Coriander Cumin and his daughter, Saffron Masala, are struggling with their restaurant. Business had been good and the reviews had been good, all except for one.
Esteemed food critic, Last Word, gave their restaurant a very scathing review. It was a crushing blow to their image as mob mentality settled in and less ponies frequented the establishment.
They need help keeping it open, so they turn to the only stallion they can think of that could be of any assistance, Tirek's Kitchen owner, Gordon Ramsay.
Will he be able to help them or is it a lost cause? Read and find out.
Chapters (4)
Eeyahoo!
I wish Gordon Ramsay Restaurant Dash had the Tasty Treat as a venu.
So AU where Ramsey, not Pinkie and Rarity save Tasty Treat? Just remember Ramsey isn't all swearing and insults.
You have my attention. I prefer Hell's Kitchen to Kitchen Nightmares, but this should be fun. Hopefully, this goes as well as the "Mama Maria's" episode instead of the "Amy's Baking Company" episode.
Eee i love Gordon Ramsey!!!!!!
9234039
I know that.
9234088
I hope so too.
Hopefully Gordon has a similar experience to the one he had in the episode with Momma Cherri's Soul Food Shack.
Does Ramsay have permission from Tirek to use his name and image?
9234512
That would be good.
9234701
I don't think he needed it.
Oh hell. Coriander is going to screw everything up, I just know it. Also, word of advice? Try and tone down the swearing just a bit. Seeing the word "Shit" 4 times in a a single paragraph coming from SAFFRON is just really awkward. From her father or Gordon, I could understand, but not from her.
9235140
She was frustrated, couldn't you tell?
"We both know that, but I have to repeat that for the audience's convenience". Frankly, the whole conversation between Saffron and her father is kinda stiff. Like, does anyone actually say "I will return momentarily"?
9235346
You make a valid point. Appreciate you being real about it.
9235154
Yeah, but the same swear 4 times is what threw me off. I half expected some swearing in Indian or something.
9235796
Oh facts.
9236247
uhhh...what?
9236366
I agree with you. I'll just omit the swears in that paragraph and it'll be fine.
9235346
I made a minor change to it. It's still mostly the same cuz I know if I keep changing it, I'm gonna end up rewriting the entire chapter and I haven't got the time or patience for that.
9235154
I like the swares groden ramsy swares alot ur fine
9238533
Thanks.
Ooooh, That explains quite a bit. I guess Pinkie and Rarity DID save it, but something happened afterwards that caused them to falter and start failing.
9241871
Yes. That's what I was trying to get at.
It's a similar situation as in the first chapter. Try to work the backstory into the narrative rather than having one character tell that to the other.
9242744
Oh ok. I'll be sure to work on it
Thank you.
I’VE EATEN THIIISSS
9345660
Yeh buddy.
Not bad. Kinda feels like their wasn’t much conflict though.
9453427
Thank you. I didn't think there was much either, but it was intended to be a funny feelgood kinda story.
9453458
Much obliged!
I got to say that the dialogue is kind of wooden. But, you nailed Chef Ramsay's personality spot on. Like, I could hear his voice saying those things in the exact tone, cadence and volume he actually speaks with.
9457084
I'll be real, I didn't watch season 6 at all.
9457768
You don't need to in order to get the chef's personality right. Just enough to understand it.
9458240
I appreciate that.
Well that last chapter was rushed to fuck all
9527282
Yeah, I was neglecting it and was like: "Oh shit I need to finish this."
I might flesh it out later. Thank you for the honest feedback.
9527371
see that you do
9527380
Yes sir.
https://giphy.com/gifs/transparent-12OVdvkr6sBPDG
If Gordon Ramsay comes back and the kitchen is dirty he is gonna flip his beard
Is he meant to be a ponyfied Jean-Phillipe? Because JP's Belgian, not French.
11475829
They speak french in Belgium as well as German.
11481347
I know that. I just get annoyed when something Belgian, say Poirot, is mistaken for French.
11481348
Ah yeh. I can see how that could upset people.