After the Changeling Queen tried to take over Canterlot, she was banished to the other side of Equestria. Now she and her minions are trying to take over Prince Moleighs' kingdom, now its up to him to keep them in order. Then one night exhausted after another changeling battle Moleigh walks home but takes a different route home and is ambushed by changelings, He is unprepared and suffers terrible damage... Read story to find out more!!
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Thoughts should be in italics in order to differentiate from regular dialogue. I'd rewrite it like this:
Overall though, it's an interesting story. Keep going!
3277371 Thanks for reading and many more for the help with writing