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The Bricklayer

The Bricklayer #1 · Jul 16th, 2019 · · · Prologue: Coming Storm ·

So let the adventure begin... Now, how long is it till our lead is driven crazy like all other Wastelanders are bound to be? Seriously though, great start Twiwee.

Pwincess Twiwee

Pwincess Twiwee #2 · Jul 16th, 2019 · · · Chapter 1: Deceptions ·

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I hope I can carry that momentum with it, I really do - I've lost the plot on so many stories between remembrance and this one that I'm just - I'm worried about my ability to complete

The Unhappy Camper

The Unhappy Camper #3 · Jul 16th, 2019 · · · Chapter 1: Deceptions ·

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Don't worry were here to give you moral support to keep on wrighting

The Bricklayer

The Bricklayer #4 · Jul 16th, 2019 · · · Chapter 1: Deceptions ·

“Chems, you’ve been making Chems,” I said with a frown and a sigh. “Look, how you decide to lead your lives is fine, I’m not going to judge you for your bad decisions.”
“That’s technically a judgment,” The second colt said with a chuckle, I looked to him and he just quickly looked away.

Okay, credit where it's due, that's pretty damn funny.

“Why die tired?” I said, chuckling a little. “I’d rather die on my hooves with a rifle at my side, then die in a cage cowering and waiting for the end the come, not to mention you never know what is going to happen if you never try, hold onto some hope for a change.”

Least someone has some sense around here, thank god. A soldier doesn't die in cowardance. No, she dies with her gun in hoof and enemy in front at the gates

Pudge finally reacting, sitting up and looking to the both of us, his eyes red and his cheeks stained from tears. “Can we just not, okay? They aren’t going to kill us tonight, so just… relax, we have all day tomorrow to do something and we’re not going to all be caught in the moment… so just relax, and try and get some sleep.”
I paused, took a deep breath and sighed before just going to the opposite end of the cage we had been put in, taking my pack off and cradling it against my chest as I laid down and tried to close my eyes. The sound of the griffons laughing and singing their par shanties making it nearly impossible to get any sleep.
Tonight was going to be a very long night…

Loved this little bit, humanized the griffons a little. Just a little, but it made them more than just evil monsters.

“Sweetheart, don’t get me wrong - You’re a nice filly and all, and it’s a shame you’re going to be some heartless pony’s slave for who knows how long, but you couldn’t earn the purse I’ll get for selling you in several years worth of time, it’s just not worth the investment.” He said with a shrug. “Not to mention, plenty of time for you to turn your back on me or outright kill me, too much liability not enough reward, get used to the idea of a bomb collar, you’ll be wearing one for a while.”

Okay, I officially love Cee. A slaver with a heart, who'd have thunk it...

The Bricklayer

The Bricklayer #5 · Jul 16th, 2019 · · · Chapter 1: Deceptions ·

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I'm sure you'll do fine. You just gotta have confidence Twi.

Trooper

Trooper #6 · Jul 19th, 2019 · · · Prologue: Coming Storm ·

A good start. I like the concept of a rival company to Stable-Tec. The fact they designed the stable to save everypony in the village instead of just those who had purchased "Tickets". Not only that but the fact that you have changed the name from an overmare or overstallion to that of Director. Good thinking.

The Unhappy Camper