Equestria has used slaves for far to long,and now they are up against humans they cant crush or beat back into submission
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Shadowflameking
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Dude while I much prefer the brotherhood of steel gotta admit this was awesome and deserves more!
thanks im already gonna make a second one with fighting,its gonna be called "Fight For Freedom-WAR"
also as a note this is unedited,i am in a hurry so i did not have time to ask my editor to help edit it for me,so no criticism unless its positive pls
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CENSORSHIP
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Deleting comments says a lot about the writer as well.
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Why rush?
...(sigh) I'm hoping you meant constructive criticism.
not trying to b a dick when i ask for only positive comments ,if you wanna do something other then that pm,also the reason im in a hurry is i no longer have wifi and im using up my last bit of data to post this,annnnd the data is gone in a sec so bye all hope to talk to you soon
RIP comments, gone but not forgotten
"pour one out for the homies"-Brandon Kado 2017
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If you only allow positive comments, you'll never get any better as a writer. We learn far more from what we do wrong than what we do right.
Good luck.
Gore. Violence. Death. Sci-fi. Crossover. OC. Human.
Yum
There's an amusing irony in the comment section of a fic about fighting against oppression forbidding any negative feedback.
With that said, why is Equestria suddenly a nation of slavers? The Changelings or Diamond Dogs would have been believable, since the former isn't afraid to use mind control and stuff people into food pods and the later we've actually seen attempt to enslave someone. But Equestria? That... just sounds like a cheap excuse to write a hatefic about ponies getting slaughtered.
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rip story boi
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I may not agree with the TCB-inspired stuff about ponies being invulnerable to anything humanity has. That being said, this is just a hate-fic with Fallout themes. Not to mention the forbidding of any sort of negative comments. Would some constructive criticism suffice?
I have to say if you're going to do something like this, it has to be longer. Give us a feel for this being an AU where ponies holding slaves is even possible. Give us villains, give us some serious images, give us more than 2500 words! Seriously, we need more than what amounts to a shorter prologue in a regular novel if you want us to get behind your story/AU.
How I felt looking at the comments section.
Chin up author and keep moving forward.
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Fair enough
Here's my opinion on the story God bless the Enclave and damm everyone else to hell
Ok people,this may or may not shock ya,but this is not a hate fic! Lol this is something i did for fun,ya wanna say its a hate fic then you can go complain to the author of the story below since he inspired me lol
Https://www.fimfiction.net/story/345133/rise-of-the-human-revolution
A few errors here and there. BUT! This so far is one of the best Enclave storys I have ever seen. Favorited.
I don't think they'd call them ponies, they'd more than likely call them "Filthy fucking mutant trash."
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lol yes
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you seem to forget this is something many would call FANFICTION, it can be about ANYTHING I want it to be XD
and sorry for taking so long to reply but I forgot to check this comment section after the first day
While this is a good start. And probably could be turned to a full multi chapter fanfic. It Most of All needs spelling and a little bit of grammar work. That's all
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to be fair I wrote this black out tired XD
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LOL