Trixie returns to her home town of Hoofington at request of her brother. Her journey through town back towards her old home sparks memories of a time long past.
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Hipster Pony Raven Horn
An aspiring novelist, music student, and occasional artist. Also occasionally a grey pone.
Hipster Pony Raven Horn
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A solid story that I've enjoyed.
However, although that I'm not a native speaker, so I can only speak for myself, I've found some sentences to be... gramatically off. There are also some minor punctuation problems. Nothing jarring, though, it was readable and enjoyable.
4.5/5, anyway, I'd like to read more.
I like it, there's some improvements that could be made but overall it's a rather solid story, 4/5.
Well done, keep it up. (And fix a few tiny errors)
I see, I see
Wow, talk about underrated. Published in 2011 and less than 950 views? I wouldn't say it's on par with Bubbles, but it is still fine nonetheless.
Wonderful piece. Lots of emotion. Well told.
Really shines Trixie in a new light. Very well done.
*slowclap*
A very moving piece well done my friend well done have a couple of these
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YOLO! I'll check this thing out.
That was a very nice, short story of the quality we rarely get on this site anymore. 4/5 Would read again.
Very heart touching story, it was an amazing story very emotional. I loved this story
Old story is old.
Gawd, man. The feels I'm getting from this are...well, remarkable! The emotions portrayed here are spot-on, and the flashbacks didn't seem intrusive as they so often do.
All in all, great job.
Nice story.
I find that I agree with everyone else--but the emotion from me came from the build-up and the backstory around it. The actual death of the mother felt... lackluster. It was rushed, and it felt like you didn't really care to write it that well.
Overall though, this story was wonderful. Good job!
Also: this was the oldest story on my favorites, hehe.
Well, I'll be the odd one out... I neither liked nor disliked this story. It had its moments, certainly, but I just didn't feel the spark that would bring it truly to life. Could do with a proofread (especially for punctuation) but otherwise quite well written. It just didn't grab me.
AWESOME! It gives Trixie more depth. I think u could have added another chapter though.
