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Two chapters in.. and now I'm definitely in.
9691324
Thanks! Next chapter we'll see the battle and the prices of power
Well. This is interesting. A forge of souls like in the divinity games.
9692099
Yeah I decided that I would play with what a merger like this would do to the ones involved. I haven't played the games yet, they pretty good?
9692180
They are, especially divinity original sin 1 & 2. Fully recommend them.
9692223
I'll try them when i can, may give me story ideas
Great chapter, look forward to see what going to happen next.
9703562
Thanks! I plan now on showing how rough the word is but at the same time how hard it is for a jaded world to believe in something like hope when one of the two people willing to change things is an enemy
Hmm, now That's pretty dam OP. Guess Twilight and Spike are going to be in a romantic relationship in the future too.
9706719
It was a bit OP here but seeing as this was their first connection and the dragon instincts overpowered them both, the times they use powers after this will actually be weaker since for control they will let go of some of that power. Now their power will be based on how close they are and the trust they put in each other so it would take time for the two to become true friends. As for romance, I don't have that much trust in my writing to actually portray a really good relationship so there will be moments where the two are that close but maybe in the end that could be something not sure how far to take that. The Alchemist's Dream story is how I would take it, hints here and there but that is background compared to the stories told.
9706999
I see. At first I thought you were building a relationship between Flash/Twilight and Ember/Spike. But with the exile of them both, I now wonder if that changed to Spike/ Twilight.
9707070
Yeah that was what I was going for, I do know that this isn't the last time we see Flash or Ember but the two are forced to be connected, bound together forever by their choice and later they will see what they had given up, Twilight a potential boyfriend in Flash but I never see her actually ever giving it thought since she was focused on the good of the world and Ember cares for Spike but would have never admitted it really. Not being the feeling type. I can say that I'll try to give both characters all that they deserve I know that not of people like Flash but he seemed cool the times we saw him and want to give the character respect and Ember well I like her a lot and try to make her important in my stories.
9707273
Flash doesn't deserve such hate, its so overblown unfortunately. Ember is just a tsundere. Oh well, do whatever you think makes the best.
9707616
I'll do my best!
I think it is a little strange seeing Spike and Twilight interact with eachother as if they were friend, but that maybe the effect of the bond.
I like the fact that Celestia don't hate dragons show that she don't want the war but she has to deal with it.
Also, great chapter.
9731970
Yeah the bond more or less helps the two understand each other but they will have problems being born and raised on two sides of a war, something you'll see soon enough!
incredible isos
So war is for now, my friend.
interresting, you remind me of my fic where there is also a war of dragons against ponies
and the spike lost his parents in the siege
that sad
this war is turning into a bloodbath
9732641
Thanks! Yeah the premise of the war is one I saw in other stories but thinking it through that would change a lot. One Spike would have dragon parents and be raised in the Dragon Lands but still be short and rather weak. Endless wars like this never truly go anywhere and happen to become just another part of life. I bet they don't even remember why they are fighting and are because it's all they know what to do. A mindset like that destroys people and leaves them scarred while going the opposite way, completely ignoring war or trying to imagine nothing is wrong, can prove to be insane. Something we'll see soon.
9732651
I have ma fic spíke x twilight created next to a co-author, but she is in my language, Portuguese
and in it a hundred years war between ponies and dragons occurs because of a tragedy involving the two species
and this war is also very sanguine bringing pain, death, misery and fear on both sides
ps: I'm using translator to make the comments and talk to you
9732688
That's cool and translators can be like that, my story will focus on the war and the horrors it brings but also on the difference a handful of people can make if they have the will to stop it. Hope is a defining point in all my stories and the importance of it.
Early in the chapter, after all, the twilight family died in childhood and waited where the shiny armor was at that time?
and celestia tortured the spike
this makes me angry, and war crime
and put them with this magic wall will really get bad at some point, already realizing it
and this spell of soul liaison and very interresting colleague, but I consider a black magic in my eyes
9732785
I couldn't read that at first but I found the place you mean, Shining Armor was training in Canterlot when his and Twilight's parents were killed and Twilight was brought to Canterlot after this. The torture is bad but also shows that the princess knows about the power of dragon's will and that this war has changed her. The spell Twilight used to soul split with Spike is dark magic which is why Celestia never wanted her learning it.
It was very good this chapter
but the ember with may have managed to defeat the spike before colleague if he has part of the powers of Twilight, to have access to her soul
And Celestia speaking of the dragons gaining, the levels can be the same and they want to know
and the own celestia said that the oensi treat with disrespect certain prejudice to the dragons
and the ember and sober even the colleague
after all she beat another dragon to demonstrate she wants blood
and companion, this continuing war will certainly cause the end of this world
You bet it.
continue as fast as possible
hmm, convenient that such a village would exist and that they were close by.
I think you should change " I was such a fool and now all either of us has is each other" to " I was such a fool and now all we have are each other"
and "... and even the support of my people what little they ever offered. " to " and even the support of my people after what little they have ever offered. "
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True but they are a few days away from Canterlot and lost in the Everfree if you wanted to hide a peaceful village why not hide it in the shadow of a bigger target and hidden in the one place that the dragons and ponies never cared to ever attack.
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Thank you! I'll change it
9732807
thanks for this explanation about Shiny Armor
I do not understand how he did not die with his parents.
9740195
No problem I should have made it more clear
Hmm, so Celestia is going to be a villian it looks like. Well ok.
9768607
I still am more or less on the idea, not so a villain as someone who is tired of fighting and wants to win by any means necessary. A big mystery of the story will be how the war started and the part Celestia had in it seeing that she was at the beginning. The big point later will be that the dragons and ponies are both wrong in the end.
9768908
I see.
So when will spike get his wings or if he’ll get his wings?
9772635
Hmm in this story I'm not sure when he or twilight will get their wings, I suppose later when the story feels right I'll think about adding that element but it will be a while before that.
good here my comment about ep
really this story is very good colleague
interesting the spike say that the dragons have an order of power by force
they remember certain barbarian tribes of europe
and you can see that the poenis in this geurra are also pretty brutal next to the dragons
and just imagine them catching the eggs or the dragons themselves breaking the eggs
make my heart break in half and too cruel that mate
and hydra really is one of the most feared magical beings in this universe apparently,
after all she can make her head grow, produce poison
And what made Celestia and Luna leave their former dwelling?
and cool stuck a hidden city of this bloody war
9773305
Hmm I may show the Castle of the Two Sisters and the reason it was destroyed later as to make them leave it would be a huge deal
9773309
ok
I would like to see this saw friend
9778306
I decided on how to show introduce the castle into the story and if you are a Fluttershy fan i think you'll like it.
that last ending paragraph, only words I have to say for that is 'oh shit'
Also is it implied that big mac is dead since he was probably drifted into the army?
9814262
Yeah and that's just a matter of bad luck since AJ and Spike weren't trying to send out that fire. Applejack will now have a dragon problem and all of Ponyville is in trouble.
Big Mac isn't dead but he is far from Canterlot or Ponyville so the family doesn't know much other than they get letters every month or so but it's their parents who are dead from dragons and that is what pushed Big Mac to enlist. He chose it and AJ would have also but someone needed to stay with Apple Bloom and Granny Smith, so dragons are what broke up the Apple family. i'll clear all this up in the story in the next chapter or two
9814290
thanks for clearing that up.
9814307
No problem! I'm glad to clear things up since it's usually my fault for not adding all this in the story
Might want to explain later how Twilight and AJ know each other.
9817843
They met really briefly in chapter 1 or 2 AJ was selling some apples. Applejack said that if Twilight went to Ponyville ever that she would have a friend there
9817844
That must have been a blink and u miss it. Might want to expand on it.
9817880
It kinda was, I'll put a line or two reminding the reader how the two met in the next chapter. It will be called The Battle of Sweet Apple Acres
9817887
Alright.
oh no the suspense is killing me and i cant wait to find out what happens next
9819181
Heh you won't have to wait too long, a week at most as I'm feeling really good about where I'm taking this story
My God!
What a terrible thing to have done Twilight suggested a brainwashing just to have more massacre
although the dragons are not saints and have done their evil
my goodness and I already realized what applajack has against friend dragons
Your family is suffering because of them and my goodness Garblo is coming to ponniville
thing is not coming
this war has to end once and for all