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My name is Steelwing. Lieutenant-Commander Steelwing, fifth squadron.
I have scored at least six hundred kills across sixty combat missions. The press calls me "the last hope of sapient kind". Rookies look up to me. Mares fawn over me.
They're worshiping a lie.
Special thanks to BronyWriter and Georg for proofreading and editing!
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OOf the feeels! :'( Also, cool story so far! (I haven't read all of it)
I'm so proud.
Damn son, you earned yourself a reader.
I often go into "Just want a comment" stories expecting something suffering from new story syndrome and a lack of editing, but, I am overwhelmingly pleased to say that you have absolutely obliterated my fears.
The details gave just the right amount of depth to give me a real understanding of where the characters were and what they were doing.
Additionally, you have some fantastic editors obviously, I only spotted one kinda iffy line in the whole chapter, and I couldn't actually name a spot where a writing flaw detracted from your art. I love the character, his actions, and the baddies.
Unfortunately, I am choosing to be five minutes late to work to write this, and I hope to visit your work very soon mister.
- FireMuffin
P.S. The only flaw in this story is... ITS TOO SHORT! I would love more :3
That was awesome. A drop right into the action with the right amount of information to let you know what brought this and where is this. I would love a series of one shots about this. How many times Equestria has done this... how many Steelwing's were there... was he even real in the first place?
Nobody stops the smooze. It's a team effort.
Well done!
I'm not sure why it's happening, but this site has been pumping out a lot of really good Sci-Fi stories recently. This is one of them.
https://youtu.be/cLoytewvn0g
The one downvote is Steelwing.
keep me from
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missing "through" [maybe, the phrase doesn't parse really well...]
remove
double comma, remove one
Nope... a LOT MORE.
Uh... did you make the calculation of how much energy we are talking? It's A LOT... getting some assumption we are in the range of one hundred exawatt of power... that's about one percent of the TOTAL power output of the sun... If that thing is capable of absorbing that it really doesn't need planets...
Another thing, iron is QUITE dense, half a ton of iron would be a slug of 60x20x50 cm an hovercarriage, whatever it is, seems to be quite bigger.
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Ran the numbers. Each slug has 2.8E16 joules of energy, so 8.4E16 joules total to stop all three. That's 23 terawatt hours, equivalent to about a thousandth of annual energy consumption on Earth. Not terrible to stop, all things considered, assuming magic is an energy-efficient defense.
9677612
Hmm I run to about double that energy amount...
But the real problem is that it is dissipated almost instantly... [On the other hand there is that the ponies managed to accelerate those slug still in a incredibly short timeframe but still order of magnitude longer than what it takes to STOP that in its track...]
9677624
Not necessarily. Steelwing says that the blob appears to break up.
9677650
No it seems not.
It is also use the saying "stop in its track" that is usually meant to indicate a SUDDEN stop. Again it means that it stopped in a fraction of a second, but let's work with a timeframe of a second [not reasonable as it would mean it took fifteen HUNDRED kilometers to stop the slug] that would mean a power output of 48 TWh multiplied by 3600 s you get about 170 Petawatt of power just dumped there, if you go for a more sensible stopping distance compatible with "stop in its track" and get a distance of fifteen kilometers for a stopping time of 0,001 seconds you get 170 ZETTAwatt... that amount of power is completely unreasonable and IF you have something that CAN manage that it is so much OVER the necessity of having a planet...
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The slug has to pass through the blob first, so about one planetary radius. Considering the distances, however, you’re probably right.
9677706
You have waaaaay too much time on your hands.
9678018
The math wasn’t that hard.
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