That would be an awesome idea for another story.
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Right? I love this pairing and wish there was more.
Noice!
I wrote a couple ScootaSpikes back in the day, but nothing with this kind of thought put into it. I like the way you set things up.
That being said, I wouldn't be doing my duty as a friend and reader of yours if I didn't point out a couple things. You have a few run-on sentences. For example:
Not to mention you have word repetition. Like, you use the phrase "draconic wings" again in the next paragraph. Just a bit awkward when reading.
Anyhow, you've got this and I'm excited to see where it goes.
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Yeah, that was my bad. Wrote that part and added that later.
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Maybe that wasn't the right word. I mean, if Pegasi can be struck by lightning while flying, then why would they ever expose themselves to that at all? That sounds like something every Pegasi would be taught at birth to avoid.
Everything else in my mind is probably just nitpicking.
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Well, while I was talking to Inferno about that, I explained it as a 'wrong place, wrong time' sort of thing.
Finally got around to reading this, my body is ready for more!
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Glad you enjoy it so far.
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Yup yup, enjoyed it indeed.
Speaking of enjoyed, was that teat-grab near the end important or something?
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Not really, just wanted to show that you make mistakes when in danger. I don't know. I kind of wanted this to be mature but my Co author was not on board and I go very sexual or dark with my stories and don't hold back. Which is more then most are willing to do with their stories. Just wanted a bit of a tease to show this is not a kid friendly story I guess. I don't bucking know.
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Hey, I'm not complaining! Note i segwayed into that question with enjoyment in mind
I was asking more in good humor anyways. Still looking forward to it, mature or no
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I'm glad then. I'll work on the next chapter with my co author in a day or so. Thank you for your time. Ironically my first Spikealoo is clop, first clop I wrote so if you're into that you might like it.
great job. I enjoyed reading it. more please
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Thank you, there will be more.
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Anytime. You have a great story here. Keep up the great work.
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We shall my friend
Am I the only one who actually didn't understand what she just said?
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It means the council thinks she favors Fancy's voice and opinions over the rest; because the bills he proposes actually make sense, and are not completely idiotic…
Hmmm...
I like the idea of this, no question, and basic story is fine, but it could really use some editing - there are a lot of run-on sentences, weird phrasings or just odd moments.
Still, it's far from terrible and I am interested to see where you go with this, but it could definitely use some work.
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Yeah we're not great with editing but I'm not sure who would be willing to edit. I'll try to find someone to help but glad you enjoy the story so far.
your logic for not healing spike makes no sense as chaos is only law is that it must never follow laws, therefore pinkie applied a rule that discord can't heal spike, thus making it so he almost assuredly has to.
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but thats applying logic to it, and chaos DOESNT follow logic.
Please continue...please?
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We'll try to. I'd like to see this done more as well.
Is this story still being worked on or no?
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To be honest I don't know. Been a while since the other author has been online so I would say no. Sorry.
Enjoy the story but I have a question. What actually happned to Spike, was it just the fall? If so how far was the fall?
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I can't remember. It's been so long I forgot nearly everything about the story. Sorry.
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Ok thanks for replying. Sorry if I'm being rude
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Your fine. In truth I have not been one for ponies In a while.
I miss this story