So far I don't have a good sense yet of what this story is going to be about. Yes, clearly the Doom guy is here; that's one item that I need to suspend disbelief of. But I also have to suspend disbelief of the whole hidden-lab thing, which has presumably existed for ~1000 years, and seems to have ponies actively working there, despite there being no apparent hints or rumors of its existence. There's nothing wrong with asking the reader to suspend some disbelief so you can do setup for a story, but I feel like it's easy to push too far too fast depending on how much disbelief your concept needs. And I think this is starting to skirt that edge.
But, as with the first chapter, I'm pretty intrigued by what you've got here. It's a lot of setup so far, which is making me hungry to get to more in to the story. But you've got me hooked!
I hope Twilight calls Celestia out on her bullshit. I mean, you see him hating demons as much or even more than you, and the demon banishment spell doesn't work on him, so you imprison him without trial for eternity?
this story could really turn south if Luna's and Celestia's bullshit was left unpunished . Although they could try appeasing the doom slayer ,it would fit his (canon) character the most that he , as force of nature archetype would hunt down his captors , would make for a more satisfying story at least
The Doom Slayer doesn’t belong anywhere that demons aren’t, for he is to kill all that is evil. He doesn’t just kill demons, he violently renders them into non-sentient piles of blood, flesh, and bone. That kind of rage doesn’t belong in Equestria.
Rated "TEEN"?! Oh, man, you're going to have to change that shit...
Also, given that Equestria is a magical land where musicals spontaneously materialize out of nowhere and it's inhabitants are known for breaking into choreographed song and dance at the drop of a hat, I'm honestly going to be a little disappointed if when Doom Guy is inevitably awakened to fight the hordes of incoming demons, the air doesn't thrum with a palpable blood lust and the soundtrack from DOOM 2016 starts playing at absurdly loud volumes as he gleefully tears Hellspawn apart with bullets and bare hands.
- Christian 'I TUNED MY GUITAR DOWN A WHOLE OCTAVE LET'S FUCKING DO THIS' Harisay
9114669 I have R Rated Gore and Violence in all my fics and I only place an M rating on the only one that deals with sex.
In fact for the longest time in this site everyone with violence even reaching R Rating levels used the T rating.
This was because M rated stories could not be found in searches. So most writers tend to agree that only Porn should have the M rating. But then again that has been changing with more and more fics using the M rating when they are just Ultra-violent.
9114117 Celestia and Luna where just too scared at all the corpses and decided to imprison him out of fear. They really didn't want to test if he would turn on them once his targets ran out.
Doesn't change the fact that it is judgmental and downright cowardly as all hell.
I mean, as far as I'm aware, the Doom Slayer is incredibly patient with anyone who isn't a demon or actively attacking him. I can't imagine he'd lose that patience at this point.
9114436 Eh, the demons themselves stopped him before, and nothing happened. Hell still hadn’t recovered when he was released again. Just hope he’s released without needing to kill the inevitable demon invasion instantly. Again.
Interested in seeing how this turns out. Whether it being the depiction that the Slayer doesn't care about kicking demon ass or if he's secretly some intellect under the muteness and ultra-violence. I'm hoping for a middle ground leaning slightly toward the former.
9114333 I don't really think the Doomslayer is the type to slaughter a pair of frightened and well-intentioned pastel ponies over a (admittedly massive) mistake. His original rampage was kicked off by demons killing his pet bunny for crying out loud. I do agree that they've got some karmic retribution coming, though.
So, bets on how long it takes for one of Celestia's researchers to reveal themselves as a demon-worshipper and unleash the fury of hell upon Equestria? I'm putting my money on chapter five.
9115338 oh shoot , i though you had insider information on this fanfic , i did not know daisy the bunny was canon . That gives me the idea for the most apt and interesting punishment . Have the sisters realize that Doom guy's rampage was to protect people that time , which would make his confinement not only undue but also detrimental to the safety of either equestrians or people back at earth ; have them face now that violence can be helpful to protect ponies ; or both .
9114872 He didn't even go after Hayden, despite the guy being more concerned with salvaging the facilities than stopping the demons from invading further.
9119856 Here's the thing, DooM (2016)'s Doomguy isn't an idiot -being able to use a variety of vastly different weapons with ease without much in terms of training is an indication of a pretty good intelligence and flexibility- and while he hates all things Doom... he actually has things like respect... if that makes sense...
Why the elements of harmony always turn things into stone? And it seems like only stone, doesn’t they elements do something else? Wasn’t it that Celestia doesn’t even know on what they do?
Also hope that the slayer gets out and maybe talks by physical violence, grunts, or just have VEGA talk for the slayer. Smillar to Cortana from halo.
This gets better ... Good to know
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but is he truly human at that point.
What is he? Simple. The anthropomorphic personification of Bloody Slaughter.
Remember, faggots: "Demon" is an offensive term.
They froze him and stopped him from killing demons, I hope he punches Celly and Luna in their muzzles!
Keep, going, I'm getting into this already.
Who the buck freezes DOOM guy! You don't piss off a man like that what so ever! Please continue I like this now and am hooked.
So far I don't have a good sense yet of what this story is going to be about. Yes, clearly the Doom guy is here; that's one item that I need to suspend disbelief of. But I also have to suspend disbelief of the whole hidden-lab thing, which has presumably existed for ~1000 years, and seems to have ponies actively working there, despite there being no apparent hints or rumors of its existence. There's nothing wrong with asking the reader to suspend some disbelief so you can do setup for a story, but I feel like it's easy to push too far too fast depending on how much disbelief your concept needs. And I think this is starting to skirt that edge.
But, as with the first chapter, I'm pretty intrigued by what you've got here. It's a lot of setup so far, which is making me hungry to get to more in to the story. But you've got me hooked!
I hope Twilight calls Celestia out on her bullshit. I mean, you see him hating demons as much or even more than you, and the demon banishment spell doesn't work on him, so you imprison him without trial for eternity?
UNTIL IT IS DONE
this story could really turn south if Luna's and Celestia's bullshit was left unpunished . Although they could try appeasing the doom slayer ,it would fit his (canon) character the most that he , as force of nature archetype would hunt down his captors , would make for a more satisfying story at least
The Doom Slayer doesn’t belong anywhere that demons aren’t, for he is to kill all that is evil.
He doesn’t just kill demons, he violently renders them into non-sentient piles of blood, flesh, and bone. That kind of rage doesn’t belong in Equestria.
9113788
"Please call them 'Mortally Challenged'.
9113788
I hope this is a DOOM: Eternal crossover. that would be awesaome!
9114339
True. However, Sisters rendered him unable to do his job for several centuries... that's nto gonna end well.
Rated "TEEN"?! Oh, man, you're going to have to change that shit...
Also, given that Equestria is a magical land where musicals spontaneously materialize out of nowhere and it's inhabitants are known for breaking into choreographed song and dance at the drop of a hat, I'm honestly going to be a little disappointed if when Doom Guy is inevitably awakened to fight the hordes of incoming demons, the air doesn't thrum with a palpable blood lust and the soundtrack from DOOM 2016 starts playing at absurdly loud volumes as he gleefully tears Hellspawn apart with bullets and bare hands.
- Christian 'I TUNED MY GUITAR DOWN A WHOLE OCTAVE LET'S FUCKING DO THIS' Harisay
9114669
I have R Rated Gore and Violence in all my fics and I only place an M rating on the only one that deals with sex.
In fact for the longest time in this site everyone with violence even reaching R Rating levels used the T rating.
This was because M rated stories could not be found in searches. So most writers tend to agree that only Porn should have the M rating. But then again that has been changing with more and more fics using the M rating when they are just Ultra-violent.
9114117
Celestia and Luna where just too scared at all the corpses and decided to imprison him out of fear. They really didn't want to test if he would turn on them once his targets ran out.
Doesn't change the fact that it is judgmental and downright cowardly as all hell.
I mean, as far as I'm aware, the Doom Slayer is incredibly patient with anyone who isn't a demon or actively attacking him. I can't imagine he'd lose that patience at this point.
One can only wonder what will happen once he's free... it's not a matter of if, but when.
Good show.
666 views lads
9114436
Eh, the demons themselves stopped him before, and nothing happened. Hell still hadn’t recovered when he was released again.
Just hope he’s released without needing to kill the inevitable demon invasion instantly. Again.
Interested in seeing how this turns out. Whether it being the depiction that the Slayer doesn't care about kicking demon ass or if he's secretly some intellect under the muteness and ultra-violence. I'm hoping for a middle ground leaning slightly toward the former.
Would'a been neat if you threw in his mark in that blacked out dreamscape.
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Seemed fitting.
9114333
I don't really think the Doomslayer is the type to slaughter a pair of frightened and well-intentioned pastel ponies over a (admittedly massive) mistake. His original rampage was kicked off by demons killing his pet bunny for crying out loud. I do agree that they've got some karmic retribution coming, though.
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Regardless of which one, I personally hope he stays silent. The Slayer has so much personality without uttering a single word.
So, bets on how long it takes for one of Celestia's researchers to reveal themselves as a demon-worshipper and unleash the fury of hell upon Equestria? I'm putting my money on chapter five.
9115338
oh shoot , i though you had insider information on this fanfic , i did not know daisy the bunny was canon . That gives me the idea for the most apt and interesting punishment . Have the sisters realize that Doom guy's rampage was to protect people that time , which would make his confinement not only undue but also detrimental to the safety of either equestrians or people back at earth ; have them face now that violence can be helpful to protect ponies ; or both .
Congratulations, Celestia, you’ve condemned the multiverse to an eternal demon infestation. All because you decided to turn to stone the Doom Slayer.
9114872
He didn't even go after Hayden, despite the guy being more concerned with salvaging the facilities than stopping the demons from invading further.
9119856
Here's the thing, DooM (2016)'s Doomguy isn't an idiot -being able to use a variety of vastly different weapons with ease without much in terms of training is an indication of a pretty good intelligence and flexibility- and while he hates all things Doom... he actually has things like respect... if that makes sense...
Also, he's a bit of a softie on the inside:
9120621
Okay that was really cute.
Why the elements of harmony always turn things into stone? And it seems like only stone, doesn’t they elements do something else? Wasn’t it that Celestia doesn’t even know on what they do?
Also hope that the slayer gets out and maybe talks by physical violence, grunts, or just have VEGA talk for the slayer. Smillar to Cortana from halo.
9134039 This seems like a question to tackle.
Shameless. Self. Promotion.
I'm listening to Civvie 11's DOOM (2016) Review while reading this.