"Wait, How Many Ponies Did You Hypnotize?"

Hypnosis and Mind Control1,617 stories ·3,861 members

Cloudy Mind is Ponyville's residential hypnosis-therapist. Now, if only ponies could remember seeing her.

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TheKissoftheVoid

TheKissoftheVoid #1 · Aug 13th, 2018 · 2 · ·

You know, I gotta be honest with you; I didn’t think I would like this. The barebones description and the cover art, given what kinds of stories I’ve typically seen follow their like, definitely colored my expectations. I’m happy to be eating crow for those expectations.
I rather enjoyed this. It’s simplistic, there’s not much going on, but it doesn’t feel like there needs to be. This nails the short, fun, straightforward read right on the head, at least for the hypnophiles in the fandom, and the characters, for how little we're given of and about them, are still fun to join for the day.
I see that you’re brand new to the site. Welcome to FIMFiction! This isn’t a half bad way to make your premier, and I look forward to seeing what’s next. Thank you for sharing your story, and best of luck on your future works!

Jaycren

Jaycren #2 · Aug 13th, 2018 · · ·

Thanks for the chuckle, this is well done and entertaining. The ending was predictable but at no point did it need to be a surprise. ALL in all a good one shot. However do work on your opening description a bit. It's something we all make mistakes with. Youbwant to grab people's attention and it frankly didn't. At least not at first look.

Yutah123