Twilight needed something else to write about. Friendship was amazing and there was so much to learn from it, but, there was something more she needed to write about, something more she wanted to experience herself...
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Timeline: Before Season 3. Inclusion of newer episodes: Minimal.
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Story Status:
Everything is now in the updated format. Reworked the story a little here and there, but nothing too drastic. Still won't be pulling it off hiatus quite yet, but once I have more done planning and written-wise, I'll pull it off hiatus. Other than that, enjoy the new chapter. :)
(Wouldn't mind having some new cover art of Blu and Twi, but I can wait. Fanart doesn't grow on trees, and neither does money for commissions.)
Chapters (4)
Well this wasn't that bad at all seemed rushed though but over all very minor spelling errors and the sentences flowed well.
just try to not rush into things
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Thanks
It might seem a little rushed still for the next chapter though. I can't manage to keep it slow enough, but I'll try my best to work at it. I'm usually good with grammar and spelling. Though I do have minor slips now and then. I almost spelt Manehattan as Manehattion.
Nevertheless though, I do hope they'll be pointed out so I have a chance to fix them.
Lol yeah i just finished my very first fic the other day and i had all sorts of grammer problems, luckily i have a proof-reader lol but one thing that sometimes helps is reading it out loud to you'reself. sometimes it lets you think of how to make it longer or fill in some blanks yadda yadda. lol anyway i look forward to see what you do with this
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Lol.
Thanks for the tip. I'll see what I can do.
Oh, and *yourself.
1139928 Lol i always get your and you're mixed up even though i know the difference XD and you're quite welcome.
Anyway's, thanks for all the views on the story so far and enjoy.
Well then it wasn't bad the info was well recived and wasent boring really. Although Twilight was alittle out of character in my opinion, can't really see her use the word "cool" thats closer to rainbow dash and twilight rushed that last bit with having him over at her house so quickly to help her reorganize books. But this is just one pony's opinion
Good luck with later chapters!
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Many thanks for the feedback and luck.
I will probably do a whole story revision after I complete most of it. Now if I'd stop being so lazy, I might actually get the next chapter out, like later tonight or sometime tomorrow.
Hope to see more people with feedback but thanks for being here to help out.
1263775 No problem /) and sounds cool to me
i tend to be lazy when it comes to getting chapters out as well lol and i know what it feels like to not get feed back and waiting forever lol so im happy to help.out.
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(\ Lol.
Well, glad I'm not alone then. I'll take a look at your works as well, seeing that I owe you.
To adventure!
1267152 Lol you own me nothing, but at the same time i will not stop you as it makes me happy if my storys make people get enjoyment out of it.
Yay!
I finished the third chapter!
Oh, and you can thank the delay on PROCRASTINATION!
Seriously though, enjoy. You've earned it.
Things are coming along perfectly
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You really helped brighten my mood.
Many thanks, friend.
Ah, finally read the new chapter. So far so good; the flow is good and no grammar or spelling errors. Well done!cdn.broni.es/images/emotes/mlp-pplotting.png
Hmm. Not bad! Could use a TAD more description/smoothing.....
but worth a thumbs up and a star! *clicky*
2006956 Ah, a sign I should keep working on this thing. I'm in the process of re-planning out the whole story since I hadn't before. But I'm also working a lot on "Welcome to Equestria!" so it may take some time before I can pull this story back from hiatus.
Thanks a ton for your comment though! It really inspires me to not forget about this thing that started this whole writing business for me.